Resume Critique

[88keys]

Update (2/28/17)


Okay, when I made the last resume, I started with my censored (J.D.Notarealname) version and wrote what I was thinking so I was typing fast and sloppy. That resume obviously didn't go RTM as I cleaned it up just as I was adding my personal info in then submitted the resume in that state, but I captured the image for critique before I did all of that.

Anyway that discussion is in the job offer thread (they called me again Ill provide more details when I get the time).

Here is my new resume in glorious pdf format.
https://1drv.ms/b/s!Av4nS3vJw4UxoFOc6tnLI_TDhevN


I added my GD&T certification because it is at least accredited, but my other cert is not so it was omitted. Both certs are for print reading and the GD&T cert is the only one that anyone is going to give a shit about.

Also broke down the skills into separate categories and went with a left to right work history timeline to keep everything on one page with the added info. And finally I added gradient banners. (not sure how I feel about them yet) Things started looking cluttered as I had to move things closer together so I felt that I had to add something to separate the sections.

Spoiler: UPDATE 2/13/2017

http://i.imgur.com/Sp4IRYP.png

So I decided to give it a go with the "functional resume" approach. Formatted my name at the top using first and middle initials. Also went with a slightly nicer and classier version of the Times New Roman font. I actually had this done last week and submitted it to a couple of potential employers, one of whom already interviewed me (that discussion is in another thread).

As for the acronyms, I decided to keep the ones that are industry-wide terms. These should be known by any professional with a background in manufacturing. To spell them out would be like coming here and having to spell out Random Access Memory and would make you look like an idiot.
Not to mention that it would clutter up my resume, and my experience with people in this field is that they highly appreciate simple, clean, straightforward and easy to read documents. This is why I strive to keep me resumes down to a single page.

In regards to getting exact dollar amounts in savings and profitability, that is virtually impossible in most circumstances because the fees associated with certain defects can vary by customer and they are dependent on many factors. If our defect resulted in one of their production lines shutting down (even briefly), the price would most likely exceed 100,000. I do know with certainty how many that I personally prevented, and that our PPM was reduced by 916pts (which is significant) this past year as a result of my efforts which in turn allows us to get more business. The best way to think of it is that PPM is like a credit rating for manufacturers. Better credit = better financial opportunities, stability, options, etc etc. Say if 40 year old man maintained a credit score of 600, there is no way to know how much money he might have saved or what kind of opportunities he might have had if he maintained a 700 credit score because that's impossible to calculate. But anyone who knows anything about credit scores knows that virtually every aspect of his financial life would be significantly better if he had maintained a 700 credit score.

Spoiler: Original Post

Been awhile since I had to do this, but I basically started this one from scratch. I don't have quite enough to fill the whole page so what other details should I include.

This is just a screen snippet from the pdf file. My name, phone, and email would be at the top left and right in small print, but have been omitted for obvious reasons.
http://i.imgur.com/LewwVV8.png

And before people freak out about the spelling of 'gage'. It is be spelled both ways and 'gage' is the more common spelling in metrology related fields.

 

[cbrunny]

Google 'Functional Resume'

 

[Chaotic42]

You worked both jobs for a week in May 2015?

 

[88keys]

Yes, there was a brief period of overlap where I put in a few hours per day at my then prior job.

 

[Fanatical Meat]

I'll get called a noob, however I paid for a decent resume to be made it was totally worth the money spent.

I've hired and interviewed plenty of people in a previous career and I think I'm still pretty good with the target selection interview process. Would you like to do a practice phone interview sometime?
Obviously what we talk about will not be spoken about or posted here.

 

[88keys]

I'll get called a noob, however I paid for a decent resume to be made it was totally worth the money spent.

I've hired and interviewed plenty of people in a previous career and I think I'm still pretty good with the target selection interview process. Would you like to do a practice phone interview sometime?
Obviously what we talk about will not be spoken about or posted here.

Might consider it as there are alot of good openings in my area right now.... The thing is that I have noticed in my dealings with the people who work in these environments is that many of them tend to be very old timey about things and some of these 'new fangled' resumes with personal photos would not go over well with these types. Whatever it is, it would need to stay relatively basic like a webpage from 1995.

I have one co-worker who handwrites his emails, scans them and sends them as attachments to people... no joke.

 

[dullard]

I've been on numerous hiring committees, here are my thoughts:

1) You expand on the useless but are very terse on the important. For example, your entire first line could be "My manufacturing experience" as the rest doesn't add anything. But your second line truncates anything that might actually sell you to just two words "invaluable asset". If you could convince me on the intro paragraph HOW you will be an invaluable asset to me, you are hired regardless of the rest of the resume. But no, you just stopped.

2) "I like cake, and pie." Note: there is an extra comma there. It should read, "I like cake and pie." The comma only comes before the "and" if you have a list of more than two items. "use, and calibration" is not a list of more than two items. This problem appears at least 3 times in your resume and makes it very hard to follow.

