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As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

would it be better if it said...

As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and I welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

do i need the extra "I" before "welcome"?
 
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brxndxn

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It's fine with or without the "I"...



Is "This statement is false." a proposition? I say yes, my discrete prof says no.
 
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Azraele

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Sounds kind of awkward to me but I'm not sure of the best way to fix it.

 
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LeeTJ

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the second I gives more emphasis to "I". that may or may not be a good thing.
 
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bleeb

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Originally posted by: brxndxn
It's fine with or without the "I"...



Is "This statement is false." a proposition? I say yes, my discrete prof says no.
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spanky

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Originally posted by: Tripleshot
reasonabilities or "responsibilites" is what I have trouble with in that sentence.
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i was wondering wtf was up with my spellcheck... hehe... thanx for pointing out the typo :)
 
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Kadarin

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Originally posted by: spankyOO7
As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

would it be better if it said...

As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and I welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

do i need the extra "I" before "welcome"?
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If we change the sentence to:

As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and (I) welcome the responsibilities it assumes. (with the "I" being optional)

What is the "it" you're talking about? Life? Either way, the sentence is awkward. "Ecstatic" is too strong a word given the tone of the sentence, and "as I proceed in life" almost sounds like corporate doublespeak.

As I get older, I look forward to accepting new challenges and responsibilities. Good writing isn't always about being as "flowery" as possible; simplicity can be a virtue.
 
spanky

spanky

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ah who gives a sh!t... it's not for me anyway... someone i know is applying for a job and has to write this crap... blah blah blah.... :p

thanx for the input guys :)
 
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ThisIsMatt

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Originally posted by: brxndxn
Is "This statement is false." a proposition? I say yes, my discrete prof says no.
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It's not, because a proposition is something that can be evaluated as either true or false. That is just a statement, not a proposition.

 
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QTPie

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you don't need "I" at the first either. Try to use as little I and WE as possible.

As getting older, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges and welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.
 
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everman

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I assume this is part of some kind of cover letter? Saying you are "ecstatic" just doesn't sound right to me, I would probably use something a bit less animated. That is unless you really are ecstatic about new challenges etc...
Also you say it assumes, what does it refer to exactly? life or challenges?
 
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Krugger

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Originally posted by: Astaroth33
Originally posted by: spankyOO7
As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

would it be better if it said...

As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and I welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

do i need the extra "I" before "welcome"?
Click to expand...

If we change the sentence to:

As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and (I) welcome the responsibilities it assumes. (with the "I" being optional)

What is the "it" you're talking about? Life? Either way, the sentence is awkward. "Ecstatic" is too strong a word given the tone of the sentence, and "as I proceed in life" almost sounds like corporate doublespeak.

As I get older, I look forward to accepting new challenges and responsibilities. Good writing isn't always about being as "flowery" as possible; simplicity can be a virtue.
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If the 'it' refers to the new challenges, 'it' should by 'they' since challenges is plural and then 'assumes' would be 'assume'. Also, assume doesn't fit there, the new challenges don't 'assume' responsibilities, you do. Also 'ecstatic in' doesn't work. The sentence from astaroth works better in general.
 
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dolph

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"As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic about accepting new challenges and I welcome the responsibilities they include."
 
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MrDudeMan

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Originally posted by: Krugger
Originally posted by: Astaroth33
Originally posted by: spankyOO7
As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

would it be better if it said...

As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and I welcome the reasonabilities it assumes.

do i need the extra "I" before "welcome"?
Click to expand...

If we change the sentence to:

As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic in accepting new challenges, and (I) welcome the responsibilities it assumes. (with the "I" being optional)

What is the "it" you're talking about? Life? Either way, the sentence is awkward. "Ecstatic" is too strong a word given the tone of the sentence, and "as I proceed in life" almost sounds like corporate doublespeak.

As I get older, I look forward to accepting new challenges and responsibilities. Good writing isn't always about being as "flowery" as possible; simplicity can be a virtue.
Click to expand...

If the 'it' refers to the new challenges, 'it' should by 'they' since challenges is plural and then 'assumes' would be 'assume'. Also, assume doesn't fit there, the new challenges don't 'assume' responsibilities, you do. Also 'ecstatic in' doesn't work. The sentence from astaroth works better in general.
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we have a winner
 
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deftron

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Originally posted by: dolph
"As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic about accepting new challenges and I welcome the responsibilities they include."
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drop the third I and it's perfect


 
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dolph

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Originally posted by: Steve819
Originally posted by: deftron
Originally posted by: dolph
"As I proceed in life, I am ecstatic about accepting new challenges and I welcome the responsibilities they include."
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drop the third I and it's perfect
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Second.
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yeah, i could have gone either way on that. i'm not sure if mine was grammatically correct, but i have a feeling both versions are so it's probably just a choice of style.
 
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