songwriting

[punchncrunch]

I'm in a songwirting slump and everything I do seems to be too complex or too simple, I cant seem to decide on a verse an d chorus, or where to put the bridge. Do you think I should write lyrics first or do you think I should write the rhythm first. I play guitar.

 

[chuckywang]

A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.

 

[MartyMcFly3]

Most artists write lyrics first then come up with the music

 

[Ns1]

Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.

My dipsht brother told me he was gay

 

[MartyMcFly3]

Originally posted by: NeuroSynapsis

Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.

My dipsht brother told me he was gay

So I ran far far away
On that Red November Day

 

[Pepsi90919]

it helps the more you experience life.

 

[punchncrunch]

you think lyrics first?

hmmm

I cant seem to tell how high quality my lyrics are, and I'm very indecisive, good advice though.

 

[JulesMaximus]

Originally posted by: MartyMcFly3

Originally posted by: NeuroSynapsis

Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.

My dipsht brother told me he was gay

So I ran far far away
On that Red November Day

Until I turned gay...ooh yeah!

 

[shira]

Originally posted by: MartyMcFly3

Originally posted by: NeuroSynapsis

Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.

My dipsht brother told me he was gay

So I ran far far away
On that Red November Day

And then I was hit by a truck filled with avocados,
and they've got me needled up like Terry Schiavo

 

[Plifzig]

The sky turned red on that November day
As I tried my hardest to look away
Then I thought of something that you might say
And it turned my November into May

 

[imported_rayc]

my friends smoke weed before starting their song writing ventures. they claim their high is a higher mental state. lol.

 

[Saint Nick]

http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^

 

[punchncrunch]

ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.

 

[shira]

Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.

With those lyrics and a fantastic melody, you have half a good song.

 

[punchncrunch]

Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^

awesome dude

 

[EyeMWing]

Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.

Run with it. Sounds good.

 

[shira]

Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.

Seriously, through. Those lyrics don't "scan". Dreams "fade", "die", or "turn into nightmares". And you might refuse to "relive" past regrets, but "tasting" them sounds a little goofy.

 

[EyeMWing]

Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^

Mad respect. The industry needs people like you; they forgot how to write music that doesn't suck.

 

[Saint Nick]

do you guys like my crappy mic action? its a pc mic lol played two guitar parts and a bass part through it

plus thats not the whole thing anyways. i haven't finished it. i just threw it together today.

 

[Ns1]

Originally posted by: rayc
my friends smoke weed before starting their song writing ventures. they claim their high is a higher mental state. lol.

lol

funny it just makes me hungry and want to vegetate in fronf of the tv or go to sleep

 

[JulesMaximus]

Originally posted by: shira

Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.

Seriously, through. Those lyrics don't "scan". Dreams "fade", "die", or "turn into nightmares". And you might refuse to "relive" past regrets, but "tasting" them sounds a little goofy.

Past regrets? If you regret something it isn't a past regret...it's a current regret, or just a regret.

Maybe, past mistakes I refuse to regret.

 

[Plifzig]

Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^

Let the riff in the first half continue into the distorted portion and see what happens. Sounds Tool-ish in the beginning which translates into badfvckingass!

 

[Saint Nick]

Originally posted by: Plifzig

Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^

Let the riff in the first half continue into the distorted portion and see what happens. Sounds Tool-ish in the beginning which translates into badfvckingass!

i am heavily influenced by tool. its cool that you can tell

 

[Plifzig]

Originally posted by: jndietz

Originally posted by: Plifzig

Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^

Let the riff in the first half continue into the distorted portion and see what happens. Sounds Tool-ish in the beginning which translates into badfvckingass!

i am heavily influenced by tool.

Can't get much of a better influence than that, musically. Can you loop the riff throughout the whole tune?

 

[Saint Nick]

Originally posted by: Plifzig

Originally posted by: jndietz

Originally posted by: Plifzig

Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^

Let the riff in the first half continue into the distorted portion and see what happens. Sounds Tool-ish in the beginning which translates into badfvckingass!

i am heavily influenced by tool.

Can't get much of a better influence than that, musically. Can you loop the riff throughout the whole tune?

yeah i could actually. what i posted is only a snippet for people to hear, but i have the entire thing in my adobe audition. i could loop it easily.