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dullard

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1) I feel that the word "successfully" is redundant and duplicative and extra and unnecessary and redundant.
2) Sentences have been written in passive voice needlessly to remove the words "I" or "we".

In other words, I like this better, "I set up your account."
 

Dear Summer

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Originally posted by: dullard
1) I feel that the word "successfully" is redundant and duplicative and extra and unnecessary and redundant.
2) Sentences have been written in passive voice needlessly to remove the words "I" or "we".

In other words, I like this better, "I set up your account."

but my original sentence still makes grammatical sense right?
 

sdifox

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Originally posted by: dullard
1) I feel that the word "successfully" is redundant and duplicative and extra and unnecessary and redundant.
2) Sentences have been written in passive voice needlessly to remove the words "I" or "we".

In other words, I like this better, "I set up your account."

I never understood the aversion of passive voice. When it comes to computer processes, I think it is the right voice. I don't want a fucking HAL9000.
 

AstroManLuca

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Originally posted by: sdifox
Originally posted by: dullard
1) I feel that the word "successfully" is redundant and duplicative and extra and unnecessary and redundant.
2) Sentences have been written in passive voice needlessly to remove the words "I" or "we".

In other words, I like this better, "I set up your account."

I never understood the aversion of passive voice. When it comes to computer processes, I think it is the right voice. I don't want a fucking HAL9000.

Agreed. The time to avoid passive voice is if you're writing a paper or anything else where there's an author listed. However, if you do want to avoid it, one good option is to use the plural.

"We have successfully set up your account" sounds much better than "I have successfully set up your account." Using the plural performs a similar function to the passive voice in that it doesn't attribute anything to any one person, but it's more personable.
 

Mr Pickles

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Originally posted by: AstroManLuca
Originally posted by: sdifox
Originally posted by: dullard
1) I feel that the word "successfully" is redundant and duplicative and extra and unnecessary and redundant.
2) Sentences have been written in passive voice needlessly to remove the words "I" or "we".

In other words, I like this better, "I set up your account."

I never understood the aversion of passive voice. When it comes to computer processes, I think it is the right voice. I don't want a fucking HAL9000.

Agreed. The time to avoid passive voice is if you're writing a paper or anything else where there's an author listed. However, if you do want to avoid it, one good option is to use the plural.

"We have successfully set up your account" sounds much better than "I have successfully set up your account." Using the plural performs a similar function to the passive voice in that it doesn't attribute anything to any one person, but it's more personable.

I'd understand this if you were sending an email or personally notifying someone. But these notifications normally come from an email address. There's nothing more informal than getting a notifcation email from "noreply".
 
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