Please critique my resume!!

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: ucdbiendog
Try to use some of the 'action verbs' on this list

:thumbsup: thanks I actuallly did put a few of these in mine instead of some other words.

 

[purbeast0]

also ... how is adding a link to the company name you work for, making the company name on your resume go to the company resume?

is that a good or bad idea? or what about just putting the company website right next to the company name on the resume?

or should i just keep the website off all together 😛 ?

 

[ucdbiendog]

Originally posted by: purbeast0
also ... how is adding a link to the company name you work for, making the company name on your resume go to the company resume?

is that a good or bad idea? or what about just putting the company website right next to the company name on the resume?

or should i just keep the website off all together 😛 ?

if it were me, i wouldnt. if they want to know more about the company they will google it. if you really think it is necessary, do not embed the URL in the name of the company, put the URL in parentheses next to the company name.

 

[purbeast0]

Updated resume attempt #2

 

[Looney]

You may want to try a skill-based resume. You have a work-history based resume now, which is quite common and boring. With a skill-based resume, you list your skills first, and then list your work history that involved those skills (currently you're listing your workhistory, and then the skills involved in those jobs).

Or if you have like $50-100 to spare, try a professional to create your resume.

 

[ucdbiendog]

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Updated resume attempt #2

on your last project, use the word team in there since you worked with the whole class. employers dig that word.

 

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: Looney
You may want to try a skill-based resume. You have a work-history based resume now, which is quite common and boring. With a skill-based resume, you list your skills first, and then list your work history that involved those skills (currently you're listing your workhistory, and then the skills involved in those jobs).

Or if you have like $50-100 to spare, try a professional to create your resume.

Heh if you check from my first resume attempt to my 2nd one, you wil notice that I moved my "Skills" section from above work to below it. You think it's better to put it above the work experience? Anyone else have a say in that?

 

[ucdbiendog]

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: Looney
You may want to try a skill-based resume. You have a work-history based resume now, which is quite common and boring. With a skill-based resume, you list your skills first, and then list your work history that involved those skills (currently you're listing your workhistory, and then the skills involved in those jobs).

Or if you have like $50-100 to spare, try a professional to create your resume.

Heh if you check from my first resume attempt to my 2nd one, you wil notice that I moved my "Skills" section from above work to below it. You think it's better to put it above the work experience? Anyone else have a say in that?

yeah i would agree. my resume initially had my work on top, but i was told to have the skills first.

 

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: ucdbiendog

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: Looney
You may want to try a skill-based resume. You have a work-history based resume now, which is quite common and boring. With a skill-based resume, you list your skills first, and then list your work history that involved those skills (currently you're listing your workhistory, and then the skills involved in those jobs).

Or if you have like $50-100 to spare, try a professional to create your resume.

Heh if you check from my first resume attempt to my 2nd one, you wil notice that I moved my "Skills" section from above work to below it. You think it's better to put it above the work experience? Anyone else have a say in that?

yeah i would agree. my resume initially had my work on top, but i was told to have the skills first.

Ah okay I see. I personally like the actual "look" with the skills first. It's a simple cut/paste though to move it up there 🙂

 

[Looney]

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: Looney
You may want to try a skill-based resume. You have a work-history based resume now, which is quite common and boring. With a skill-based resume, you list your skills first, and then list your work history that involved those skills (currently you're listing your workhistory, and then the skills involved in those jobs).

Or if you have like $50-100 to spare, try a professional to create your resume.

Heh if you check from my first resume attempt to my 2nd one, you wil notice that I moved my "Skills" section from above work to below it. You think it's better to put it above the work experience? Anyone else have a say in that?

Your future employer would more likely be concern about what skills you have rather than where you've worked. First impressions are very important, so if you can create a resume that as soon as he picks up, bam bam bam shows all your skills, that'll be much more impressionable than a workhistory that he'll need to go through to see what skills you have.

I would list your skills first, and list like 5-7 major skills (7 is max... it's the maximum number of things the typical person can remember at any one time... it's the reason why phone numbers are only 7 digits). Each skill would be in bold, then with bullets of your experiences with that skill... including what job and the projects that those skills involved.

http://jobstar.org/tools/resume/res-fu2.php

that's a sample... kinda ugly though, but you'll get the idea.

