is this email too short?

[skim milk]

Hey Scott, it's *my name* from the **** party. (the korean guy)
I'm interested in interning at **** this summer, is there any way I can forward you my resume?

Thanks in advance,
*my name*

 

[Evadman]

sounds good to me. *shrug*

 

[skim milk]

should I add in a line saying how I'm glad to have met him or is that just tacky and trying too hard?

 

[KLin]

Hopefully you change the my name to your real name before you send it.

 

[yankeesfan]

I'm laughing at the "the korean guy" part...

 

[skim milk]

Originally posted by: yankeesfan
I'm laughing at the "the korean guy" part...

he's a cool guy
a recent graduate too so he's willing to help others and our convo was very casual

 

[Blazin Trav]

add something about how you aren't much of a partier and like working better

 

[chrisms]

add: "I know you were really messed up and don't remember but if you don't help me with this I'll have to tell everyone about the fun night we had in your car.."

 

[skim milk]

this is my first time making a REAL connection and using it... let's see if this networking thing pays off or not

 

[WildHorse]

delete this part:
"is there any way I can forward you my resume? "

maybe :
"Would you be willing to please direct my attached resume to the appropriate person in XYZ department?"

Send resume now, with the e-mail.

 

[SonnyDaze]

Originally posted by: chrisms
add: "I know you were really messed up and don't remember but if you don't help me with this I'll have to tell everyone about the fun night we had in your car.."

:laugh:

On second thought just put it all in the subject line.

 

[LS20]

the f*ck party?

 

[clamum]

Originally posted by: LS20
the f*ck party?

:laugh::Q

 

[irishScott]

Originally posted by: scott
delete this part:
"is there any way I can forward you my resume? "

maybe :
"Would you be willing to please direct my attached resume to the appropriate person in XYZ department?"

Send resume now, with the e-mail.

Agreed. Add some fluff, make it sound nice. Core message is fine though. Also, I've found it to be more effective if you can make the request in person. I wouldn't make an appointment for it, but If you can meet him casually at another "party - ish" event, get him relativly alone, and just say: "Also, I was wondering if there are any oppurtunities for interships this *spring, summer, year, etc*" or something along those lines. He'll get the message.

That's how I got mine with Lockheed Martin, but then again I had worked with the guy for a month and he had seen my skills and abilites.