Grammar Nazis: Need Help!

[nakedfrog]

Originally posted by: LoKe

Originally posted by: Viper GTS
I hope this is intended as humor, as most of these suggestions are simply atrocious.

If you must stuck with the same basic structure use once yielded.

Viper GTS

Uh ohs.

/me beats Viper GTS with a rubber truncheon

 

[ElFenix]

english isn't latin. trying to force latin construction on it is unamerican (unenglish, really).


but, your sentences should always be clear, simple, and concise.


the the serial comma is optional.


i hate the way that english teachers teach complex and compound sentence structures. while those structures are more advanced, they are not more powerful than simple sentences. shakespeare at his best used simple sentences and small, anglo words.

 

[nakedfrog]

Originally posted by: royaldank
Fields, formerly used to yield crops for his pigs, now contain some 10,050 photovoltaic panels and large, unexplained circular formations.

:shocked:

 

[ActuaryTm]

Originally posted by: randay
sig hail?

It's "sieg heil".

 

[randay]

Originally posted by: ActuaryTm

Originally posted by: randay
sig hail?

It's "sieg heil".

You're sarcamosmometer am borken.

edit: speeling

 

[Metron]

Originally posted by: GTaudiophile
Fields that once yielded crops for his pigs now contain some 10,050 photovoltaic panels.

Please correct me if the above is wrong.

Word Economy, for the win!

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: GTaudiophile
Fields that use to yield crop for his pigs now contain some 10,050 photovoltaic panels.

Please correct me if the above is wrong.

That is all wrong.

The farmer no longer grows crops for his pigs. Now he uses the fields for photovoltaic panels.

 

[imported_Rat]

Originally posted by: royaldank
Fields, formerly used to yield crops for his pigs, now contain some 10,050 photovoltaic panels.

The subject is "fields formerly used..." not just any old fields.

 

[imported_Rat]

Is it crop? You can't have some crop, or a bowlful of crop, or any amount of crop?

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: Rat
Is it crop? You can't have some crop, or a bowlful of crop, or any amount of crop?

I would prefer the sentence if it included grain, wheat, or whatever the pigs eat. The generic word, 'crop', just doesn't give enough imagery.

 

[randay]

That dude used to grow crops, now he makes electricity, fvcken awesome!

 

[ActuaryTm]

Originally posted by: randay
You're sarcamosmometer am borken.

edit: speeling

No more so than your sense of humor.

Less actually, it appears.

 

[Perknose]

Originally posted by: Metron

Originally posted by: GTaudiophile
Fields that once yielded crops for his pigs now contain some 10,050 photovoltaic panels.

Please correct me if the above is wrong.

Word Economy, for the win!

Elegant. Gets my vote.

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: Metron
Word Economy, for the win!

If you want word economy, we should drop one more word. Do the fields contain some panels? Or, do the fields contain 10,050 panels? We don't need both a rough approximation and an exact count. Get rid of the word 'some'.

 

[Perknose]

Originally posted by: randay
That dude used to grow crops, now he makes electricity, fvcken awesome!

You have read too much into the info we have been given.

Nowhere does it say that these photovoltaic cells were ever hooked up to anything. Perhaps they are just lying in that field, being slowly subsumed into that great, gray field of pig ****** while somewhere a piglet cries for his dinner.

 

[nakedfrog]

And WTF? No one cars what the hell the pigs are eating now that the farmer's no longer growing crops?

 

[imported_Rat]

Originally posted by: dullard

Originally posted by: Rat
Is it crop? You can't have some crop, or a bowlful of crop, or any amount of crop?

I would prefer the sentence (over what) if it included grain, wheat, or whatever the pigs eat. The generic word, "crop," just doesn't give enough imagery.

If it's a combination of the aforementioned crop, then such specifics would not be useable.

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: Rat

Originally posted by: dullard

Originally posted by: Rat
Is it crop? You can't have some crop, or a bowlful of crop, or any amount of crop?

I would prefer the sentence (over what) if it included grain, wheat, or whatever the pigs eat. The generic word, "crop," just doesn't give enough imagery.

If it's a combination of the aforementioned crops, then such specifics would not be useable.

The "over what" section is implied and thus that section is not required.

Person X, "Would you prefer the apple or the orange."
Person Y, "I would prefer the orange."

Person Y does not need to say that the orange is perferred over the apple.

If there was a combination of crops, then you are correct that it may be difficult to state all of the crops.

 

[Perknose]

Originally posted by: dullard

Originally posted by: Metron
Word Economy, for the win!

If you want word economy, we should drop one more word. Do the fields contain some panels? Or, do the fields contain 10,050 panels? We don't need both a rough approximation and an exact count. Get rid of the word 'some'.

"Some" is being used here colloquially to reinforce the idea of "vast quantity", as in:

"Little Billy made the arduous trek accross the Kumquat Penninsula, some 2,000 furlongs in all, clad only in a beaver pelt hat, a previously soiled Depends, and shoes fashioned from old copies of The National Geographic, held together with twine."

 

[randay]

Originally posted by: GTaudiophile
Fields that use to yield crop for his pigs now contain some 10,050 photovoltaic panels.

Please correct me if the above is wrong.

Ok, the correct sentence is as follows:

"I'm tired of these motherfvckin' photovoltaic panels, in this motherfvckin' field!

 

[ActuaryTm]

Originally posted by: nakedfrog
And WTF? No one cars what the hell the pigs are eating now that the farmer's no longer growing crops?

The pigs were exchanged on the open market for one goat, two bottles of ketchup, and a severely sodomized cat to be named later.

 

[imported_Rat]

Originally posted by: dullard

Originally posted by: Rat

Originally posted by: dullard

Originally posted by: Rat
Is it crop? You can't have some crop, or a bowlful of crop, or any amount of crop?

I would prefer the sentence (over what) if it included grain, wheat, or whatever the pigs eat. The generic word, "crop," just doesn't give enough imagery.

If it's a combination of the aforementioned crops, then such specifics would not be useable.

The "over what" section is implied and thus that section is not required.

Person X, "Would you perfer the apple or the orange."
Person Y, "I would perfer the orange."

Person Y does not need to say that the orange is perferred over the apple.

If there was a combination of crops, then you are correct that it may be difficult to state all of the crops.

Alrighty, so try spelling "prefer" correctly.

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: Perknose
"Some" is being used here colloquially to reinforce the idea of "vast quantity", as in:

"Little Billy made the arduous trek accross the Kumquat Penninsula, some 2,000 furlongs in all, clad only in a beaver pelt hat, a previously soiled Depends, and shoes fashioned from old copies of The National Geographic, held together with twine."

That colloquially only works if the number is an estimate. In your example, the penninsula does not have exactly 2,000 furlongs. You should not say, "Little Billy made the arduous trek accross the Kumquat Penninsula, some 2,162.35 furlongs in all."

 

[Perknose]

Originally posted by: ActuaryTm

Originally posted by: nakedfrog
And WTF? No one cars what the hell the pigs are eating now that the farmer's no longer growing crops?

The pigs were exchanged on the open market for one goat, two bottles of ketchup, and a severely sodomized cat to be named later.

Though the photovoltaic cells, sadly, never took root and propagated, as the naieve (some say insane) farmer had hoped.

 

[nakedfrog]

Originally posted by: ActuaryTm

Originally posted by: nakedfrog
And WTF? No one cars what the hell the pigs are eating now that the farmer's no longer growing crops?

The pigs were exchanged on the open market for one goat, two bottles of ketchup, and a severely sodomized cat to be named later.

Just as long as they're being taken care of.