How does this sound for an ad in the local paper?

[aphex]

4 lines, max of 22 characters per line....

LCD COMPUTER MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

or

DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

 

[QuitBanningMe]

:thumbsup:

 

[icejunkie]

Originally posted by: QuitBanningMe
:thumbsup:

 

[Otaking]

Don't want to include brand? Might be able to shorten "Computer" to "PC" or "Comp"?

 

[aphex]

Originally posted by: Otaking
Don't want to include brand? Might be able to shorten "Computer" to "PC" or "Comp"?

I live in a town where the average age is 65, i think having COMPUTER would suit me better than Comp. and Dell somewhere on there.

 

[n7]

Yeah i would say "brandname" LCD Mon.

Or is there a proper abbreviation for monitor?

Edit: Nevermind

Your way is likely better for a smaller older town.

 

[dighn]

Originally posted by: aphex

Originally posted by: Otaking
Don't want to include brand? Might be able to shorten "Computer" to "PC" or "Comp"?

I live in a town where the average age is 65, i think having COMPUTER would suit me better than Comp. and Dell somewhere on there.

hmm if i were interested i'd definitely like to know the brand and model (eg LCD Mon. brand/model) but i guess in your case ...

 

[tami]

sounds good.

 

[aphex]

DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

 

[dighn]

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

i vote for this one

 

[aphex]

Personally, i think COMPUTER would stand out more to the old farts... They can call to get the brand i guess....

 

[Otaking]

Originally posted by: aphex
Personally, i think COMPUTER would stand out more to the old farts... They can call to get the brand i guess....

If you believe "Computer" is the key word, I'd display "COMPUTER LCD MONITOR" instead to catch attention.

 

[TechBoyJK]

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
details.at/aphex

Or

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, $235/each,
details.at/XXXXXXXXXX


Explanation on Details.at

 

[aphex]

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
details.at/aphex

Or

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, $235/each,
details.at/XXXXXXXXXX


Explanation on Details.at

The fogeys unfortunately probably won't be able to figure out thats a web addy, sorry.

 

[RossMAN]

You'd have better luck selling it here.

List complete specs and take actual pictures
http://tampa.craigslist.org/

 

[TechBoyJK]

Originally posted by: aphex

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
details.at/aphex

Or

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, $235/each,
details.at/XXXXXXXXXX


Explanation on Details.at

The fogeys unfortunately probably won't be able to figure out thats a web addy, sorry.

so you are selling only to fogeys? I'd think "we" are more apt to buy some Dell LCD's than any fogey's... If a fogey cant tell thats a web addy, think they'll know what LCD, DVI, or VGA is? besides, you can tell them what it is when they call and try and say they want to setup an appointment to see them. "There is a web addy in the classified of which has pictures and a more detailed explanation of the monitors"

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
www.details.at/aphex

 

[Horticulture]

Well, if you asked an old person to name a computer maker, they would probably say Dell - agree?

 

[TechBoyJK]

Originally posted by: Horticulture
Well, if you asked an old person to name a computer maker, they would probably say Dell - agree?

No doubt. Unfortunately, they would just as easily think dell made a device to monitor LCD.

 

[RossMAN]

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
details.at/aphex

Or

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, $235/each,
details.at/XXXXXXXXXX


Explanation on Details.at

The fogeys unfortunately probably won't be able to figure out thats a web addy, sorry.

so you are selling only to fogeys? I'd think "we" are more apt to buy some Dell LCD's than any fogey's... If a fogey cant tell thats a web addy, think they'll know what LCD, DVI, or VGA is? besides, you can tell them what it is when they call and try and say they want to setup an appointment to see them. "There is a web addy in the classified of which has pictures and a more detailed explanation of the monitors"

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
www.details.at/aphex

Sorry Josh he has a point. If you're targetting "old fogey's" you need to dumb it down like:

2 DELL FLAT PANEL LCD
17" computer monitors
$235 each xxx-xxx-xxxx
http://aphexii.com/dell

An old fogey will understand that and there's an http:// and .com URL where you can list complete specs, pictures and your contact details.

