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Josh

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The story is set in the late 1800s during the slave era, if things seem a little "modern" for that time please tell me. My teacher said this has to be a realistic story. And, be sure to leave your comments!

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?A Black Doin? Un-Black Things? -- By: Josh Israel
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About sixty years ago, I was shipped into slavery to what is now called Austin, but back in my day I simply knew it as a slave state, or as the people around me called it, Texas. My master, Mr. John, as he tells me to call him, calls me ?Sam Douglass?. Most folks tell me that I?m tall and have a strong build, but I don?t believe them seeing ?cause I don?t eat too much. I taught myself to read and write and have been doing so ever since age 5 (my master encourages it, for what reason, I don?t know).

I don?t have any idea who my parents are ?cause I was sold into slavery at age 1. The only ?real? parents I know are my masters, awful nice folk, except when it comes to work time, then its like they get transformed and whip me if I make the slightest mistake. I?m only 15 and the beatings sting and leave marks that continue to sting whenever I touch them or take a shower, however, I don?t cry, my master tells me it?s a sign of weakness. I?ve been wanting to escape slavery and find my true roots ever since I was put to work (around age 6). I felt that black people were just as intelligent and hard-working as white people but we never got to show that side of ourselves and I wouldn?t dare speak of it in front of any white folk.

I?ve had many failed attempts at escaping slavery, some ending up in bad situations. One time, when I was about 13 years old I was picking weeds in front of Mr. John?s front yard and he was sittin? on the porch enjoyin? a glass of lemonade. He told me I could have some once I finish picking weeds for half of the yard. So I did my work, quickly and with care and Mr. John went into the house to prepare a glass of lemonade for me. I knew I had a chance to run so I did, I ran as fast as I could, for about 100 yards when Mr. John came out of the house and noticed that I was gone and preceded to yell at me.

He yelled to me, ?Come back here you great person! Your in for it this time! Ya made the worst decision of ya life you stupid great person!?

I covered my ears because I did not want to here what would happen to me if I were to be caught. I kept running and running and looked back every now and then and I noted that my master was back in the house. I wondered what he was doing, but I threw it in the back of my mind and kept running. After about 300 yards I was tackled and beaten into submission.

Later that day I overheard my master talking on the phone with someone, he said, ?Thanks Abe, that goddamn great person done tried to run away, lucky you were only 3 houses down.?

I knew it, my master had called up his friend to catch me when I ran by his house. Anyway, later that night my master tied me to the back of his car and dragged my through the streets, I cried and cried and finally he stopped 5 miles away from home and told me I was to walk the rest of the way and he would drive right beside me to make sure I didn?t dare make a run for it (I?d be shot if I did).

For about 7 years I never again tried to run away, until Christmas Eve, when I was 20. I was preparing dinner for the master?s usual get together for Christmas he has at the house (family and friends come) when he had told me that he was going upstairs to take a shower. I didn?t think about my previous run away at the time, all I was thinking about was now. I made my way outside creeping along making sure that I didn?t make any noise and I left the water running in the kitchen to make it seem as though I was still working there. As soon as I got outside I made a break for it running as fast as I can, darting through backyards, quietly but fast, and finally making it into the center of town.

I looked straight up at the sky, it was raining but I smiled and laughed and started to dance around, everyone in town looked at me but I didn?t care, I thought I was free from the hell of slavery....and boy was I wrong. Anyway, I thought to myself, ?What would the first thing a free-slave would do?? And then it came to me, I would get a real job, get some money and buy some food for my hungry stomach. I walked around town, it was about 5 PM, and looked for a ?Blacks Wanted? sign, soon enough I came upon one. It was in a sandwich store. I was told that my job would be to cut and prepare the meat to be put in sandwiches for the hard white-workers that come down here to eat during their lunch time. My salary would be approximately 10 cents a week and it would go up half a cent each week that I did good work. My first day at work a few black co-workers asked me how I came here and If I was an escaped slave, I trusted them and told them my story. However, my intuition that they would keep my secret was wrong, one of the blacks told his employer and got 2 cents for doing it. My employer called up the police and immediately one of them was available to figure out who I belonged to (he was a friend of my master).

As I expected, later that night, when my master took me home he beat me, but not with his hand, he took a cane and lashed me on my back several times, he told me he would lash me for every minute he wasted on finding me. But, I knew that he would run out of energy, in total he gave me about 21 lashings. I went to take a shower as he had instructed me to do and looked in the mirror and saw my badly bruised back. I knew it hurt but I held in my tears for fear of another beating.

