Grammar and professionalism

[silhrt]

Most of the time I don't care about a few grammar problems in articles but one recent one had me rereading it several times trying to figure out what they were trying to say.

The article "ASUS Striker II Formula under the Microscope" has some major problems in it and I didn't want to post this on the main page. I just wanted to let the writer know so that they could do better in the future.

First off, in the first paragraph:

Over the next week, we're going to pit EVGA's reference design 780i motherboard against the custom design ASUS ROG board known as the Striker II Formula to see. Which is the better overall solution, or do they each perform well in certain usage scenarios? That's what we'll find out.

Does this even make sense??? Try....

Over the next week, we're going to pit EVGA's reference design 780i motherboard against the custom design ASUS ROG board known as the Striker II Formula to see which is the better overall solution. We will find out if they each perform well in certain usage scenarios or not.

Next up, if you are using a "but" in a sentence, you don't always need a comma before it.

These tests will be repeated on the EVGA 780i board over the coming week, with a full report and cross comparison of both boards. We had hoped to have the EVGA results today, but our board failed before we could complete our torturous overclocking routines.

It appears we had a weak SPP as the board gradually failed to overclock our quad-core processor, and at the bitter end it refused to even run at stock speeds. We sent the board off for a quick burial, but not before a 21 water gun salute.

PCMark vantage proved to be the most stressful test for our systems to pass; we had instances where the full two hour test of OCCT 2.01 passed, but PCMark Vantage would fail the gaming test repeatedly within a few seconds of launch.

etc.... ( You are using commas everywhere. It may be better to forget a comma than to overcompensate for them if you're not sure. )

Tell me this makes sense??

with very aggressively prices, to

Do you mean "with very aggressive prices" ?

I am NOT about to point out all of them, though there are many. Nor am I any kind of expert. I read the first paragraph and after seeing the poor grammar there, started noticing more and more as I went on.

Please try to do better in future articles. If you're not sure, ask a coworker or rewrite it.

I don't really care about a few misstypes but.. come on!!

 

[Cdubneeddeal]

I'm sorry, but are you for real? I'm not going to create this huge rebuttal about your rant, but I will point out one flaw in it. The comma before "But" is correct, IIRC from college. A comma creates a pause point. Say it out. However, you are correct about "Aggressive". Why not email the editor rather than posting in personal forum issues?

 

[allisolm]

1. PFI is for issues you have with a member or for items that require moderator attention.
2. If you want to discuss his grammar try sending a message to Rajinder.Gill@anandtech.com, the author of the article.

 

[Steve]

This is not a Forum Issue.