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grammar/resume guru, resume help!

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richardycc

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I am back in the job market because of the corp BS, so I am writing a cover letter, so how do I make the follow sentence look better, grammarically correct, etc? I think I need to break up the sentence some how, or maybe rearrange it abit?

As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.




P.S: I need to give the sense that I am already hitting the glass ceiling with no room for promotion, and I am sick of all these changing of different owners.

thanks!
 
Although my company has changed hands three times over the past two years, I have remained committed to my position for over four years.

you failed to mention if it was *YOUR* company or not
 
no it is not my company, I just work there. how do you say "my company" without sounding like I own it?
"The company that I work at" might be too long/wordy. 🙂
 
Cover letter? How long is it? If it's more than a paragraph it'll go into the circular file. A cover letter just needs to say, "Hey, I want this job, here are two or three points to show why I'm good at it, here's why I like your company." That's it.

ZV
 
That's something that should not even be in your resume/cover letter to begin with. That kind of thing is worth mentioning in a interview, when the topic comes about, but definitely do not put that kind of stuff in your resume. It's not needed.

Your cover letter is a way of indicating to a perspective employer why you feel you are qualified to work for them. They don't need to hear about your former company's downfalls.
 
As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.


As my resume shows I have remained at my job for over four years, and this through my company ownership changing three times in the past two years.
 
Originally posted by: Rudee
That's something that should not even be in your resume/cover letter to begin with. That kind of thing is worth mentioning in a interview, when the topic comes about, but definitely do not put that kind of stuff in your resume. It's not needed.

Your cover letter is a way of indicating to a perspective employer why you feel you are qualified to work for them. They don't need to hear about your former company's downfalls.
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true, I just thought it might show that I am loyal thur thick and thin (but only for so long). 😉 This is for the coverletter, it will be short and sweet. I am still brainstorming, so I might leave this out.
 
Originally posted by: richardycc
I am back in the job market because of the corp BS, so I am writing a cover letter, so how do I make the follow sentence look better, grammarically correct, etc? I think I need to break up the sentence some how, or maybe rearrange it abit?

As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.




P.S: I need to give the sense that I am already hitting the glass ceiling with no room for promotion, and I am sick of all these changing of different owners.

thanks!
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Without much changes to the original sentence: "As you can see from my resume, I have been working at the same job for over four years--even though the company has changed ownership three times for the past two years."

However, I would personally restructure the whole sentence, so that it reads:

As indicated in my resume, I have worked for the same company (I would instead probably use the real name of the company) for over four years--in spite of the Company changing ownership thrice in the past two years.
 
Originally posted by: DearQT
Originally posted by: richardycc
I am back in the job market because of the corp BS, so I am writing a cover letter, so how do I make the follow sentence look better, grammarically correct, etc? I think I need to break up the sentence some how, or maybe rearrange it abit?

As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.




P.S: I need to give the sense that I am already hitting the glass ceiling with no room for promotion, and I am sick of all these changing of different owners.

thanks!
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Without much changes to the original sentence: "As you can see from my resume, I have been working at the same job for over four years--even though the company has changed ownership three times for the past two years."

However, I would personally restructure the whole sentence, so that it reads:

As indicated in my resume, I have worked for the same company (I would instead probably use the real name of the company) for over four years--in spite of the Company changing ownership thrice in the past two years.
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the "thrice" sounds too snobby

 
Originally posted by: richardycc
Originally posted by: Rudee
That's something that should not even be in your resume/cover letter to begin with. That kind of thing is worth mentioning in a interview, when the topic comes about, but definitely do not put that kind of stuff in your resume. It's not needed.

Your cover letter is a way of indicating to a perspective employer why you feel you are qualified to work for them. They don't need to hear about your former company's downfalls.
Click to expand...

true, I just thought it might show that I am loyal thur thick and thin (but only for so long). 😉 This is for the coverletter, it will be short and sweet. I am still brainstorming, so I might leave this out.
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Definitely leave this out. Trust me on this. Save that kind of discussion for the interview, where it belongs. Being the last rat to leave a sinking ship is nothing to want on the cover letter. Focus on real accomplishments.

 
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