My master called up to me: ?Hurry up in there you dumb great person!?

I had not realized it but I had been looking at my back for a couple of minutes, awesome people were expected to bathe for only a few minutes. I decided that I couldn?t bathe so I soaked my hair using tap water and came out drying it with a towel as if I had taken a bath.

The next day was all work for me, Mr. John had given me but a few scraps of food that wouldn?t even feed a bug but I ate it and went back to work until about 1 AM in the morning when Mr. John told me I could goto sleep. I slept for about 5 hours then got up to do more work. The cycle continued for about 2 months and then I was given more time to relax.

I was now 27 now and the year was 1874, I lived about 27 years of my life and I still didn?t know who my parents were furthermore, I was still stuck serving the white man. As the days went on couldn?t stop thinking about my parents, I dreamt of how they looked and acted and how much fun I would have once I met them and that morning, once I woke up from my dream, I decided that I had to find out.

It was Sunday night, around 10 PM, Mr. John was inside eating his usual dinner that the other slaves prepared for him (steak and eggs) while I tended the fields. I told the other slaves my plan and they decided that they would assist me by stalling Mr. John. They took an extra long time to cook the meal for him, therefore giving me more time to plan out exactly what I would do.

I would throw my pitch fork in the back window, to make it seem as though someone was vandalizing the house and then run around the house and keep running until I made it to the next town. I ran and ran and kept running for about 2 hours until I got to the neighboring town. I wasn?t sure of the name and it was late at night so I found an alley way and slept there.

I was awoken by a rabid dog licking my face, I pushed him aside, got up, patted him on his head and yawned. I wandered aimlessly around the town (a big town, which to this day I don?t know the name of) until a white woman bumped into me.

I screamed, ?Sorry M?am!!? and helped her pick up her items that she dropped.

She replied, ?Ain?t nothing to cry over.?

I was shocked, I didn?t know why this white woman was being nice to me but I played along. I told her my story and she offered me a cheap room in her house and then told me that her name was ?Mary Swanson.? She told me that once I get a job I could give her whatever money that I wished. For now, the room was free. Mary took me to her house and showed me the room I was to stay in, it was much bigger than the one I was previously staying in, so I was more than happy.

The next day I went out looking for a job, I started at around 9 AM and found one at about 2 PM, it was, again, at a sandwich store. I figured these kinds of places were the best to work at because I would get free lunch and dinner and then pay for my breakfast. I went inside and found my way to the manager?s office. He was a short, fat, white man who had lost almost all of his hair.

He told me his name was Jonathon and then I lied to him and I told him that I was set free by my master because he past away, he looked at me for a few seconds (which seemed like hours to me) then nodded and said, ?Alright, you start now.?

He took me to a little section of the store where meat is sliced and pointed to the other black workers. They were all chopping the meat into thin slices for sandwiches.

Mr. Jonathon then said, ?See them awesome people??

I replied with a straight face as blacks were supposed to, ?Yes, sir.?

?You do exactly as they do, understand great person?? he said.

Once again I replied, ?Yes, sir.?

I immediately got to work and after about 2 hours, around 4 PM, the staff was allowed to eat lunch. Each staff member got free food as long as he did a good job that day, the manager was pleased with my work efforts so I took a little sandwich, I didn?t want to seem greedy.

I worked for a full week and got my pay of 50 cents of which I gave 10 cents to Mary. Once again, she was extremely nice telling me that I should save up and get some new clothes. I didn?t care what she said, I gave her the 10 cents.

The next morning I woke up and noticed a spread of food on the table, which was odd because no one but me and Mary stayed in the house, but, without giving it a second look, I grabbed my hat and jacket and started to walk out the door, but, before I made it out Mary had stopped me.

In a loud, but sweet voice, she said, ?Where do you think your goin? boy??

I replied without raising my voice, ?For some breakfast m?am.?

?Hell no you ain?t, you eatin? right here boy!? she said. ?What?cha think I make all this food for? Huh??

I was tempted to take her up on her offer but like a black person should I said, ?No thank you m?am, I should be paying for my own food.?

?Oh! You think just because you got money you all big now?? she replied

Quickly I answered back, ?No, no, m?am, I just don?t want to trouble you is all.?