 

[TechBoyJK]

Originally posted by: RossMAN

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
details.at/aphex

Or

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, $235/each,
details.at/XXXXXXXXXX


Explanation on Details.at

The fogeys unfortunately probably won't be able to figure out thats a web addy, sorry.

so you are selling only to fogeys? I'd think "we" are more apt to buy some Dell LCD's than any fogey's... If a fogey cant tell thats a web addy, think they'll know what LCD, DVI, or VGA is? besides, you can tell them what it is when they call and try and say they want to setup an appointment to see them. "There is a web addy in the classified of which has pictures and a more detailed explanation of the monitors"

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
www.details.at/aphex

Sorry Josh he has a point. If you're targetting "old fogey's" you need to dumb it down like:

2 DELL FLAT PANEL LCD
17" computer monitors
$235 each xxx-xxx-xxxx
http://aphexii.com/dell

An old fogey will understand that and there's an http:// and .com URL where you can list complete specs, pictures and your contact details.

Yep, and if I, for instance, saw this ad and was potentially interested, I could look up the url, look at things in more detail, and make a more informed decision about moving forward to contact you and use up your time.

 

[aplefka]

Hidden FS/T post, very nice indeed.

 

[Scarpozzi]

Name brand is key young skywalker.

 

[RossMAN]

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: RossMAN

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
details.at/aphex

Or

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, $235/each,
details.at/XXXXXXXXXX


Explanation on Details.at

The fogeys unfortunately probably won't be able to figure out thats a web addy, sorry.

so you are selling only to fogeys? I'd think "we" are more apt to buy some Dell LCD's than any fogey's... If a fogey cant tell thats a web addy, think they'll know what LCD, DVI, or VGA is? besides, you can tell them what it is when they call and try and say they want to setup an appointment to see them. "There is a web addy in the classified of which has pictures and a more detailed explanation of the monitors"

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
www.details.at/aphex

Sorry Josh he has a point. If you're targetting "old fogey's" you need to dumb it down like:

2 DELL FLAT PANEL LCD
17" computer monitors
$235 each xxx-xxx-xxxx
http://aphexii.com/dell

An old fogey will understand that and there's an http:// and .com URL where you can list complete specs, pictures and your contact details.

Yep, and if I, for instance, saw this ad and was potentially interested, I could look up the url, look at things in more detail, and make a more informed decision about moving forward to contact you and use up your time.

Exactly!

You want to give the buyer every opportunity to see the full details, specifications and pictures ... once they see the specs, pictures and how much $$$ it is below retail they'll be ready to buy.

 

[aplefka]

Originally posted by: RossMAN

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: RossMAN

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex

Originally posted by: TechBoyJK

Originally posted by: aphex
DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, (2) avail.
$235/each, XXX-XXXX

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
details.at/aphex

Or

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI & VGA inputs,
Exc. Cond, $235/each,
details.at/XXXXXXXXXX


Explanation on Details.at

The fogeys unfortunately probably won't be able to figure out thats a web addy, sorry.

so you are selling only to fogeys? I'd think "we" are more apt to buy some Dell LCD's than any fogey's... If a fogey cant tell thats a web addy, think they'll know what LCD, DVI, or VGA is? besides, you can tell them what it is when they call and try and say they want to setup an appointment to see them. "There is a web addy in the classified of which has pictures and a more detailed explanation of the monitors"

2 DELL LCD MONITORS,
17", DVI/VGA Exc. Cond
$235/each, XXX-XXXX
www.details.at/aphex

Sorry Josh he has a point. If you're targetting "old fogey's" you need to dumb it down like:

2 DELL FLAT PANEL LCD
17" computer monitors
$235 each xxx-xxx-xxxx
http://aphexii.com/dell

An old fogey will understand that and there's an http:// and .com URL where you can list complete specs, pictures and your contact details.

Yep, and if I, for instance, saw this ad and was potentially interested, I could look up the url, look at things in more detail, and make a more informed decision about moving forward to contact you and use up your time.

Exactly!

You want to give the buyer every opportunity to see the full details, specifications and pictures ... once they see the specs, pictures and how much $$$ it is below retail they'll be ready to buy.

You and your hot deal fetish.

 

[TechBoyJK]

Originally posted by: RossMAN
Exactly!

You want to give the buyer every opportunity to see the full details, specifications and pictures ... once they see the specs, pictures and how much $$$ it is below retail they'll be ready to buy.