i like the design - and brass would definitely be a better material choice. If you wanted a product to sell on the web, that one would sell on looks alone. If you built it in aluminum as well, and did some tests and showed those results, offering both versions (obviously the aluminum one would be cheaper), the brass version would sell even better.
I question the size, ie being full length of the ssd unless your goal is to form ice from the condensation.
Just for some idea, i wrote or rendered a 41 gb video file to the 950 this afternoon - highest temp i saw after 29 minutes of rendering / writing was 57C. Granted it took that much time because of the conversion process, so the 950 wasn't being written to as fast as it could have been. With all the reviewers identifying 72C as the thermal limit temp, a 15 degree margin is fairly comfortable to me. And even at 72C, it just means the thermal limiter kicks in, no SSD meltdown or anything catastrophic.
As to the CF, it can be bought pre-laid up or preformed, in rods, bar stock or sheets of various thickness - it is NOT cheap. But to give you a real life example of the heat transfer difference, we fabricate or manufacture firearm silencers (legally, we hold a federal firearms mfgring license). On one pistol model, that we offered in aluminum, i thought i'd try CF and actually put it off for a couple of years - something in the back of my head said the epoxy resin used to wet out the CF when it's being formed, would act to impede heat transfer. When we finally got around to it, the results were pretty amazing. Keep in mind all we fabricated in CF was the tube body, the internal components were aluminum, both baffles and spacer rings.
when we took the prototype out to the range, we had two identical 45 cal pistols, one pistol with an aluminum silencer and the other with CF silencer, with two shooters and two guys loading magazines. The shooters were to put 500 rounds thru each can (silencer) and shooting started at 1:00 PM - at 2:15 PM, with continuous shooting, ambient temperature was 94F. I had the shooters run the last magazine on each thru at rapid fire pace.
For background, the flash signature at the muzzle measured at 1640F, so that's a lot of btu, from repeated shots, being pumped into those cans. After the last shot, the aluminum can measured at 174F, the CF can at 115F. Remember that's even though the internal components were aluminum on both cans - but being in contact with those components, the CF still takes the heat out of the alum and into the atmosphere. But still the difference is right at 60F or 1/3 cooler.
Within 45 seconds or so from the last shot, the CF can was at ambient temp and we could safely put it away in its nylon holster. The alum can, we had to wait 12-13 minutes for it to cool down enough that i felt safe in putting it away (i didn't want the holsters melting from heat build up).
If brass weren't so heavy, we'd use it for pistol cans, but there's an issue with excessive weight and pistol cycling that makes brass prohibitive.