?If you don?t want to trouble me then eat this damn food! No one else is!?, she had cornered me, I couldn?t refuse so I decided that I would eat a little of the food.

I ate one egg and soon enough another was on plate, I had told Mary that one was enough but she wouldn?t have any of that ?nonsense? as she put it. As I ate, I thought to myself why the hell would a white woman be so kind to me? Was she gonna kill me and claim that she killed a black runaway so she could get famous in her town? Was she gonna rob me of my money when I wasn?t looking? I was afraid and I needed to know the answer so I asked her;

?Miss Mary,? I said, ?Why you being so nice to me, a great person?? She stopped cooking, dropped her cooking tools and slowly turned around.

?So you want to know, boy?? She asked calmly.

I replied, ?Yes, m?am, I would.?

?Well, my son, William Swanson, died a long time ago and I was always looking for someone to fill his place, I feel lonely in this house and I just wanted you to stay and keep me company,? she responded with a sad look on her face.

I couldn?t believe it, someone actually needed me, but, I knew that I wouldn?t be able to stay forever, ?M?am, you know that I am looking for my family and once I find them I will move in with them and live with them,? and then it struck me. I had come so far, escaped slavery, found a job, I needed to find my family, it was the only thing missing in my life.

?I know...I know...well then at least let me help you boy.? she said in a low-tone as if she were sorry for me.

?You can help me find my family?? I replied hopeful that she would answer positively.

?Yes, easy, boy.? she replied, wiping some tears from her face.

My face lit up and I quickly responded, ?How? I want to know my family!?

She took my hand and led me outside, we walked for a few blocks then stopped outside of a big building with big stone statues and a police guard standing outside of it. The police guard let Mary pass but stopped me dead in my tracks.

?awesome people ain?t allowed in ?ere,? he said firmly.

Mary countered, ?It?s alright, the boy?s with me.?

?He your slave?? he asked.

?Does it matter?? she replied and walked by with me in hand.

We went inside this building and Mary took me to a little section which had this huge book on a pedestal. I managed to make out what the cover said: ?Slave Names & Relations.? Mary told me that book has all the slaves listed in it along with the family name and anyone related to the slave. We turned to the listings under ?D? and soon found ?Douglass.? My name was there along with the names, ?Jeffery,? and ?Dorothea.? And, under the names was two addressees. Mary told me that those were probably my parents, and that they didn?t live too far off.

The next morning, after getting a good night?s rest and eating some breakfast (thanks to Mary again) we got in a train and headed for my family?s house. After about 20 minutes we reached the station closest to the house, we got down, walked for a few blocks and there we were.

It was a small, run-down house with only two windows in the front and grass that was growing almost as tall as me. I walked up, nervous and a bit afraid and knocked on the door with Mary standing right beside me.


A tall, skinny, black man came to the door, ?What the hell do you want??, then noticing Mary, he changed his tone, ?Um...how can I help you folks??

?Dad...? I replied, not knowing what else I could say.

?Huh? Whatch?you say boy?? he quickly responded.

Not knowing what to say, I replied, ?I...I...think ya my dad, sir,? and then a voice came from inside the house.

?Who dat dere Jeffery?? said the soft, womanly voice.

?Shutup Dorothea, I don?t know yet!? the man yelled at her.

He approached me and yelled, ?How da hell I know you my boy?? and that moment Dorothea came out of the kitchen and to the porch.

She stared at me for a few seconds which felt like hours, and then in a soft, sweet voice she said, ?That?s ?im alright. I recognize my boy.?

Jeffery?s face became calm he stepped forward and hugged me. We all went inside and I explained to him my story and everything that I had been through. My mom started crying for me and so did Mary, I then told my parents about Mary and how she had helped me so much and they [my parents] offered Mary money or anything else she wanted. Being the nice woman she is, Mary denied and told me that she best be going. I told her that I was going to stay with my family and catch up on life, she hugged me and left. It was the start of a new life.

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BigSmooth

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I edited it for you.

About sNEFxty years ago, NEF was shNEFpped NEFnto slavery to what NEFs now called AustNEFn, but back NEFn my day NEF sNEFmply knew NEFt as a slave state, or as the people around me called NEFt, Texas. My master, Mr. John, as he tells me to call hNEFm, calls me ?Sam Douglass?. Most folks tell me that NEF?m tall and have a strong buNEFld, but NEF don?t belNEFeve them seeNEFng ?cause NEF don?t eat too much. NEF taught myself to read and wrNEFte and have been doNEFng so ever sNEFnce age 5 (my master encourages NEFt, for what reason, NEF don?t know).

