critique my beginning resume please

[Semidevil]

I made a resume, but It just doesnt stand out.

First because, I have no work experience in what I want.
2nd, the experience I have is irrelevant to what I want, and that is the only job I have had in my life.

I dont know how to make it better. I'll let you guys critique it.

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Objective
To obtain hands-on learning experience for future job opportunities in the field of risk management, statistics, probability, and data analysis

Education
2001 - Present University of XXX

Bachelor of Arts / Mathematics

Expected date of graduation: May 2005

Interests and activities
University of XXX blah Student Association

1/2003 ? 12/2003 ? Vice President

University of XXX blah Student Association

12/2001 ? 1/2003 ? President

University of XXX International Advisory Committee

12/01 ? 1/2003 ? Member

Languages
Chinese, English

Work experience
2001 - Present EyeMasters XXX, Kansas City

EyeWear Specialist

Sales Associate assisting all people in picking eyeglasses, and helping with the steps of filling a prescription

Skills
Windows 98/2000/Xp ? Intermediate Skill

English Language ? Fluent

Chinese Cantonese language ? Fluent

Words Per minute -- 60wpm

Microsoft Works -- Intermediate skill

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This is all I have and it takes up right at 1 page. What should I do? Can I go off to the 2nd page and put in my relevant classes I"m taking or have taken? Is that better?

You guys have any suggestions?

thanx

btw, is there a resume program that I can use to make it better

please excuse the format...copy and paste chopped it up a bit.

 

[absolu7]

no one needs to know how fast you type.

 

[PingSpike]

Needs more cowbell.

 

[Semidevil]

well see......I"m new at this, and I dotn know what to put down........so any tips?

 

[ActuaryTm]

Your academic adviser/major adviser should be able to help a bit in this regard.

 

[dullard]

Unless you are looking for a secretary job, words per minute and Microsoft Works experience is a waste of space (Windows experience is probably a waste too). If you get through college you should have computer experience...

Your objective is bad. Let me summarize it: I want you to hire me and spend lots of money training me so that I can get experience and move on to another company/another position. Who is going to hire someone who says the job is temporary and who says the job they apply for isn't what they really want to do?

Do you have any awards? Good grades? Anything to brag yourself up? Even if it is an honor roll, it would be something.

If you have tons of empty space, then put what you specifically did for your activities. What did you do as vice president and president of those activities? What good things did you accomplish with your positions?

I see no interests listed - and interests generally shouldn't be listed. Just put 'activities' as your heading.

Finally, spending that many years working with porn probably isn't good on a resume. XXX. Get it? Ok bad joke.

 

[UnatcoAgent]

Originally posted by: PingSpike
Needs more cowbell.

hahah:beer:

 

[azazyel]

You don't need it to be only one page. I know most people say that but it is BS. Also, just listing things you have done isn't a good idea List the major ones then list the skills that were involved with said positions. Such as, as President you ...(fill in the blanks). Also, toss the objective it's rather lame.

 

[xchangx]

Let's see...

To obtain hands-on learning experience for future job opportunities

First of all, your objective seems to say that you're looking for a tempoary position.

Second, reword your current job a bit. "... analyzing customer data and assisting selection of product and fulfillment of prescription." Something like that.

Usually your work experience goes before qualifications and right after education.

 

[electricJ]

Contact career services at your university. They should be able to provide you some good advice on your content and format (which is VERY important). Don't be hesitant to make an appointment with them; you are paying for them to be there.

By the way, by looking at it, I would have a few recommendations on content. I do not see how important it is for you to list your proficient languages unless you are planning on working with customers in foreign markets. Also, I would recommend dropping the skills section and replacing with a "Computer skills" listing every software package you are proficient in. Do you have any major school projects/research you've worked on yet?

I realize that it is very difficult to write a resume when you don't have any experience in the field you are looking for, but you have to start somewhere. Career services should be able to provide you with ideas on possible content. Also, make sure it is only 1 page since you are entry-level. Padding a resume to the extreme can leave a negative impression with employers.