need some artistic critique...

[T4NNER]

sketch

I need some advice or comments on the basic porportions of this figure before I start painting it in photoshop. Just tell me what you see wrong or what seems out of place. Thanks.

 

[Viper GTS]

One thing I noticed, if you look at the towel or whatever it is on her head. It appears to hang further over her shoulder than it does in the mirror.

Also, is she giving herself the finger?

Viper GTS

 

[T4NNER]

The backside of the towel is a little too light... i'll darken it up and it should look closer to the reflection.
As for the finger part... no she isn't flippin the bird, she's applying makeup

 

[Viper GTS]

Can you make her topless?

Viper GTS

 

[T4NNER]

I could, but she's 16.. and i'd go to jail for child pr0n.. so you make the call.

 

[Viper GTS]

Oh... This is a specific person? Never mind then...

But I don't think you can get into trouble for DRAWING pictures, taking pictures is entirely different...

16's close enough to my age...



Viper GTS

 

[T4NNER]

I could get in trouble for drawing pictures... if i were in turn trying to sell them. This is only a practice, so that I can become more familiar with the graphic tablet and photoshop.

 

[lowtech1]

Good use of thick & thin line, and proportionally well lay out, except for a couple of minor details.

The top of the ear is too low because the eye should be about 1/5 down from the top of the ear, and the bottom of the ear lobe should be align with the tip of the nose.

The left hand could be slightly too large...sometime it is better to exaggerate the dimension to enhance the 3d effect (larger when it is closer to you & smaller when it is farther way).

And, hand is the hardest thing to draw, so don?t fret if you can't get it absolutely right.

Other wise everything look good.

Ps. A trick to drawing is to have thick (heavy) line on the side that you want to show darkness or tension, and fine (light) line on the side that you wan to show light or harmony. In your case, the far side of the body away from the lamp can be use for darkness or tension. You can also reverse the use of heavy/light lines if you want to use shading of the body to define the empty/non-empty (positive/negative) space.

 

[MustangSVT]

take a good look at her left leg. look at her left elbow. the thigh seems to be way too thick right where it meets her left arm. the proportions seem alright besides that. And to be picky, that lamp's elipses are not correct shape. but then that's an easy mistake, would luv to see your final work. good luck

 

[T4NNER]

thanks peeps, that's exactly what I was looking for.

 

[sweetrobin]

Actually you wouldnt even have to try to sell it ... if someone found out you had painted an underaged girl naked you could get in serious trouble . My parents had a friend who got a huge divorce settlement because she accidently found her husband(a famous local artist)'s stash of painting of young naked girls. She divorced him in the blink of the eye and he gave her a HUGE settlement to keep her from going to the police, and papers about it.

 

[SKiller]

Hmm.. I would either put her on a chair of some kind or make the mirror smaller. It would make it look more natural IMHO. Is she in a bathroom/bedroom?

P.S. You forgot the fold in her shorts where her leg is bent at the thigh. Also her knees are too round, especially compared to the rest of her. Make her leg features a bit sharper, maybe add some shadow.