Yet again, I need some proofreading.

[adlep]

I am starting a business directory type of a site for Polish community in the US and Canada, below are some of my key selling points...
Thank you for reading and effort...

Text # 1:

Advertising on PoloniaPages.com is an inexpensive and effective investment!
PoloniaPages.com is a business directory ? an online ?yellow pages? book designed for Polish owned companies throughout the United States and Canada, but any business which deals with a Polish community in North America is welcome to advertise here.
Some of the assets of this web page include:
? Attractive name. PoloniaPages.com is easily accessible for Polish and English speaking users. The name itself is a conjunction of two words: Polonia, which in Polish means all Polish community living outside of Poland, and Pages (from the term ?yellow pages?) meaning the business directory. Two words come together creating a ?Polish business directory?.
? Simple, clean, and functional layout of PoloniaPages.com enables fast and easy access to the advertisements featured on the business directory.
? Each ad comes standard with 40 words. This is plenty of space to describe a wide variety of offered services. In addition, text inside of each ad is formatted with all of the power of HTML tags.
? Each ad comes standard with a picture.
? Each ad comes with a ?map it? function through google.com. Now it is very easy for the potential clients to find any company featured on PoloniaPages.com. This is a great convenience.
? Easy access to polish clients from the biggest Polish centers in North America.
? Skillful marketing of this site through internet advertising, links exchange, and the search engine optimization (SEO).
? Free ads for individual users ? such us looking for a job, rent an apartment, cars for sale, etc., will help to generate additional traffic.
? Free publications for Polish cultural and educational institution will help to generate a very positive image of the site with the Polish community in the North America.


Text # 2:
1. In order to add your company to our online business directory, fill in all of the fields below. In addition, we strongly recommend uploading a picture, flyer, or a buinsess card.
2. Let us know if someone in your company speaks Polish. Option ?Mowimy Po Polsku? (We speak Polish) will add to the effectiveness of the advertisement.
3. Your ad is created.
4. Once the announcement is added to the business directory, we generate and send an email with the link to the ad and with payment options. The payment of $55.00 per year can be made through a check (make it for PoloniaPages), money order, or online via credit card ? through our online credit card processing company 2CO.
5. To ensure maximum satisfaction we charge our clients AFTER the paid ad is created.
6. Polish non profit organizations will not be charged for the ad.
Thank you for your interest.


Last, but not least, the site is still offline.

 

[dighn]

- you spelled United States as United Sates

- which deals with a Polish community in North America is welcomed to advertise here. ---> should be "welcome"

 

[adlep]

Originally posted by: dighn
you spelled United States as United Sates

It's 1:00am

Edit: Good catch...

 

[hjo3]

Attractive name. PoloniaPages.com is easily accessible for Polish and English speaking users. The name itself is a conjunction of two words: Polonia, which in Polish means all Polish community living outside of Poland and Pages ? from the term ?yellow pages? meaning the business directory. Two words come together creating a ?Polish business directory?.

That's an asset? BTW, thank god for that explanation... I never would've figured it out otherwise. Especially important was that last sentence: "Two words come together creating a "Polish business directory." If that's not eloquent genius, I don't know what is.

 

[adlep]

Originally posted by: hjo3

Attractive name. PoloniaPages.com is easily accessible for Polish and English speaking users. The name itself is a conjunction of two words: Polonia, which in Polish means all Polish community living outside of Poland and Pages ? from the term ?yellow pages? meaning the business directory. Two words come together creating a ?Polish business directory?.

That's an asset? BTW, thank god for that explanation... I never would've figured it out otherwise. Especially important was that last sentence: "Two words come together creating a "Polish business directory." If that's not eloquent genius, I don't know what is.

Thanks,
I knew some english speaking people who are not familiar with the Polish community might have a problem with the name - Polonia. But in fact, once again, this word is commonly used to describe Polish folks living outside Poland.
The name of the website is a huge asset in Polish language...

