Help me with grammar!

[Turkish]

Hey fellas,

Decided to update my CV (resume) and I need some help. Does the following job description (as what I did at this job) sound good and professional?

From June 2005 through December 2005, conducted large scale quantitative survey data analysis of the program "Conditional Cash Transfer to Reduce Poverty in Turkey", and presented results that reflect the socio-economic reality of the governmental policies. Researched the social dimension of land based transportation systems on a global scale between January 2005-present.

Thanks for helping

 

[iroast]

Too many details. Just say what you did and how it equates to $$$/success

 

[Turkish]

Well this is going to be my first fulltime job, so I need to put as much as I can on there to fill that one bigass single page! Wohoo

Edit: oh and not to be a prick but please just help me with the grammar... tell me if I have an mistakes, thanks

 

[iroast]

From June 2005 through December 2005, conducted large-scale quantitative survey data analysis of the program "Conditional Cash Transfer to Reduce Poverty in Turkey" and presented results that reflect the socio-economic reality of the governmental policies.

Between January 2005 to present, researched the social dimension of land-based transportation systems on a global scale

 

[Turkish]

Originally posted by: iroast
From June 2005 through December 2005, conducted large-scale quantitative survey data analysis of the program "Conditional Cash Transfer to Reduce Poverty in Turkey" and presented results that reflect the socio-economic reality of the governmental policies.

Between January 2005 to present, researched the social dimension of land-based transportation systems on a global scale

Thanks, the 2nd sentence however still gives me the green line under it on Word... the "consider revising the fragment" line... is Word accurate on these?

 

[cKGunslinger]

From June 2005 through December 2005, wtfpwned some biznitches to help make mad, fly, dope bling! Hire me and I'll do the same fo' your ass!

 

[iroast]

From June 2005 through December 2005, conducted large-scale quantitative survey data analysis of the program "Conditional Cash Transfer to Reduce Poverty in Turkey" and presented results that reflect the socio-economic reality of the governmental policies.

From January 2005 to present, researched the social dimension of land-based transportation systems on a global scale

 

[Turkish]

Still green lines for fragment Oh well...

 

[iroast]

don't forget the period at the end. Oh well indeed.

 

[Syrch]

Originally posted by: cKGunslinger

From June 2005 through December 2005, wtfpwned some biznitches to help make mad, fly, dope bling! Hire me and I'll do the same fo' your ass!

ROFL

 

[Elderly Newt]

it's giving you a green line because it IS a fragment. There's no subject in the sentence. You might want to add an "I", but I don't know anything about resumes, so maybe you're better off without one?

 

[cKGunslinger]

Originally posted by: Turkish
Still green lines for fragment Oh well...

Technically, it is a fragment (there's no stated subject,) but resumes don't need complete sentences, but rather bulleted lists of fragments. the subject is understood to be "you."



edit: The newt beat me to it.

 

[Syrch]

In a resume its very bad to use I....very bad!

 

[Turkish]

ok thank you all fellas! i guess the green line is there to stay!

:beer:

 

[Injury]

Originally posted by: Syrch
In a resume its very bad to use I, complete sentences, and details that should be discussed in an interview....very bad!

Fixed.


June 2005 - December 2005:
-conducted analysis of the program "Conditional Cash Transfer to Reduce Poverty in Turkey"
-presented results that reflect the socio-economic reality of the governmental policies
-Researched land based transportation systems on global scale


Done.

 

[remagavon]

Originally posted by: Turkish
ok thank you all fellas! i guess the green line is there to stay!

:beer:

In the future, don't use word's grammar check. It's terrible unless you're writing very basic things. I've had teachers repeatedly tell me never to use it (I'm an English major).

Good luck with your interview.