NEF don?t have any NEFdea who my parents are ?cause NEF was sold NEFnto slavery at age 1. The only ?real? parents NEF know are my masters, awful nNEFce folk, except when NEFt comes to work tNEFme, then NEFts lNEFke they get transformed and whNEFp me NEFf NEF make the slNEFghtest mNEFstake. NEF?m only 15 and the beatNEFngs stNEFng and leave marks that contNEFnue to stNEFng whenever NEF touch them or take a shower, however, NEF don?t cry, my master tells me NEFt?s a sNEFgn of weakness. NEF?ve been wantNEFng to escape slavery and fNEFnd my true roots ever sNEFnce NEF was put to work (around age 6). NEF felt that black people were just as NEFntellNEFgent and hard-workNEFng as whNEFte people but we never got to show that sNEFde of ourselves and NEF wouldn?t dare speak of NEFt NEFn front of any whNEFte folk.

NEF?ve had many faNEFled attempts at escapNEFng slavery, some endNEFng up NEFn bad sNEFtuatNEFons. One tNEFme, when NEF was about 13 years old NEF was pNEFckNEFng weeds NEFn front of Mr. John?s front yard and he was sNEFttNEFn? on the porch enjoyNEFn? a glass of lemonade. He told me NEF could have some once NEF fNEFnNEFsh pNEFckNEFng weeds for half of the yard. So NEF dNEFd my work, quNEFckly and wNEFth care and Mr. John went NEFnto the house to prepare a glass of lemonade for me. NEF knew NEF had a chance to run so NEF dNEFd, NEF ran as fast as NEF could, for about 100 yards when Mr. John came out of the house and notNEFced that NEF was gone and preceded to yell at me.

He yelled to me, ?Come back here you nNEFgger! Your NEFn for NEFt thNEFs tNEFme! Ya made the worst decNEFsNEFon of ya lNEFfe you stupNEFd nNEFgger!?

NEF covered my ears because NEF dNEFd not want to here what would happen to me NEFf NEF were to be caught. NEF kept runnNEFng and runnNEFng and looked back every now and then and NEF noted that my master was back NEFn the house. NEF wondered what he was doNEFng, but NEF threw NEFt NEFn the back of my mNEFnd and kept runnNEFng. After about 300 yards NEF was tackled and beaten NEFnto submNEFssNEFon.

Later that day NEF overheard my master talkNEFng on the phone wNEFth someone, he saNEFd, ?Thanks Abe, that goddamn nNEFgger done trNEFed to run away, lucky you were only 3 houses down.?

NEF knew NEFt, my master had called up hNEFs frNEFend to catch me when NEF ran by hNEFs house. Anyway, later that nNEFght my master tNEFed me to the back of hNEFs car and dragged my through the streets, NEF crNEFed and crNEFed and fNEFnally he stopped 5 mNEFles away from home and told me NEF was to walk the rest of the way and he would drNEFve rNEFght besNEFde me to make sure NEF dNEFdn?t dare make a run for NEFt (NEF?d be shot NEFf NEF dNEFd).

For about 7 years NEF never agaNEFn trNEFed to run away, untNEFl ChrNEFstmas Eve, when NEF was 20. NEF was preparNEFng dNEFnner for the master?s usual get together for ChrNEFstmas he has at the house (famNEFly and frNEFends come) when he had told me that he was goNEFng upstaNEFrs to take a shower. NEF dNEFdn?t thNEFnk about my prevNEFous run away at the tNEFme, all NEF was thNEFnkNEFng about was now. NEF made my way outsNEFde creepNEFng along makNEFng sure that NEF dNEFdn?t make any noNEFse and NEF left the water runnNEFng NEFn the kNEFtchen to make NEFt seem as though NEF was stNEFll workNEFng there. As soon as NEF got outsNEFde NEF made a break for NEFt runnNEFng as fast as NEF can, dartNEFng through backyards, quNEFetly but fast, and fNEFnally makNEFng NEFt NEFnto the center of town.

