Is this a good starting topic sentence?

[bladder23]

?Daedalus and Icarus? and ?Phaeton and the Horses of the Sun? are two stories which are strikingly similar, despite their contextual differences.

Does the word 'contextual' fit alright in there?

 

[thespeakerbox]

Nope. very boring. I would stop reading it there.

http://www.amazon.com/Writing-...&qid=1193199150&sr=8-1

 

[Rockinacoustic]

Originally posted by: bladder23
Despite their contextual differences, Daedalus and Icarus and Phaeton and the Horses of the Sun are two stories which are strikingly similar.

Does the word 'contextual' fit alright in there?

Flows better that way. Not a very good opening sentence though. It'd be better off an ending statement to your intro.

 

[bladder23]

Originally posted by: thespeakerbox
Nope. very boring. I would stop reading it there.

http://www.amazon.com/Writing-...&qid=1193199150&sr=8-1

I appreciate your input but what options do you have when you are given a ghey subject in the first place.

 

[bladder23]

Originally posted by: Rockinacoustic

Originally posted by: bladder23
Despite their contextual differences. Daedalus and Icarus and Phaeton and the Horses of the Sun are two stories which are strikingly similar.

Does the word 'contextual' fit alright in there?

Flows better that way.

Great idea

 

[needalife]

sux

 

[tasmanian]

Originally posted by: bladder23

Originally posted by: thespeakerbox
Nope. very boring. I would stop reading it there.

http://www.amazon.com/Writing-...&qid=1193199150&sr=8-1

I appreciate your input but what options do you have when you are given a ghey subject in the first place.

You could lie your ass off to make it more interesting.