tell me wat ya think of this song i made

[Ryuson99]

click me if i don't work save as


it aint complete but i would like ur opinions.

the song is about how we in the ghetto are considered the minority


song name ghetto supreme

 

[Crusty]

You suck at linking.

 

[Ryuson99]

Originally posted by: MCrusty
You suck at linking.

i fixed the linking

 

[Crusty]

Originally posted by: Ryuson99

Originally posted by: MCrusty
You suck at linking.

i fixed the linking

 

[ed21x]

its actually pretty decent considering you did it yourself. However, I'd prefer you not repeating "ghetto supreme" so many times in the beginning... just a 2-3 times will do followed by other words in the intro to usher in the piece.

 

[Ryuson99]

yea im gonna change that but i aint edit it for just minor changes yet cause i still need to get my next verse ready

 

[anxi80]

i listened to it earlier. nice job on the beat. have a ? though. at 1:07-1:08 i cant tell if you are still rapping the same verse or going into the hook, maybe tighten it up a bit before that 1:07 and then come hard with a hook, because the melody switches up a little at that mark, and the 8th bar ends right before that time also. but thats what i was wondering because its kind of hard to tell if its the same verse or if you are going to use that as the hook because the track isnt complete (im assuming).

 

[Yolner]

Rap sucks. That is all.

 

[Ryuson99]

Originally posted by: anxi80
i listened to it earlier. nice job on the beat. have a ? though. at 1:07-1:08 i cant tell if you are still rapping the same verse or going into the hook, maybe tighten it up a bit before that 1:07 and then come hard with a hook, because the melody switches up a little at that mark, and the 8th bar ends right before that time also. but thats what i was wondering because its kind of hard to tell if its the same verse or if you are going to use that as the hook because the track isnt complete (im assuming).

actually im still working on the hook im going to get a femcee to do it and its going on that mark that u said

so far this is what i got for the hook

"living in the ghetto aint as hard as it seems, getting out the ghetto is a myth just a dream"

 

[us3rnotfound]

Originally posted by: Yolner
Rap sucks. That is all.

 

[xchangx]

Rap sucks...

But, at least put some emotion in the rapping. Sounds like you're about to fall asleep (monotone)

 

[anxi80]

3 rap sucks comments... origins according to profiles: virginia, indiana, and alabama. not saying people from those area's cant enjoy the genre, but at the same time, look at the shock on my face. :/

edit: and credit given to the above post'er who at least commented on the track. you guys saw the topic summary, but still clicked in to share your witty and original opinion? :roll:

 

[cremator]

Originally posted by: anxi80
i listened to it earlier. nice job on the beat.

He didn't make that beat.

 

[anxi80]

Originally posted by: cremator
He didn't make that beat.

ahh, assumed when he said he made the song, he did it all. produced (or sampled) and rapped on it. thanks for the info.

 

[Ryuson99]

Originally posted by: anxi80

Originally posted by: cremator
He didn't make that beat.

ahh, assumed when he said he made the song, he did it all. produced (or sampled) and rapped on it. thanks for the info.

yeah the beat i did not do sorry if i made u assume much.

anyways one of the posters say i aint show emotion, do ya agree?