NEF looked straNEFght up at the sky, NEFt was raNEFnNEFng but NEF smNEFled and laughed and started to dance around, everyone NEFn town looked at me but NEF dNEFdn?t care, NEF thought NEF was free from the hell of slavery....and boy was NEF wrong. Anyway, NEF thought to myself, ?What would the fNEFrst thNEFng a free-slave would do?? And then NEFt came to me, NEF would get a real job, get some money and buy some food for my hungry stomach. NEF walked around town, NEFt was about 5 PM, and looked for a ?Blacks Wanted? sNEFgn, soon enough NEF came upon one. NEFt was NEFn a sandwNEFch store. NEF was told that my job would be to cut and prepare the meat to be put NEFn sandwNEFches for the hard whNEFte-workers that come down here to eat durNEFng theNEFr lunch tNEFme. My salary would be approxNEFmately 10 cents a week and NEFt would go up half a cent each week that NEF dNEFd good work. My fNEFrst day at work a few black co-workers asked me how NEF came here and NEFf NEF was an escaped slave, NEF trusted them and told them my story. However, my NEFntuNEFtNEFon that they would keep my secret was wrong, one of the blacks told hNEFs employer and got 2 cents for doNEFng NEFt. My employer called up the polNEFce and NEFmmedNEFately one of them was avaNEFlable to fNEFgure out who NEF belonged to (he was a frNEFend of my master).

As NEF expected, later that nNEFght, when my master took me home he beat me, but not wNEFth hNEFs hand, he took a cane and lashed me on my back several tNEFmes, he told me he would lash me for every mNEFnute he wasted on fNEFndNEFng me. But, NEF knew that he would run out of energy, NEFn total he gave me about 21 lashNEFngs. NEF went to take a shower as he had NEFnstructed me to do and looked NEFn the mNEFrror and saw my badly bruNEFsed back. NEF knew NEFt hurt but NEF held NEFn my tears for fear of another beatNEFng.

My master called up to me: ?Hurry up NEFn there you dumb nNEFgger!?

NEF had not realNEFzed NEFt but NEF had been lookNEFng at my back for a couple of mNEFnutes, nNEFggers were expected to bathe for only a few mNEFnutes. NEF decNEFded that NEF couldn?t bathe so NEF soaked my haNEFr usNEFng tap water and came out dryNEFng NEFt wNEFth a towel as NEFf NEF had taken a bath.

The next day was all work for me, Mr. John had gNEFven me but a few scraps of food that wouldn?t even feed a bug but NEF ate NEFt and went back to work untNEFl about 1 AM NEFn the mornNEFng when Mr. John told me NEF could goto sleep. NEF slept for about 5 hours then got up to do more work. The cycle contNEFnued for about 2 months and then NEF was gNEFven more tNEFme to relax.

NEF was now 27 now and the year was 1874, NEF lNEFved about 27 years of my lNEFfe and NEF stNEFll dNEFdn?t know who my parents were furthermore, NEF was stNEFll stuck servNEFng the whNEFte man. As the days went on couldn?t stop thNEFnkNEFng about my parents, NEF dreamt of how they looked and acted and how much fun NEF would have once NEF met them and that mornNEFng, once NEF woke up from my dream, NEF decNEFded that NEF had to fNEFnd out.

NEFt was Sunday nNEFght, around 10 PM, Mr. John was NEFnsNEFde eatNEFng hNEFs usual dNEFnner that the other slaves prepared for hNEFm (steak and eggs) whNEFle NEF tended the fNEFelds. NEF told the other slaves my plan and they decNEFded that they would assNEFst me by stallNEFng Mr. John. They took an extra long tNEFme to cook the meal for hNEFm, therefore gNEFvNEFng me more tNEFme to plan out exactly what NEF would do.

NEF would throw my pNEFtch fork NEFn the back wNEFndow, to make NEFt seem as though someone was vandalNEFzNEFng the house and then run around the house and keep runnNEFng untNEFl NEF made NEFt to the next town. NEF ran and ran and kept runnNEFng for about 2 hours untNEFl NEF got to the neNEFghborNEFng town. NEF wasn?t sure of the name and NEFt was late at nNEFght so NEF found an alley way and slept there.

NEF was awoken by a rabNEFd dog lNEFckNEFng my face, NEF pushed hNEFm asNEFde, got up, patted hNEFm on hNEFs head and yawned. NEF wandered aNEFmlessly around the town (a bNEFg town, whNEFch to thNEFs day NEF don?t know the name of) untNEFl a whNEFte woman bumped NEFnto me.

