College Essay

[Juice Box]

Ok, im starting to write my professional statement to get into U of I school of business, and wanted to know how you think I should go about starting it. I have work experience in a small, local frame shop, as well as at a large scale trading firm as an intern downtown. I wanted to work that into the essay, but cannot think of how to start it, any ideas of what I can do?

 

[Wallydraigle]

Originally posted by: digitalsnare
Ok, im starting to write my professional statement to get into U of I school of business, and wanted to know how you think I should go about starting it. I have work experience in a small, local frame shop, as well as at a large scale trading firm as an intern downtown. I wanted to work that into the essay, but cannot think of how to start it, any ideas of what I can do?

"I was born a poor black boy in Louisiana..."

 

[Hubris]

Start with a "ever since" type of opening, and make it on a grand scale - don't just talk about what you hope to accomplish at the school, but what you plan on doing in life and on a larger scale in the world. But make sure it's personal as well, and don't fill it with annoying cliches they've heard a million times over.

Just remember that they read a LOT of these things, so you need to make yours sufficiently different that it piques their interest.

 

[Juice Box]

Originally posted by: Hubris
Start with a "ever since" type of opening, and make it on a grand scale - don't just talk about what you hope to accomplish at the school, but what you plan on doing in life and on a larger scale in the world. But make sure it's personal as well, and don't fill it with annoying cliches they've heard a million times over.

Just remember that they read a LOT of these things, so you need to make yours sufficiently different that it piques their interest.

right, I was thinking about starting with something like ever since I was a child, seeing my parents go to work, etc or something. The personal stuff, however, Ill put into my Personal statement, something I have to do after this one

 

[gotsmack]

apply to Rutgers, it just might be the only state school that doesn't require an essay.

 

[theNEOone]

Originally posted by: digitalsnare

Originally posted by: Hubris
Start with a "ever since" type of opening, and make it on a grand scale - don't just talk about what you hope to accomplish at the school, but what you plan on doing in life and on a larger scale in the world. But make sure it's personal as well, and don't fill it with annoying cliches they've heard a million times over.

Just remember that they read a LOT of these things, so you need to make yours sufficiently different that it piques their interest.

right, I was thinking about starting with something like ever since I was a child, seeing my parents go to work, etc or something. The personal stuff, however, Ill put into my Personal statement, something I have to do after this one

"ever since" beginnings are cheasy and unprofessional. you're going into business, not story-telling.


=|

 

[chiwawa626]

Originally posted by: Wallydraigle

Originally posted by: digitalsnare
Ok, im starting to write my professional statement to get into U of I school of business, and wanted to know how you think I should go about starting it. I have work experience in a small, local frame shop, as well as at a large scale trading firm as an intern downtown. I wanted to work that into the essay, but cannot think of how to start it, any ideas of what I can do?

"I was born a poor black boy in Louisiana..."

LOL i love that movie (The Jerk)...

 

[Ender]

Originally posted by: Wallydraigle

Originally posted by: digitalsnare
Ok, im starting to write my professional statement to get into U of I school of business, and wanted to know how you think I should go about starting it. I have work experience in a small, local frame shop, as well as at a large scale trading firm as an intern downtown. I wanted to work that into the essay, but cannot think of how to start it, any ideas of what I can do?

"I was born a poor black boy in Louisiana..."

Lol... easy admission.

 

[George P Burdell]

apply to my college... they're so broke they'll take anyone

 

[Yolner]

Just say your great great great great grandfather was half black and your in. Gotta love affirmative action.