Is this a sentence?

[Zanix]

"With this technology comes a new risk."


I'm peer reviewing a paper for class. I'm no engrish major, that's for sure.


Edit: How I'm looking at it being wrong:
"With this technology (prep. phrase) comes a new risk."

It looks like it doesn't have a subject.



So the right answer looks like:

Originally posted by: Ikonomi
I don't see what's wrong with the prepositional phrase. The sentence is just inverted. "A new risk comes with this technology" becomes "with this technology comes a new risk". It's the same.

Originally posted by: FeuerFrei
Yes it has a subject, it just comes after the verb. The "risk" is "coming". "Risk" is the subject.

 

[Steve]

It feels somewhat incomplete.

 

[Juice Box]

lets see here

1) Noun....check
2) Verb.....check

checks out

 

[Zanix]

That's what I thought, but I'm not sure of the rule that's been broken.

 

[HardcoreRobot]

maybe comma after technology...

this sounds smoother - this technology comes with a new risk

 

[FoBoT]

why not
"This technology comes with a new risk."

 

[Phoenix86]

"This technology presents new risks." sounds better to me.

 

[vshah]

Originally posted by: Juice Box
lets see here

1) Noun....check
2) Verb.....check

checks out

digitalsnare is that you?

 

[meltdown75]

How about:

"With this technology, however, comes a new risk."

Breaks it up a bit.

 

[Juice Box]

Originally posted by: vshah

Originally posted by: Juice Box
lets see here

1) Noun....check
2) Verb.....check

checks out

digitalsnare is that you?

omg, how did u know

 

[FoBoT]

Originally posted by: Phoenix86
"This technology presents new risks." sounds better to me.

that is even better/winner

 

[Zanix]

Thanks for the replies. :beer:

 

[amcdonald]

There's nothing wrong with that as a sentence. It may flow better if you added a 'but' before it and threw it on the end of the sentence before it.

 

[nakedfrog]

I think it's fine, especially if you imagine it being said by James Earl Jones or one of those movie preview voiceover guys.

 

[Appledrop]

Originally posted by: Zanix
"With this technology comes a new risk."


I'm peer reviewing a paper for class. I'm no engrish major, that's for sure.


Edit: How I'm looking at it being wrong:
"With this technology (prep. phrase) comes a new risk."

It looks like it doesn't have a subject.

isnt the subject "this technology" ?

 

[SilentButDeadly]

Originally posted by: meltdown75
How about:

"With this technology, however, comes a new risk."

Breaks it up a bit.

I think if you did it like that it would be better like:

".....with this technology; however, brings a new risk."

 

[Ikonomi]

There's nothing wrong with that sentence. Don't change the subject of the sentence to technology ("this technology comes with a new risk"). because that's not what the original sentence is saying. I think adding a "however" in there would give it a better rhythm.

Another solution is to combine this sentence and the one talking about what the "risk" is into one sentence, using a colon.

"With this technology, however, comes a new risk: Dangerous levels of radiation are released..................."

 

[Ikonomi]

Originally posted by: SilentButDeadly

Originally posted by: meltdown75
How about:

"With this technology, however, comes a new risk."

Breaks it up a bit.

I think if you did it like that it would be better like:

".....with this technology; however, brings a new risk."

That sentence doesn't make sense. :thumbsdown:

 

[smc13]

I was about to write that "with this technology" is a prepostional phrase but I see that you have stated that already.

Write the sentence like this; "Use of this technology comes with new risks."

 

[FeuerFrei]

Originally posted by: Zanix
"With this technology comes a new risk."


I'm peer reviewing a paper for class. I'm no engrish major, that's for sure.


Edit: How I'm looking at it being wrong:
"With this technology (prep. phrase) comes a new risk."

It looks like it doesn't have a subject.

Yes it has a subject, it just comes after the verb. The "risk" is "coming". "Risk" is the subject.

 

[Ikonomi]

I don't see what's wrong with the prepositional phrase. The sentence is just inverted. "A new risk comes with this technology" becomes "with this technology comes a new risk". It's the same.

 

[Zanix]

Originally posted by: Ikonomi
I don't see what's wrong with the prepositional phrase. The sentence is just inverted. "A new risk comes with this technology" becomes "with this technology comes a new risk". It's the same.

Ah ok, I see what you and FeuerFrei are saying now. The inversion was getting me.

 

[ITJunkie]

Originally posted by: Juice Box
lets see here

1) Noun....check
2) Verb.....check

checks out

LOL :laugh:

 

[Zanix]

BTW this is supposed to be a technical paper, not creative writing. Does that make a difference in the inversion?

 

[FoBoT]

why does this technology create such bad radiation? where is it being used? is this a "black helicopter" type thing??