 

[dighn]

- "Some of assets" sounds weird to me.. maybe some of the assets or some assets?
- This is plenty of space to easy describe wide - easily

well it's bed time for me now

 

[hjo3]

Originally posted by: adlep

Originally posted by: hjo3

Attractive name. PoloniaPages.com is easily accessible for Polish and English speaking users. The name itself is a conjunction of two words: Polonia, which in Polish means all Polish community living outside of Poland and Pages ? from the term ?yellow pages? meaning the business directory. Two words come together creating a ?Polish business directory?.

That's an asset? BTW, thank god for that explanation... I never would've figured it out otherwise. Especially important was that last sentence: "Two words come together creating a "Polish business directory." If that's not eloquent genius, I don't know what is.

Thanks,
I knew some english speaking people who are not familiar with the Polish community might have a problem with the name - Polonia. But in fact, once again, this word is commonly used to describe Polish folks living outside Poland.
The name of the website is a huge asset in Polish language...

Sir, you are truly the Mark Twain of the 21st century. A genuine wordsmith.

 

[adlep]

Originally posted by: hjo3

Originally posted by: adlep

Originally posted by: hjo3

Attractive name. PoloniaPages.com is easily accessible for Polish and English speaking users. The name itself is a conjunction of two words: Polonia, which in Polish means all Polish community living outside of Poland and Pages ? from the term ?yellow pages? meaning the business directory. Two words come together creating a ?Polish business directory?.

That's an asset? BTW, thank god for that explanation... I never would've figured it out otherwise. Especially important was that last sentence: "Two words come together creating a "Polish business directory." If that's not eloquent genius, I don't know what is.

Thanks,
I knew some english speaking people who are not familiar with the Polish community might have a problem with the name - Polonia. But in fact, once again, this word is commonly used to describe Polish folks living outside Poland.
The name of the website is a huge asset in Polish language...

Sir, you are truly the Mark Twain of the 21st century. A genuine wordsmith.

Watch out for my next book
Edit: My inspiration!
Edit2: OK I admit, it's very hard for me to catch all the sarcasm right away....

 

[hjo3]

Originally posted by: adlep

Originally posted by: hjo3

Originally posted by: adlep

Originally posted by: hjo3

Attractive name. PoloniaPages.com is easily accessible for Polish and English speaking users. The name itself is a conjunction of two words: Polonia, which in Polish means all Polish community living outside of Poland and Pages ? from the term ?yellow pages? meaning the business directory. Two words come together creating a ?Polish business directory?.

That's an asset? BTW, thank god for that explanation... I never would've figured it out otherwise. Especially important was that last sentence: "Two words come together creating a "Polish business directory." If that's not eloquent genius, I don't know what is.

Thanks,
I knew some english speaking people who are not familiar with the Polish community might have a problem with the name - Polonia. But in fact, once again, this word is commonly used to describe Polish folks living outside Poland.
The name of the website is a huge asset in Polish language...

Sir, you are truly the Mark Twain of the 21st century. A genuine wordsmith.

Watch out for my next book
Edit: My inspiration!
Edit2: OK I admit, it's very hard for me to catch all the sarcasm right away....

LOL, I thought you had and just trumped me by being big about it.

 

[adlep]

Bump,

 

[Steve]

Here are some suggestions:

Polonia, which in Polish means all Polish community living outside of Poland, and Pages (from the term ?yellow pages?), meaning the business directory.

Easy access to Polish clients from the biggest Polish centers in North America.

Skillful marketing of this site through the Internet advertising, link exchange, and the search engine optimization (SEO).

- okay for this one, do you mean "...through the Internet, adversting, link exchange..." or do you mean "...through Internet advertising, link exchange..."?

Free ads for individual users ? such as looking for a job, rent an apartment, cars for sale, etc., will help to generate additional traffic.

Free publications for Polish cultural and educational institutions will help to generate a very positive image of the site with the Polish community in the North America.

1. In order to add your company to our online business directory, fill in all of the fields below. In addition, we strongly recommend uploading a picture, and a description of the services.

That's all I could see right now.

 

[adlep]

sm8000 - thank you very much...

 

[adlep]

One more bump...

If someone sees something strange about my text, let me know...