Here's a better one: http://spot.pcc.edu/~tarnold/pages/JerryIssacs.pdf

ooh, i like this one: http://www.jobseekersworkshop.com/resumes/sample4.html

 

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: Looney

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: Looney
You may want to try a skill-based resume. You have a work-history based resume now, which is quite common and boring. With a skill-based resume, you list your skills first, and then list your work history that involved those skills (currently you're listing your workhistory, and then the skills involved in those jobs).

Or if you have like $50-100 to spare, try a professional to create your resume.

Heh if you check from my first resume attempt to my 2nd one, you wil notice that I moved my "Skills" section from above work to below it. You think it's better to put it above the work experience? Anyone else have a say in that?

Your future employer would more likely be concern about what skills you have rather than where you've worked. First impressions are very important, so if you can create a resume that as soon as he picks up, bam bam bam shows all your skills, that'll be much more impressionable than a workhistory that he'll need to go through to see what skills you have.

I would list your skills first, and list like 5-7 major skills (7 is max... it's the maximum number of things the typical person can remember at any one time... it's the reason why phone numbers are only 7 digits). Each skill would be in bold, then with bullets of your experiences with that skill... including what job and the projects that those skills involved.

http://jobstar.org/tools/resume/res-fu2.php

that's a sample... kinda ugly though, but you'll get the idea.

You have to realize ... I only have 18 months of professional work experience. On that sample one, they have almost 10 with a bunch of different jobs. I only have 1 "real" job in 18 months of experience, so I don't think I'm at that point in my career to make a resume in that manner.

Also, in my field, a lot of "skills" are going to look identical to the last persons. You either know xx or yy language or you don't. You've either programmed on aa or bb platform or you haven't. It seems like you have to get into details on what you've accomplished, and the logical order of doing that seems to be to lump it in with the job you performed it at.

Atleast that's how I think about that. Anyone else feel free to chime in on it?

EDIT: but looney, i do see where you are coming from too though, so don't think I'm just blowing your suggestion off.

 

[Looney]

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: Looney

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: Looney
You may want to try a skill-based resume. You have a work-history based resume now, which is quite common and boring. With a skill-based resume, you list your skills first, and then list your work history that involved those skills (currently you're listing your workhistory, and then the skills involved in those jobs).

Or if you have like $50-100 to spare, try a professional to create your resume.

Heh if you check from my first resume attempt to my 2nd one, you wil notice that I moved my "Skills" section from above work to below it. You think it's better to put it above the work experience? Anyone else have a say in that?

Your future employer would more likely be concern about what skills you have rather than where you've worked. First impressions are very important, so if you can create a resume that as soon as he picks up, bam bam bam shows all your skills, that'll be much more impressionable than a workhistory that he'll need to go through to see what skills you have.

I would list your skills first, and list like 5-7 major skills (7 is max... it's the maximum number of things the typical person can remember at any one time... it's the reason why phone numbers are only 7 digits). Each skill would be in bold, then with bullets of your experiences with that skill... including what job and the projects that those skills involved.

http://jobstar.org/tools/resume/res-fu2.php

that's a sample... kinda ugly though, but you'll get the idea.

You have to realize ... I only have 18 months of professional work experience. On that sample one, they have almost 10 with a bunch of different jobs. I only have 1 "real" job in 18 months of experience, so I don't think I'm at that point in my career to make a resume in that manner.

Also, in my field, a lot of "skills" are going to look identical to the last persons. You either know xx or yy language or you don't. You've either programmed on aa or bb platform or you haven't. It seems like you have to get into details on what you've accomplished, and the logical order of doing that seems to be to lump it in with the job you performed it at.

Atleast that's how I think about that. Anyone else feel free to chime in on it?

EDIT: but looney, i do see where you are coming from too though, so don't think I'm just blowing your suggestion off.

Actually, i think a skill-based resume is much better than a chronological resume if you have LESS work history. Because you're not emphasizing where you've worked, like you would on a chronological resume, but what your skills are. Just put down the skills you think they're looking for, and bullet those with your experiences in those skills. If you've done a particular project that involved it, then you can put that and say what you did.