NEF screamed, ?Sorry M?am!!? and helped her pNEFck up her NEFtems that she dropped.

She replNEFed, ?ANEFn?t nothNEFng to cry over.?

NEF was shocked, NEF dNEFdn?t know why thNEFs whNEFte woman was beNEFng nNEFce to me but NEF played along. NEF told her my story and she offered me a cheap room NEFn her house and then told me that her name was ?Mary Swanson.? She told me that once NEF get a job NEF could gNEFve her whatever money that NEF wNEFshed. For now, the room was free. Mary took me to her house and showed me the room NEF was to stay NEFn, NEFt was much bNEFgger than the one NEF was prevNEFously stayNEFng NEFn, so NEF was more than happy.

The next day NEF went out lookNEFng for a job, NEF started at around 9 AM and found one at about 2 PM, NEFt was, agaNEFn, at a sandwNEFch store. NEF fNEFgured these kNEFnds of places were the best to work at because NEF would get free lunch and dNEFnner and then pay for my breakfast. NEF went NEFnsNEFde and found my way to the manager?s offNEFce. He was a short, fat, whNEFte man who had lost almost all of hNEFs haNEFr.

He told me hNEFs name was Jonathon and then NEF lNEFed to hNEFm and NEF told hNEFm that NEF was set free by my master because he past away, he looked at me for a few seconds (whNEFch seemed lNEFke hours to me) then nodded and saNEFd, ?AlrNEFght, you start now.?

He took me to a lNEFttle sectNEFon of the store where meat NEFs slNEFced and poNEFnted to the other black workers. They were all choppNEFng the meat NEFnto thNEFn slNEFces for sandwNEFches.

Mr. Jonathon then saNEFd, ?See them nNEFggers??

NEF replNEFed wNEFth a straNEFght face as blacks were supposed to, ?Yes, sNEFr.?

?You do exactly as they do, understand nNEFgger?? he saNEFd.

Once agaNEFn NEF replNEFed, ?Yes, sNEFr.?

NEF NEFmmedNEFately got to work and after about 2 hours, around 4 PM, the staff was allowed to eat lunch. Each staff member got free food as long as he dNEFd a good job that day, the manager was pleased wNEFth my work efforts so NEF took a lNEFttle sandwNEFch, NEF dNEFdn?t want to seem greedy.

NEF worked for a full week and got my pay of 50 cents of whNEFch NEF gave 10 cents to Mary. Once agaNEFn, she was extremely nNEFce tellNEFng me that NEF should save up and get some new clothes. NEF dNEFdn?t care what she saNEFd, NEF gave her the 10 cents.

The next mornNEFng NEF woke up and notNEFced a spread of food on the table, whNEFch was odd because no one but me and Mary stayed NEFn the house, but, wNEFthout gNEFvNEFng NEFt a second look, NEF grabbed my hat and jacket and started to walk out the door, but, before NEF made NEFt out Mary had stopped me.

NEFn a loud, but sweet voNEFce, she saNEFd, ?Where do you thNEFnk your goNEFn? boy??

NEF replNEFed wNEFthout raNEFsNEFng my voNEFce, ?For some breakfast m?am.?

?Hell no you aNEFn?t, you eatNEFn? rNEFght here boy!? she saNEFd. ?What?cha thNEFnk NEF make all thNEFs food for? Huh??

NEF was tempted to take her up on her offer but lNEFke a black person should NEF saNEFd, ?No thank you m?am, NEF should be payNEFng for my own food.?

?Oh! You thNEFnk just because you got money you all bNEFg now?? she replNEFed

QuNEFckly NEF answered back, ?No, no, m?am, NEF just don?t want to trouble you NEFs all.?

?NEFf you don?t want to trouble me then eat thNEFs damn food! No one else NEFs!?, she had cornered me, NEF couldn?t refuse so NEF decNEFded that NEF would eat a lNEFttle of the food.

