grammar/resume guru, resume help!

[richardycc]

I am back in the job market because of the corp BS, so I am writing a cover letter, so how do I make the follow sentence look better, grammarically correct, etc? I think I need to break up the sentence some how, or maybe rearrange it abit?

As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.




P.S: I need to give the sense that I am already hitting the glass ceiling with no room for promotion, and I am sick of all these changing of different owners.

thanks!

 

[Pepsi90919]

Although my company has changed hands three times over the past two years, I have remained committed to my position for over four years.

you failed to mention if it was *YOUR* company or not

 

[Stumps]

To much thinking for me!

 

[richardycc]

no it is not my company, I just work there. how do you say "my company" without sounding like I own it?
"The company that I work at" might be too long/wordy.

 

[Zenmervolt]

Cover letter? How long is it? If it's more than a paragraph it'll go into the circular file. A cover letter just needs to say, "Hey, I want this job, here are two or three points to show why I'm good at it, here's why I like your company." That's it.

ZV

 

[Rudee]

That's something that should not even be in your resume/cover letter to begin with. That kind of thing is worth mentioning in a interview, when the topic comes about, but definitely do not put that kind of stuff in your resume. It's not needed.

Your cover letter is a way of indicating to a perspective employer why you feel you are qualified to work for them. They don't need to hear about your former company's downfalls.

 

[moshquerade]

As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.


As my resume shows I have remained at my job for over four years, and this through my company ownership changing three times in the past two years.

 

[richardycc]

Originally posted by: Rudee
That's something that should not even be in your resume/cover letter to begin with. That kind of thing is worth mentioning in a interview, when the topic comes about, but definitely do not put that kind of stuff in your resume. It's not needed.

Your cover letter is a way of indicating to a perspective employer why you feel you are qualified to work for them. They don't need to hear about your former company's downfalls.

true, I just thought it might show that I am loyal thur thick and thin (but only for so long). This is for the coverletter, it will be short and sweet. I am still brainstorming, so I might leave this out.

 

Originally posted by: richardycc
I am back in the job market because of the corp BS, so I am writing a cover letter, so how do I make the follow sentence look better, grammarically correct, etc? I think I need to break up the sentence some how, or maybe rearrange it abit?

As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.




P.S: I need to give the sense that I am already hitting the glass ceiling with no room for promotion, and I am sick of all these changing of different owners.

thanks!

Without much changes to the original sentence: "As you can see from my resume, I have been working at the same job for over four years--even though the company has changed ownership three times for the past two years."

However, I would personally restructure the whole sentence, so that it reads:

As indicated in my resume, I have worked for the same company (I would instead probably use the real name of the company) for over four years--in spite of the Company changing ownership thrice in the past two years.

 

[moshquerade]

Originally posted by: DearQT

Originally posted by: richardycc
I am back in the job market because of the corp BS, so I am writing a cover letter, so how do I make the follow sentence look better, grammarically correct, etc? I think I need to break up the sentence some how, or maybe rearrange it abit?

As you can see from my resume that I have been working at the same job for over four years even though my company has changed ownership three times for the past two years.




P.S: I need to give the sense that I am already hitting the glass ceiling with no room for promotion, and I am sick of all these changing of different owners.

thanks!

Without much changes to the original sentence: "As you can see from my resume, I have been working at the same job for over four years--even though the company has changed ownership three times for the past two years."

However, I would personally restructure the whole sentence, so that it reads:

As indicated in my resume, I have worked for the same company (I would instead probably use the real name of the company) for over four years--in spite of the Company changing ownership thrice in the past two years.

the "thrice" sounds too snobby

 

[Rudee]

Originally posted by: richardycc

Originally posted by: Rudee
That's something that should not even be in your resume/cover letter to begin with. That kind of thing is worth mentioning in a interview, when the topic comes about, but definitely do not put that kind of stuff in your resume. It's not needed.

Your cover letter is a way of indicating to a perspective employer why you feel you are qualified to work for them. They don't need to hear about your former company's downfalls.

true, I just thought it might show that I am loyal thur thick and thin (but only for so long). This is for the coverletter, it will be short and sweet. I am still brainstorming, so I might leave this out.

Definitely leave this out. Trust me on this. Save that kind of discussion for the interview, where it belongs. Being the last rat to leave a sinking ship is nothing to want on the cover letter. Focus on real accomplishments.

 

[SchrodingersDog]

I'm loyal.

 

[myusername]

DING!

 

[richardycc]

Originally posted by: myusername
DING!

DONG?

 

[myusername]

schrodingersdog != pavlov's dog

 

[richardycc]

Originally posted by: myusername
schrodingersdog != pavlov's dog

haha I didnt even see that... ~~~