3) Unless jargon terms are very well-known by HR and the people on the hiring committee, they are useless. What is GD&T, PPM, SPC, TS, QS, etc? Don't expect everyone on the hiring committee to be experts in what you specifically do. So, hand feed them. Include the jargon as it might be necessary on a computer resume search. But also explain it, so that middle management sucker who got put onto your hiring committee and who doesn't know what PPM means can actually hire you.

4) It is a bit repetitive. Yes, you contained non-conforming product at different jobs. But can you at least word it differently each time?

5) This is my personal preference (and not a requirement), but I really like resumes with specific numbers. You saved the company $500,000 by detecting and containing non-conforming product. Or you prevented 3 recalls by detecting non-conforming product. You inspected 30,000 items a year and had zero non-conforming product get by your inspection. Or whatever numbers you can come up with. Resume lines with concrete data sound to me far more impressive. How much additional productivity or profitability did you actually accomplish?

6) Some of your items are basically assumed already so they don't help you. Yes, you communicated issues. Who wouldn't communicate issues? Instead, save that space to put something impressive about you. That space could be filled with techniques and equipment that you know how to run in your quality inspections. Or at least make it sound impressive. Did you communicate to the CEO, train other departments, etc? Then say that instead of saying that you communicate.

 

[Schfifty Five]

Been awhile since I had to do this, but I basically started this one from scratch. I don't have quite enough to fill the whole page so what other details should I include.

This is just a screen snippet from the pdf file. My name, phone, and email would be at the top left and right in small print, but have been omitted for obvious reasons.
http://i.imgur.com/LewwVV8.png

And before people freak out about the spelling of 'gage'. It is be spelled both ways and 'gage' is the more common spelling in metrology related fields.

After reading your statement at the top, it sounds like you're well endowed.

 

[Schfifty Five]

Dullard's comments cover pretty much the majority of things. I'll put in my 2 cents:

1. Your statement at the top sounds like it is better suited for a cover letter than a few sentences at the top. If you did want to have some statement at the top, perhaps change it to an objective statement instead.
2. Grammar - make sure you proof-read like 10 times and make sure everything is grammatically perfect
3. Dullard already mentioned this, but don't just list out your job responsibilities. Instead, add some facts/numbers that show how you performed in those job responsibilities. Saved the company $XXXXX by doing this or that, etc"

 

[[DHT]Osiris]

my 2 cp.

The 'highly motivated individual' crap would make me throw out the resume if I was looking at it to hire someone, looks like puffery that you cannot actually show me via things you've done. If you want to show how motivated you are, define what projects you started, what problems you got ahead of, how much you potentially saved y company by fixing z before it got out of hand.

The stuff at the top should be in a cover letter, or in an email, or something. If I've gotten to the point of looking at this piece of paper, I'm already evaluating you, and I can count, so that mostly invalidates both statements. Let me know what gaps you're gonna fill (if you know what gaps exist based on the job posting) or at least what you can bring to the table competently.

Leave out crap that's expected of your job, like reading mechanical drawings, using office products, and communicating issues. You're a mechanical Sr quality engineer, that's expected. I also hope that in 6 years, you had more than three job duties, one of which being tacked on because it looks like you didn't want to only have two job duties in that time.

Personally, and this is more specific to IT stuff, I broke out the random 'qualifications, certs, etc' crap in a different section elsewhere, full of dumb acronyms and stuff that the hiring manager cares about (because it lines up with the acronym soup they have to look for in order for me to be eligible for the job).

EDIT: I will say props for keeping it short and sweet. A functional 1 page resume is like a brick of gold pressed latinum. Just make sure it's not useless.

 

[88keys]

Updated, Link and details are in the OP.

 

[[DHT]Osiris]

Updated, Link and details are in the OP.

You misspelled 'Proficient' directly above high attention to detail. That's not great.

Tense/person errors in first block, or at least peculiar word choices. (intuitively prevent... prevents? can prevent? has prevented?, will prevent?)

Also misspelled 'Maintaining'. traceability isn't a word, acheieve isn't a word. Acheievements isn't a word. Desinged isn't a word. Detetction isn't a word. Sufficive isn't a word. Oppurtunities isn't a word.

What the fuck man, this thing would have been in the trash within seconds. You claim to have MS word experience, use a spellchecker before embarrassing yourself further.

EDIT: And this is for a QA job? For seriously?

 

[purbeast0]

You misspelled 'Proficient' directly above high attention to detail. That's not great.

Tense/person errors in first block, or at least peculiar word choices. (intuitively prevent... prevents? can prevent? has prevented?, will prevent?)

Also misspelled 'Maintaining'. traceability isn't a word, acheieve isn't a word. Acheievements isn't a word. Desinged isn't a word. Detetction isn't a word. Sufficive isn't a word. Oppurtunities isn't a word.