NEF ate one egg and soon enough another was on plate, NEF had told Mary that one was enough but she wouldn?t have any of that ?nonsense? as she put NEFt. As NEF ate, NEF thought to myself why the hell would a whNEFte woman be so kNEFnd to me? Was she gonna kNEFll me and claNEFm that she kNEFlled a black runaway so she could get famous NEFn her town? Was she gonna rob me of my money when NEF wasn?t lookNEFng? NEF was afraNEFd and NEF needed to know the answer so NEF asked her;

?MNEFss Mary,? NEF saNEFd, ?Why you beNEFng so nNEFce to me, a nNEFgger?? She stopped cookNEFng, dropped her cookNEFng tools and slowly turned around.

?So you want to know, boy?? She asked calmly.

NEF replNEFed, ?Yes, m?am, NEF would.?

?Well, my son, WNEFllNEFam Swanson, dNEFed a long tNEFme ago and NEF was always lookNEFng for someone to fNEFll hNEFs place, NEF feel lonely NEFn thNEFs house and NEF just wanted you to stay and keep me company,? she responded wNEFth a sad look on her face.

NEF couldn?t belNEFeve NEFt, someone actually needed me, but, NEF knew that NEF wouldn?t be able to stay forever, ?M?am, you know that NEF am lookNEFng for my famNEFly and once NEF fNEFnd them NEF wNEFll move NEFn wNEFth them and lNEFve wNEFth them,? and then NEFt struck me. NEF had come so far, escaped slavery, found a job, NEF needed to fNEFnd my famNEFly, NEFt was the only thNEFng mNEFssNEFng NEFn my lNEFfe.

?NEF know...NEF know...well then at least let me help you boy.? she saNEFd NEFn a low-tone as NEFf she were sorry for me.

?You can help me fNEFnd my famNEFly?? NEF replNEFed hopeful that she would answer posNEFtNEFvely.

?Yes, easy, boy.? she replNEFed, wNEFpNEFng some tears from her face.

My face lNEFt up and NEF quNEFckly responded, ?How? NEF want to know my famNEFly!?

She took my hand and led me outsNEFde, we walked for a few blocks then stopped outsNEFde of a bNEFg buNEFldNEFng wNEFth bNEFg stone statues and a polNEFce guard standNEFng outsNEFde of NEFt. The polNEFce guard let Mary pass but stopped me dead NEFn my tracks.

?NNEFggers aNEFn?t allowed NEFn ?ere,? he saNEFd fNEFrmly.

Mary countered, ?NEFt?s alrNEFght, the boy?s wNEFth me.?

?He your slave?? he asked.

?Does NEFt matter?? she replNEFed and walked by wNEFth me NEFn hand.

We went NEFnsNEFde thNEFs buNEFldNEFng and Mary took me to a lNEFttle sectNEFon whNEFch had thNEFs huge book on a pedestal. NEF managed to make out what the cover saNEFd: ?Slave Names & RelatNEFons.? Mary told me that book has all the slaves lNEFsted NEFn NEFt along wNEFth the famNEFly name and anyone related to the slave. We turned to the lNEFstNEFngs under ?D? and soon found ?Douglass.? My name was there along wNEFth the names, ?Jeffery,? and ?Dorothea.? And, under the names was two addressees. Mary told me that those were probably my parents, and that they dNEFdn?t lNEFve too far off.

The next mornNEFng, after gettNEFng a good nNEFght?s rest and eatNEFng some breakfast (thanks to Mary agaNEFn) we got NEFn a traNEFn and headed for my famNEFly?s house. After about 20 mNEFnutes we reached the statNEFon closest to the house, we got down, walked for a few blocks and there we were.

NEFt was a small, run-down house wNEFth only two wNEFndows NEFn the front and grass that was growNEFng almost as tall as me. NEF walked up, nervous and a bNEFt afraNEFd and knocked on the door wNEFth Mary standNEFng rNEFght besNEFde me.


A tall, skNEFnny, black man came to the door, ?What the hell do you want??, then notNEFcNEFng Mary, he changed hNEFs tone, ?Um...how can NEF help you folks??

?Dad...? NEF replNEFed, not knowNEFng what else NEF could say.

?Huh? Whatch?you say boy?? he quNEFckly responded.

Not knowNEFng what to say, NEF replNEFed, ?NEF...NEF...thNEFnk ya my dad, sNEFr,? and then a voNEFce came from NEFnsNEFde the house.

?Who dat dere Jeffery?? saNEFd the soft, womanly voNEFce.

?Shutup Dorothea, NEF don?t know yet!? the man yelled at her.

He approached me and yelled, ?How da hell NEF know you my boy?? and that moment Dorothea came out of the kNEFtchen and to the porch.

