Sorry for the long absence, but i'm BACK!!

[Cheetara]

Hi guys!!! It's been a while since I posted, but I wanted to say that i'm back and the poetry juices are a-flowin' again!!

Much love to you all! Here's my latest, about common day occurrences - enjoy!



It seems like an eternity
Since you went inside.
Click, the door shut.
And you had your salvation.
While I,
I burnt and wept and writhed.
Hoping I could hold myself together, waiting for you.
The pain you gave me seemed for a moment, unbearable, uncontainable.
And then, my wait was rewarded.
There you were, a picture of calm, as unruffled as the ocean on a sunny day.
And it was my turn
To attain salvation.

 

[isasir]

Sounds like the typical YAGT here.

 

[Krazy4Real]

i don't know who you are... but hi.

 

[Cheetara]

hello!

 

[Cheetara]

I was inspired to write this poem as I waited in line for the bathroom.

 

[NuclearNed]

Originally posted by: Cheetara
I was inspired to write this poem as I waited in line for the bathroom.

I came into this thread all set and ready to ridicule a noob, but by golly that was a pretty good poem in light of its inspiration.

Kudos.

 

[jhayx7]

Originally posted by: NuclearNed

Originally posted by: Cheetara
I was inspired to write this poem as I waited in line for the bathroom.

I came into this thread all set and ready to ridicule a noob, but by golly that was a pretty good poem in light of its inspiration.

Kudos.

Same.

Was itching to rip into a rhyming noob poem.

 

[Maximilian]

Welcome back random person

 

[SsupernovaE]

I was inspired to listen to the Thundercats intro because of you.

 

[rikadik]

I thought that poem was a bit of a whinging emo rant... then You told us your inspiration, and suddenly its genius!

Good work!

 

[randay]

Originally posted by: SsupernovaE
I was inspired to listen to the Thundercats intro because of you.

Thunder thunder
Thunder thunder
Cats, ho.

 

[JujuFish]

Originally posted by: SsupernovaE
I was inspired to listen to the Thundercats intro because of you.

Glad I'm not the only one reminded of the Thundercats.

 

[dennilfloss]

I don't know you but welcome back.

 

[MisterJackson]

SNARF SNARF!!!!

 

[BlancoNino]

Originally posted by: dennilfloss
I don't know you but welcome back.

OMG 13999 posts!

 

[Panthro]

Looks like I'll have to bring around the ThunderTank

 

[thecrecarc]

and you are......

 

[Reckoner]

Chikaka!

 

[maziwanka]

hahahahahaha. this is hilarious

 

[Mrvile]

Haha that was a nice poem.

I've never seen you before but welcome back!

 

[FoBoT]

hi poem dude

 

[SonnyDaze]

Hi. Your avatar looks real familiar but can't say I know ya.

 

[bennylong]

Originally posted by: Cheetara
Hi guys!!! It's been a while since I posted, but I wanted to say that i'm back and the poetry juices are a-flowin' again!!

Much love to you all! Here's my latest, about common day occurrences - enjoy!



It seems like an eternity
Since you went inside.
Click, the door shut.
And you had your salvation.
While I,
I burnt and wept and writhed.
Hoping I could hold myself together, waiting for you.
The pain you gave me seemed for a moment, unbearable, uncontainable.
And then, my wait was rewarded.
There you were, a picture of calm, as unruffled as the ocean on a sunny day.
And it was my turn
To attain salvation.

Is this from the Bible, John 3:16? or was it Paul 4:20?

 

[MagnusTheBrewer]

You walk alone. Always remember, any moment may be your next. Try it as a haiku maybe? The lyrics suck but its got a good beat.

 

[mobiblu]

If your not a hot single female, then I don't care....but "hi" anyway.