This isn't asking anyone to "do the homework for me". I wrote the paper, and now I ask for any ATOT person who may have a little time in their day to read this for any grammatical/spelling errors. I know my writing is bad, it has been since I was 4. This paper was only supposed to be about a page long and I think I finished it. It's made to compare two essays: John Berger?s ?Ways of Seeing? and Michel Foucault?s ?Panopticism.".
If you have any suggestions, comments, revisions you would like to make, please do. I will have some time tomorrow morning to check over your comments and make revisions before class. I appreciate your time. Thanks:
I know my writing sucks, and to put icing on the cake: I'm a freshmen in college with these writing skills. I could really use any suggestions/revisions you may have for me. Appreciated much. Thanks again.
PS: I anticipate the: "Take a writers class, you'll learn then. That's my suggestion." Answers. So please, if you could just stick to the more serious reply's so I can actually put some of those suggestions/revisions to work on this paper in paticular, I would appreciate it. Thanks again all!
Edit: This is supposed to be written using: "MLA Guidelines", hopefully I got that right. *Crosses fingers*. Thanks again for your time, looking forward to your responces in a few hours.
If you have any suggestions, comments, revisions you would like to make, please do. I will have some time tomorrow morning to check over your comments and make revisions before class. I appreciate your time. Thanks:
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-----------In many ways, both the works of John Berger?s ?Ways of Seeing? and Michel Foucault?s ?Panopticism,? we see that they make a very strong case on surveillance. Berger talks about how someone can view the world as a whole, and Foucault shows how someone can view world by watching someone. In terms of perception, they hold many different truths, ranging from: the value of freedom, learning, growing, and to also the path toward increasing one?s power.
-----------The value of freedom has decreased throughout the years. Foucault illustrates this by discussing on how one establishment called the ?Panopticism,? eventually transformed into the dozens of institutions we live in today. The Panopticism was an idea of a single establishment in the 17th century, that centralized the use of learning, discipline, and detention. However, instead the idea one centralized place for these ideals transformed into dozens, if not thousands of establishments ranging from: schools, prisons, the workplace, even hospitals. The future holds many different types of establishments that we don?t even think about today. The freedoms we all exhibit now, could all be classified as something else tomorrow, perhaps even eventually against the law. In contrast, Berger discusses how original art throughout the years has decreased because artists were being paid to create something, and thus the artwork was not coming from their heart. As time progresses creativity goes down and the freedom to express one?s self diminishes.
-----------Berger describes that the uneducated parts of the world exhibit less interest in some of today?s artwork. The richer countries are generally the more educated, as Will Durant, (U.S. author and historian) says, ?Education is a progressive discovery of our ignorance.? As time goes on and education becomes more available to other countries, they begin to see their mistakes from the past to move on. Contrasting this to the idea of the Panopticism, as time continues to move on, things get worse. People will always see a need to create a new institution to help people and even today?s practices may be deemed as ?unfit? for tomorrows world.
-----------One of the largest comparisons that I think should be made between these two essays is the desire for political power. ?In the end, the art of the past in being mystified because a privileged minority is striving to invent a history which can retrospectively justify the role of the ruling classes, and such a justification can no longer make sense in modern terms.? (Berger 136) I believe Berger is saying here that creativity is being abused to help promote the rich to keep them in power. In retrospect, Foucault talks about how fear is the driving force behind rallying public support to have someone in power. With that fear, there is a need for discipline, which is characterized by the many institutions we have today to help create this discipline. Both of these essays show how the world is constantly being watched by everyone, and how each person is striving to better themselves in the world they live in, whether its increase political power or to have a place to care for the sick.
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I know my writing sucks, and to put icing on the cake: I'm a freshmen in college with these writing skills. I could really use any suggestions/revisions you may have for me. Appreciated much. Thanks again.
PS: I anticipate the: "Take a writers class, you'll learn then. That's my suggestion." Answers. So please, if you could just stick to the more serious reply's so I can actually put some of those suggestions/revisions to work on this paper in paticular, I would appreciate it. Thanks again all!
Edit: This is supposed to be written using: "MLA Guidelines", hopefully I got that right. *Crosses fingers*. Thanks again for your time, looking forward to your responces in a few hours.