How to correct this sentence?

[AgaBoogaBoo]

Originally posted by: cpals

Originally posted by: Encryptic

Originally posted by: AgaBooga
Going over everything and basically putting finishing touches on my research paper and everytime Word gives the green squiggly line like this:

One that did survive is said to have been discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great is known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes (Cockren 2).

It says that "Passive Voice (consider revising)" when I right click on anything that is underlined in that sentence.

How would you word the sentence or is it fine as it is written and just a mess-up on Word's part.

How about this?

"One surviving artifact, known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes, was discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great."

I added the word "artifact" to make it sound a little less awkward although I don't know the context this sentence is in.

was discovered in his tomb

Who does "his" refer to?

Hermes, I think I italiced incorrectly in the first post

 

[SagaLore]

Originally posted by: AgaBooga
Going over everything and basically putting finishing touches on my research paper and everytime Word gives the green squiggly line like this:

One that did survive is said to have been discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great is known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes (Cockren 2).

It says that "Passive Voice (consider revising)" when I right click on anything that is underlined in that sentence.

How would you word the sentence or is it fine as it is written and just a mess-up on Word's part.

Alexander the Great is said to have discovered within the tomb a surviving artifact known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes.

 

[AgaBoogaBoo]

Originally posted by: SagaLore

Originally posted by: AgaBooga
Going over everything and basically putting finishing touches on my research paper and everytime Word gives the green squiggly line like this:

One that did survive is said to have been discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great is known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes (Cockren 2).

It says that "Passive Voice (consider revising)" when I right click on anything that is underlined in that sentence.

How would you word the sentence or is it fine as it is written and just a mess-up on Word's part.

Alexander the Great is said to have discovered within the tomb a surviving artifact known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes.

I changed your's a little, but for now it is this unless someone can come up with something better:
Alexander the Great is said to have discovered a surviving artifact known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes within the tomb of Hermes (Cockren 2).

 

[glen]

Passive voice:
One that did survive is said to have been discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great is known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes (Cockren 2).

Active voice:
The Emerald Tablet of Hermes, one that did survive, was reportedly discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great (Cockren 2).

Most of the other suggestions have nothing to do with changing the sentence from passive to active voice.

 

[AgaBoogaBoo]

Originally posted by: glen
Passive voice:
One that did survive is said to have been discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great is known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes (Cockren 2).

Active voice:
The Emerald Tablet of Hermes, one that did survive, was reportedly discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great (Cockren 2).

Most of the other suggestions have nothing to do with changing the sentence from passive to active voice.

Hehe, word says that your active voice sentence is in the passive voice as well. 😛 Seriously.

 

[glen]

Originally posted by: AgaBooga

Originally posted by: glen
Passive voice:
One that did survive is said to have been discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great is known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes (Cockren 2).

Active voice:
The Emerald Tablet of Hermes, one that did survive, was reportedly discovered in his tomb by Alexander the Great (Cockren 2).

Most of the other suggestions have nothing to do with changing the sentence from passive to active voice.

Hehe, word says that your active voice sentence is in the passive voice as well. 😛 Seriously.

Fvck, i cut and pasted the wrong thing. What a dumbazz. one sec while I paste the correct sentance.

 

[glen]

Alexander the Great is said to have discovered one that did survive in his tomb, known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes.

Basically what SagaLore said.

 

[cpals]

Originally posted by: glen
Alexander the Great is said to have discovered one that did survive in his tomb, known as the Emerald Tablet of Hermes.

Basically what SagaLore said.

No offense, but that just sounds stupid. "one that did survive in his tomb" ?? Just sounds strange to me. I dunno.