See? An LotR quotes construct.

[Triumph]

as a LOTR nerd that recognizes most of the quotes you are using, that is a pretty terrible poem/pome/construct/passage. Really. It's just not good.

 

[BraydenBradley]

as a LOTR nerd that recognizes most of the quotes you are using, that is a pretty terrible poem/pome/construct/passage. Really. It's just not good.

I shall readily admit that I too have been indefinably dissatisfied with last week's efforts. Without more specific criticism it is difficult to know upon which points you think I should endeavor to improve, but for myself I have begun to suspect that the selected quotes are too disjointed and numerous to produce a really powerful and memorable construct. Here is my most recent piece, which abandons the supercut-esque reliance on widespread words such as "one" and "see / eye" for a more pointed and specific theme (similar to my earlier foray into the mountains). Also, line breaks! I have mixed feelings about the result, but the exercise I think is a promising one.
*~*~*~*~*~*
The wars of men and wizards.

What of the Wizard?
The White Wizard?
The White Wizard approaches.

The White Wizard is cunning.
The White Wizard will know.
A wizard should know better!

There's a wizard to be managed here.
But we have the White Wizard.
You can no longer wait for the Wizard.
A Wizard is never late.
*~*~*~*~*~*
Edit: Practicing a smidgen of discretion upon review, I have combined the last two stanzas and dismissed one line as incompatible even though it is a recognizable quote and about the correct subject.

 

[brianmanahan]

as a LOTR nerd that recognizes most of the quotes you are using, that is a pretty terrible poem/pome/construct/passage. Really. It's just not good.

rule 1 of pomes - you cant say a pome is bad unless you can write one that is better

 

[BraydenBradley]

rule 1 of pomes - you cant say a pome is bad unless you can write one that is better

I generally find this sort of thing a questionable prerequisite for value judgments D: but I will go along with it provided we can add the corollary that you cannot say a poem is good unless you've proven you can write one that is worse! ^_^

 

[zinfamous]

The courtesy of your hall is somewhat lessened of late. D:

lol.

I had no idea what was going on in your OP, but this made me giggle.

 

[BraydenBradley]

lol.

I had no idea what was going on in your OP, but this made me giggle.

Maybe I ought to cease multiplying the crop of quotes-constructs and go in for LotR-quotes-as-timely-rejoinders full-time. D: That has proven by far the most popular facet of this conversation. :awe: