This thread is simply asking the readers take on this. Read this as if you know nothing of the subjects I am talking about. This isn't a 'homwork' thread. This is suggestions for improvement. The work is done and I am in NO WAY asking anyone to do any work for me.
This is my 1 page essay and I ask for your suggestions. Things to add, things to take out. Areas that may seem 'confusing' to you.. Perhaps area's that are interesting and that I could expand apon. I appreciate it. Thanks.
By asking for suggestions and implying that you will impliment them is asking for homework help.
You attempted to not ask for homework help, yet you are stating that you will utilize the advice given and want additional information to consider.
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Thanks again for your time.
PS: Mods: A mod said that this type of thread was 'okay' and is 'legal' to have posted. I beg of you not to delete this for any reason. I am an anti-social, hardworking student who has no one to talk to. I live in an apartment, work alone, and don't feel comfortible talking to people in my school.
So if anyone wouldn't mind putting in their word on this single page essay, I would appreciate it. Thanks again
This is my 1 page essay and I ask for your suggestions. Things to add, things to take out. Areas that may seem 'confusing' to you.. Perhaps area's that are interesting and that I could expand apon. I appreciate it. Thanks.
By asking for suggestions and implying that you will impliment them is asking for homework help.
You attempted to not ask for homework help, yet you are stating that you will utilize the advice given and want additional information to consider.
Practicing deception is not allowed
Anandtech Moderator
---------The value of freedom has decreased throughout the years. Michel Foucault?s ?Panopticism,? and John Berger?s ?Ways of Seeing,? illistrate how over time a person?s rights slowly diminish. In two different points of view, these essays explain both diapline and art, they both have a strong statement.
---------Foucault illustrates this idea by discussing on how one theoretical establishment called the ?Panopticism,? would centralize the use of learning, discipline, and detention in a confined space. The Panopticon was an idea of a single establishment that would allow the ?abnormal? to be seen by placing people in ?cells? in an auditorium like fasion that would all face a large pedistal. On this pedistal would be a man that could look into the eyes of those inside the cells but those inside the cells could not see that who was on the pedistal, because sunlight was brought in in such a way that the person could not see. Workers, school children, laborers, inmates, people from all walks of life would be in these cells, for both learning and punishment. It seemed like the answer for everything, however: ?The Panopticon must not be understood as a dream building: it is the diagram of a mechanism of one power reduced to its ideal form; its functioning, abstracted from any obstacle, resistance or friction, must be represented as a pure architectural and optical system: it is in fact a figure of political technology that may and must be detached from any specific use.? (Foucault 223) That however, instead of one centralized place for these ideals, transformed into dozens, if not thousands of establishments ranging from: the workplace, schools, prisons, to even hospitals. The future holds many different types of establishments that we don?t even think about today. The freedoms we all exhibit now, could all be classified as something else tomorrow, perhaps even eventually against the law.
---------In contrast, Berger discusses how artists are now beind paid to create something, and thus the artwork was not coming from their heart. As time progresses creativity goes down and the freedom to express one?s self diminishes. The value of the art that was created from the free spirted artist long ago has risen throughout time and is now worth thousands if not millions of dollars. Now the freedom of expression can be illistrated, for example, by that of graffedi, its free form of art and allows the artist to express themselves. The not so financially priviliedged toward original pieces of art are deprived from their right to own anything original. The financially underprivileged people that live in poor countries have very low education rates. ?In the end, the art of the past in being mystified because a privileged minority is striving to invent a history which can retrospectively justify the role of the ruling classes, and such a justification can no longer make sense in modern terms.? (Berger 136). Berger here is saying that the meaning of art is changing because the rich could have an original pieces of art created in their name and then have that art duplicated to spread their influence, and their wallet.
---------Between these two essays, they both explain how people are limited to how much they can do at any given time. What was once the idea of one insitution to help everyone, turned into thousands of establishments. What was once a world of creativity and open-heartedness, is now a world of corperatly funded advertising agencys. With a society founded upon equal rights and freedoms, this society is slowly but surely taking away all to that was given to us.
Thanks again for your time.
PS: Mods: A mod said that this type of thread was 'okay' and is 'legal' to have posted. I beg of you not to delete this for any reason. I am an anti-social, hardworking student who has no one to talk to. I live in an apartment, work alone, and don't feel comfortible talking to people in my school.
So if anyone wouldn't mind putting in their word on this single page essay, I would appreciate it. Thanks again