Anyways, i think a professional resume creator would be good. I'm sure you can try finding some on the web... or look in your local job posting newsgroups, the independent ones usually post there too. It's cheap, especially since it can help you land a job... and they'll do a great job, since they have a better idea on what catches employer's eyes.

 

[purbeast0]

bump for an updated what I think is my final version ...

Potential Final Version.

 

[tfinch2]

Objective is too wordy.

Try this:

"To utilize and expand my technological skills in the field of software application development."

 

[notfred]

I hate when people blur out half thier resume. Sure, you don't want to give out your phone number, but who cares if people know where you work?

 

[tfinch2]

Originally posted by: notfred
I hate when people blur out half thier resume. Sure, you don't want to give out your phone number, but who cares if people know where you work?

How would you like it if some ass let your current employer know you were looking for a new job?

 

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: tfinch2
Objective is too wordy.

Try this:

"To utilize and expand my technological skills in the field of software application development."

I agree that it doesn't flow. I am just trying to make it sound not so generic. Here is the one I have come up with now, how do you feel about this:

"To obtain a position where I can apply my years of experience to become a valuable asset and utilize my strong desire to learn new things to develop great software"

It fits on 2 lines, which is my max length I want.

 

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: notfred
I hate when people blur out half thier resume. Sure, you don't want to give out your phone number, but who cares if people know where you work?

read the post below you.

and wtf ... it has nothing to do with how my resume flows for my purpose, or anything as far was the kind of critique i'm looking for. gtfo if you don't want to help and just want to troll.

 

[tfinch2]

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: tfinch2
Objective is too wordy.

Try this:

"To utilize and expand my technological skills in the field of software application development."

I agree that it doesn't flow. I am just trying to make it sound not so generic. Here is the one I have come up with now, how do you feel about this:

"To obtain a position where I can apply my years of experience to become a valuable asset and utilize my strong desire to learn new things to develop great software"

It fits on 2 lines, which is my max length I want.

It's like a huge run-on sentence.

 

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: tfinch2

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: tfinch2
Objective is too wordy.

Try this:

"To utilize and expand my technological skills in the field of software application development."

I agree that it doesn't flow. I am just trying to make it sound not so generic. Here is the one I have come up with now, how do you feel about this:

"To obtain a position where I can apply my years of experience to become a valuable asset and utilize my strong desire to learn new things to develop great software"

It fits on 2 lines, which is my max length I want.

It's like a huge run-on sentence.

I see how it can sound like that. I am just trying to make it not sound so generic and simple as most of them typically do. Objectives are the first thing that is read on a resume, and I am just trying to have them read it and not feel "like it's just another resume" by having something different than the typical one.

If it were okay, my objective would say "Objectve: TO GET THE FVCKING JOB!" heh but I don't think that'll work 😀

 

[simms]

I have never seen a dash on the title before a name - is that a typo?

 

[purbeast0]

Originally posted by: simms
I have never seen a dash on the title before a name - is that a typo?

No it's not a typo. There is one on the other side to the right of my last name as well. It is just for looks, and I'm glad you have never seen it before because I don't want it to look completely "normal" 🙂

And here is what I think is my "final" objective:

"To obtain a position where I can use my experience and knowledge to develop great software and utilize my strong desire to learn new things"

It's like 1.5 lines when put into my format.

 

[miniMUNCH]

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: tfinch2

Originally posted by: purbeast0

Originally posted by: tfinch2
Objective is too wordy.

Try this:

"To utilize and expand my technological skills in the field of software application development."

I agree that it doesn't flow. I am just trying to make it sound not so generic. Here is the one I have come up with now, how do you feel about this:

"To obtain a position where I can apply my years of experience to become a valuable asset and utilize my strong desire to learn new things to develop great software"

It fits on 2 lines, which is my max length I want.

It's like a huge run-on sentence.

I see how it can sound like that. I am just trying to make it not sound so generic and simple as most of them typically do. Objectives are the first thing that is read on a resume, and I am just trying to have them read it and not feel "like it's just another resume" by having something different than the typical one.

If it were okay, my objective would say "Objectve: TO GET THE FVCKING JOB!" heh but I don't think that'll work 😀

Before I left work for grad school I was on a few hiring panels.

My advice: just make the objective "vanilla" and concise and use proper english. Your obj. is not good. What tfinch2 recommended is better.