The time has come

Philosopher

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The time has come.
Fortunes play, grating down on my foray.
Goodbye the moontide shallow deep.
Into heavens gate I steep,
my lonely soul down gray face shallows.
The dark pool abiding,
howls.

 

Philosopher

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Forget not me
in absence
wake
yourself to blunders
an old mistake
cherish nighttime
continuance
forget not me
nor let me wilt
 

Philosopher

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Endless rimming through the ear
contineering from your gear
I ate the poptarts.
But they weren't here.
 

Philosopher

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lol

hmmm...maybe I can fix it....

Endless rimming through the ear
contineering from your gear

....nope. I took out the poptarts, but I can't think of what to replace em with. Help me out here, guys!

 

ChrichtonsGirl

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Not to intrude on your little poetry session here, but



<< Endless rimming through the ear >>



Why are you rimming somebody's ear?

 

Philosopher

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Endless rimming through the ear
contineering from your gear
slyly opening hot desire
chomping on the crunchy fire

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hows that?
 

Philosopher

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Well, it annoys the heck out of me that my dorm doesn't have highspeed internet! Which means I'm relegated to these damn school computers for downloading. I have a bunch of dbz eps I can't watch cause these comps don't have realplayer, and it won't let me install it! grrrr.
 

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Philosopher, that's awesome stuff man. But hey, you want to be a good poet (and i'm speaking from very little experience in poetry but as a journalist and essayist). Drop flowerly language and vague imagery to make a point. solidify imagery towards a purpose