What the fuck man, this thing would have been in the trash within seconds. You claim to have MS word experience, use a spellchecker before embarrassing yourself further.

EDIT: And this is for a QA job? For seriously?

This post is full of lulz.

 

[cbrunny]

Do you have a degree?

 

[Schfifty Five]

Terrible, just terrible.

 

[88keys]

A couple of certs, but no degree. To be honest, I don't value the certifications very highly. Neither of the show my final score on the test and I've known

Do you have a degree?

No, but I have a couple of certificates for print reading and GD&T, but I don't value them very highly. Neither of them show my final test score, and I've encountered some who have these same certs who really aren't that knowledgeable.

 

[Schfifty Five]

A couple of certs, but no degree. To be honest, I don't value the certifications very highly. Neither of the show my final score on the test and I've known

No, but I have a couple of certificates for print reading and GD&T, but I don't value them very highly. Neither of them show my final test score, and I've encountered some who have these same certs who really aren't that knowledgeable.

Did you read post #12?

 

[DigDog]

THIS IS MY NAME AND CONTACT

where i work now
(what i do there)

where i worked before 1
where i worked before 2
where i worked before 3
(dont write your whole life history)

my skillset

less important stuff, 2-3 lines maximum




generally speaking, companies have ZERO interest in what superhuman intelligence you have, or that you can play chess while blindfolded. they want to see that you work at Fancy Company Ltd and steal one of their employees, because its a good company and therefore you must be good for the role.

this changes depending on how actually qualified you need to be for the postition, but not massively.

personally, i avoid and detest "i am such a nice guy" statements because there is no factual proof of it being true.if i ever write stuff like "i would like to progress into such and such role" i put it at the end of the CV in a place where it can be barely noticed.

 

[SKORPI0]

Wow, epic spellcheck fail... No quality control in this resume..

 

[cbrunny]

A couple of certs, but no degree. To be honest, I don't value the certifications very highly. Neither of the show my final score on the test and I've known

No, but I have a couple of certificates for print reading and GD&T, but I don't value them very highly. Neither of them show my final test score, and I've encountered some who have these same certs who really aren't that knowledgeable.

What is QA if you don't have a degree?

 

[SKORPI0]

What is QA if you don't have a degree?

http://study.com/quality_assurance_degree.html
Didn't know that there is a Bachelor's Degree and Master's Degree in Quality Assurance.

 

[cbrunny]

http://study.com/quality_assurance_degree.html
Didn't know that there is a Bachelor's Degree and Master's Degree in Quality Assurance.

The only people I've ever known that have worked in QA are highly educated Engineers, usually with Master's degrees. My question is legitimate. I don't know what QA is when you don't need a degree, so just looking for some insight.

 

[88keys]

What is QA if you don't have a degree?

Most employers do list college degree as a 'requirement' for what I do and what I'm applying for, but it isn't required if you have several or more years of experience in the field. and given the fact that there aren't alot of people going to college for this stuff in my line of work and the fact that I'm 15-20 years younger than most people who actually do know this stuff gives me a solid advantage.

But in the most basic sense, it comes down to knowing this stuff and how it pertains to your organization. https://www.iso.org/iso-9001-quality-management.html

The industry specific ones like TS16949, AS9000, etc. are to ISO9001 like a CDL is to a regular driver's license.

As for how it applies to what I do.
Everything I have highlighted is GD&T (Geometric Dimensioning & Tolerancing). It's basically the use of symbols to call out things like perpendicularity, profile, and true position and you calculate those dimensions based on the datums, feature sizes, and basic dimensions. Knowing how to read the drawing and make the calculations is one thing. It's wholly another to know how to properly orient a product for accurate measurement and the instruments needed to take those measurements.

Spoiler

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Geometric_dimensioning_and_tolerancing

Anyway, FWIW I uploaded a new resume. See the first post for details.

 

[cbrunny]

Years of experience in a related field. In the most basic sense, it comes down to knowing this stuff and how it pertains to your organization. https://www.iso.org/iso-9001-quality-management.html

The industry specific ones like TS16949, AS9000, etc. are to ISO9001 like a CDL is to a regular driver's license.

As for how it applies to what I do.
Everything I have highlighted is GD&T (Geometric Dimensioning & Tolerancing). It's basically the use of symbols to call out things like perpendicularity, profile, and true position and you calculate those dimensions based on the datums, feature sizes, and basic dimensions. Knowing how to read the drawing and make the calculations is one thing. It's wholly another to know how to properly orient a product for accurate measurement and the instruments needed to take those measurements.

Spoiler

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Geometric_dimensioning_and_tolerancing

Anyway, FWIW I uploaded a new resume. See the first post for details.

so its.... complicated measuring?

 

[88keys]

so its.... complicated measuring?

With very expensive rulers.


http://www.mitutoyo.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/06/price-list-FN_0616-1.pdf