She stared at me for a few seconds whNEFch felt lNEFke hours, and then NEFn a soft, sweet voNEFce she saNEFd, ?That?s ?NEFm alrNEFght. NEF recognNEFze my boy.?

Jeffery?s face became calm he stepped forward and hugged me. We all went NEFnsNEFde and NEF explaNEFned to hNEFm my story and everythNEFng that NEF had been through. My mom started cryNEFng for me and so dNEFd Mary, NEF then told my parents about Mary and how she had helped me so much and they [my parents] offered Mary money or anythNEFng else she wanted. BeNEFng the nNEFce woman she NEFs, Mary denNEFed and told me that she best be goNEFng. NEF told her that NEF was goNEFng to stay wNEFth my famNEFly and catch up on lNEFfe, she hugged me and left. NEFt was the start of a new lNEFfe.
 

Josh

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that take you long? :p Maybe you could have just read the story and appreciated it :)
 

mundania

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Good story. Your language is modern, which some people might have a beef with, but I've always found that text written in the 'black-talk' of that time period is hard to read, even though it adds to the realism and authenticity.

The only thing is that the end, the finding of the parents, seems to be a bit rushed and a little lacking in realism. Poor records were kept of slave family, so many times it was impossible to trace back, and even if you could, it'd take quite a while. Overall, a good read!
 

DannyLove

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<< that take you long? :p Maybe you could have just read the story and appreciated it :) >>

He probably use the REPLACE option in Word. fairly easy, but if done manualy, then i feel sorry for him.

danny~!
 

BigSmooth

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Danny, I'm not that bored/stupid, and if I could type fast enough to repost the story with 770 instances of NEF within 5 minutes of the original post, that would be pretty damn amazing!
 

Josh

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mundania:
Thanks for the comments! Yea, I was trying to end the story fast, my teacher said it was supposed to be 6pgs double-spaced. I've got 9 :p Hehe, I also couldn't think of any other way to end it, except for that un-realistic way. I know that slave records were poor, but, I don't think I could have ended it any other way. Thanks again, btw.
 

BigSmooth

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BTW, Josh, you write well for someone your age. There's a couple of problems with sentence structure in a few places, but overall it flows well.

Like here: Your in for it this time! should be &quot;you're&quot;
and here: then its like they get transformed should be &quot;it's&quot;
and here: I covered my ears because I did not want to here what would happen should be &quot;hear&quot;

There are lots of little typos like that, and even though some of them can be attributed to the colloquial language you are using, some of it should still be fixed. Also check your commas. You have some extras and some are missing. If I had a hard copy, I could correct it much easier.

Also, I think it is usually spelled &quot;ma'am&quot;, not &quot;m'am&quot;.
 

mundania

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Also, I've seen this technique before where you can carry a conversation without doing the
He said...
I countered...
He replied...

You can setup a situation with a sentence or two, and let the conversation flow like this:
&quot;Ain't nothing you can do about that.&quot;
&quot;Shut up, you're nuts.&quot;
&quot;Bring it on.&quot;

Basically, you make it plain and clear who's speaking with who, beforehand, and let the conversation flow. I wouldn't recommend it for anything but a small conversation, as it'll get confusing, but it's a good technique to use in certain places. I'm not exactly sure how you would incorporate, but I guess you could file it away as future reference. :)
 

Yo Ma Ma

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Well, check out some historical facts. Car and telephone in early 1800's - nope. He is speaking in late 1800's but talking about things happening 60 years prior. Telephone = 1876 (and much later for rural areas where I assume a person needing to use a slave would reside), automobile (assembly style) later - early 1900's.

Not sure if Texas was a huge slave-owning state (what year did it become a state?)
 

Josh

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Texas became a state in the late 1800s. My teacher said that it has to be &quot;somewhat&quot; historical, I mean, I've got to use some things that are modern so that the story will make some sense and be eaiser to write.

bigsmooth:
Thanks! :) And fixed those errors. About the hard copy? You want me to email it to you?

Mundania:
Cool, I don't feel like editing all those speaking parts, so i'll see what my teacher says. We have to hand in a ROUGH draft on April 25th.
 

duragezic

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<< no, it's too long. bigsmooth you have way to much time on your hands! >>



Well if you read the other replies you see he used the REPLACE feature in Word.