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punchncrunch

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I'm in a songwirting slump and everything I do seems to be too complex or too simple, I cant seem to decide on a verse an d chorus, or where to put the bridge. Do you think I should write lyrics first or do you think I should write the rhythm first. I play guitar.
 
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.
 
Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.
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My dipsht brother told me he was gay
 
Originally posted by: NeuroSynapsis
Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.
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My dipsht brother told me he was gay
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So I ran far far away
On that Red November Day
 
Originally posted by: MartyMcFly3
Originally posted by: NeuroSynapsis
Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.
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My dipsht brother told me he was gay
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So I ran far far away
On that Red November Day
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Until I turned gay...ooh yeah!
 
Originally posted by: MartyMcFly3
Originally posted by: NeuroSynapsis
Originally posted by: chuckywang
A lot of song lyrics seem like non-sequitors. I'll start it off, and then the next person can add a line.

The sky turned red on that November day.
Click to expand...

My dipsht brother told me he was gay
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So I ran far far away
On that Red November Day
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And then I was hit by a truck filled with avocados,
and they've got me needled up like Terry Schiavo
 
The sky turned red on that November day
As I tried my hardest to look away
Then I thought of something that you might say
And it turned my November into May
 
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.
 
Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.
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With those lyrics and a fantastic melody, you have half a good song.
 
Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.
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Run with it. Sounds good.
 
Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.
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Seriously, through. Those lyrics don't "scan". Dreams "fade", "die", or "turn into nightmares". And you might refuse to "relive" past regrets, but "tasting" them sounds a little goofy.
 
do you guys like my crappy mic action? its a pc mic lol 🙁 played two guitar parts and a bass part through it

plus thats not the whole thing anyways. i haven't finished it. i just threw it together today.
 
Originally posted by: rayc
my friends smoke weed before starting their song writing ventures. they claim their high is a higher mental state. lol.
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lol

funny it just makes me hungry and want to vegetate in fronf of the tv or go to sleep
 
Originally posted by: shira
Originally posted by: punchncrunch
ok ...dont make fun....I seriously wanna know if thse are legit lyrics

staring at the wall
I wonder...will all my dreams fall?
Today is the day I lay to waste
Past regrets I refuse to taste.
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Seriously, through. Those lyrics don't "scan". Dreams "fade", "die", or "turn into nightmares". And you might refuse to "relive" past regrets, but "tasting" them sounds a little goofy.
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Past regrets? If you regret something it isn't a past regret...it's a current regret, or just a regret.

Maybe, past mistakes I refuse to regret.
 
Originally posted by: jndietz
Originally posted by: Plifzig
Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^
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Let the riff in the first half continue into the distorted portion and see what happens. Sounds Tool-ish in the beginning which translates into badfvckingass!
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i am heavily influenced by tool.
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Can't get much of a better influence than that, musically. Can you loop the riff throughout the whole tune?

 
Originally posted by: Plifzig
Originally posted by: jndietz
Originally posted by: Plifzig
Originally posted by: jndietz
http://jndietz.toastednet.org/wip_01.mp3

my work --^
Click to expand...

Let the riff in the first half continue into the distorted portion and see what happens. Sounds Tool-ish in the beginning which translates into badfvckingass!
Click to expand...

i am heavily influenced by tool.
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Can't get much of a better influence than that, musically. Can you loop the riff throughout the whole tune?
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yeah i could actually. what i posted is only a snippet for people to hear, but i have the entire thing in my adobe audition. i could loop it easily.
 
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