• We’re currently investigating an issue related to the forum theme and styling that is impacting page layout and visual formatting. The problem has been identified, and we are actively working on a resolution. There is no impact to user data or functionality, this is strictly a front-end display issue. We’ll post an update once the fix has been deployed. Thanks for your patience while we get this sorted.

ideas on my cover letter for a job i'm applying for

Originally posted by: amdforever2
why is experience capitalized
Click to expand...
It shouldn't be.

Also:
* I'd change "some of the many aspects of the" to just "many of the aspects of the"
* "fond that" is unpossible English. "fond of the fact that" doth be grammatical if long-winded. "I really like that this field . . ." is more to the point.
 
thats the kinda help i was looking for
thanks Dave

if anyone else has any pointers i'll check this thread again in the morn before I mail everything off
 
you have a cool user name so I'll help you. first, reorder the 2nd paragraph to start with what they will get out of the deal. I would put the sentence about the shows you produced first because it's the most impressive part. it's cool to write about what you like about the field, but save that for after.

"I have been exposed to some of the many..." delete "some of the"
"I have grown quite fond..." incorrect usage, say something like "This field is a perfect fit for me because it allows me to..."
"quality of our programing" programming is misspelled.
"Also, while at Citytv"... kind of a runon, "which has greatly improved..." can become its own sentence worded a bit differently.
instead of "I'm enclosing" it's nicer to say "Please find enclosed". Delete "a copy of", extraneous.

good luck!

<---user formerly known as Pipboy 😉
 
wow I got a spider in my thread yet no syringer was to be found.....

any hoo I updated my cover letter with some of the ideas you guys gave me

Text
 
delete the last "at Citytv", you already used it in that sentence. and be consistent, you have Citytv and CityTV in there.
 
Print that out with some serif font other than Times New Roman.. most of the time it looks more professional.
 
thanks for the help everyone. already got an email back from the guy that I had connections with at the station and he isn't going to be the one prescreening the applicants the HR department is... oh well as long as I can make it past that phase I should be good.
 
You must log in or register to reply here.

TRENDING THREADS

Back
Top