critique my resume

[Schadenfroh]

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btw, im trying to get a job at my schools IT department

 

[SociallyChallenged]

You only type 50 WPM? What the...? I think you should be banned, all ATOTers should type at least 60 WPM. 😛

On a serious note, looks pretty good.

-Brent

EDIT: AND A 4.2 GPA? :Q You own.

 

[Nocturnal]

"To obtain an afternoon employment..." Shouldn't it be "To obtain an afternoon employment position"? Or something along the lines of adding something after employment? Strike me in the buttocks of I am wrong. Sorry.

 

[Passions]

it stinks.

 

[Rudee]

The objective is poorly written. Re-write.
Use bullets for your skills & extra curricular activities
Your work experience is to vague. Expand on this.
Instead of saying "passed bla bla bla A+ hardware exam" say: "A+ Hardware Certified"
Don't include references in your Resume. Say "References available upon request"

 

[John]

Originally posted by: Rudee
The objective is poorly written. Re-write.
Use bullets for your skills & extra curricular activities
Your work experience is to vague. Expand on this.
Instead of saying "passed bla bla bla A+ hardware exam" say: "A+ Hardware Certified"
Don't include references in your Resume. Say "References available upon request"

 

[Christoph]

- condense it to one page--with this level of experience you shouldn't need two pages. Shrink your margins a bit if necessary.
- make your name bigger (but not too big). Even redacted it appears to be the same size as your other text, you want it to stand out a little.

- I don't really like objectives, but many people do. In any case, you could rework it a little to emphasize the skills you already have and will use to your employer's benefit, rather than emphasizing the skills you're looking ot acquire.

- without giving away too many details, what is listed under education?

- take "overclocking" out of skills--as an employer I would be worried you will overclock my equipment
- you may want to reword "Troubleshooting PC Users".
- try and shrink the skills section vertically--you could use two columns, or categorize them in a table somehow
- if you know HTML, you probably have other related skills: Javascript? XML? etc.
- have you done any SQL/database work? Even if it was just Access.
- have you configured/maintained networks?

- bulk up the work experience--was this summer jobs, stuff you did during school, what? Give concrete examples of what you did for clients if possible.
- you may want to consider combining your paid and volunteer work experience

- if the GPA is the only thing under achievements, take out that section and move the GPA up to "Education". (I've been out of school for some time, how does one have a 4.2 GPA?)

- move the cert up, maybe between education and skills?

- take the hobbies out completely

- unless it is customary for on-campus jobs, or you've been advised to include it by someone that knows the local market, I would take the references off the resume and replace them with "References available on request". Then have your reference information available and ready to go on a separate sheet. For each reference, make sure you've asked them if you may use them as a reference, and if possible, provide them a copy of your resume.

 

[txxxx]

Remove "overclocking", looks unprofessional. What good is this to a workplace?????
Dont say "basic" or "spyware removal", again , a bit unprofessional.

Hobbies list is far too short, no mention of team sports in a real world? I.e. Basketball?
Music's a hobby? What do you play? Band?
What about good causes and such?

"Knowledge of PCs with emphasis on CPUs, video cards, and motherboards" - too much detail. That's a small field you cover. In a school, that sort of detailed knowledge will go amiss, as most case scenario's will use an integrated graphics system etc.

If I was to read that, you'd appear to be too much of a geek TBH, who may lack social skills.

Re-write all of it!