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Here's my v.0.1 thesis statement 
"After the Civil War, hundreds of thousands of settlers poured into the west in pursuit of new lives and new opportunities. The very image of the American West was defined by a new technology, photography, and it was photography that united the budding Western frontiers with the rest of the United States through vision and in soul. "
Anything that I should change? I feel it may be a bit vague. I want to show that the West was defined by photography because after photography had been invented, people could finally see what the West was like. This ability to see this new land piqued peoples' interest in the land, people, and opportunities of the west, and greatly helped unite the infant US.... ok am I just BSing here?
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From my instructions sheet:
Recommend anything. My worst subject has always been history, and unfortunately, I don't think I know enough about the details of American History to find a thesis to "prove."
TIA!
"After the Civil War, hundreds of thousands of settlers poured into the west in pursuit of new lives and new opportunities. The very image of the American West was defined by a new technology, photography, and it was photography that united the budding Western frontiers with the rest of the United States through vision and in soul. "
Anything that I should change? I feel it may be a bit vague. I want to show that the West was defined by photography because after photography had been invented, people could finally see what the West was like. This ability to see this new land piqued peoples' interest in the land, people, and opportunities of the west, and greatly helped unite the infant US.... ok am I just BSing here?
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From my instructions sheet:
You get to choose the topic for your paper; it can be anything connected to American history since the end of the Civil War. But the topic must be appropriate to a 5 or 6 page length; I have never seen an excessively narrow topic. You cannot write a paper on "the Depression"; try women in southern Ohio during the Depression instead. Be creative?this is your paper, so choose a topic that is interesting and meaningful to you. Internet sources will not count for this paper; try the library instead.
Be creative, interesting and fun with your topics! Writing on something odd is encouraged. I will not accept papers on Jackie Robinson or the JFK assassination. Write about something you don?t know about!
Example of a weak thesis statement: ?This paper is about the status of blacks after the Civil War.? This thesis statement is weak because it does not make an argument or answer a question. Example of a strong thesis statement: ?After the Civil War, many of the freed black slaves believed that their children would have substantially better lives and greater opportunities than they had had as slaves. However, their hopes for their children were not fulfilled; in the 1880s, the lives of most blacks were not much better than those of their parents.? The thesis statement ?in the 1880s the lives of most blacks were not much better than those of their parents? makes an argument (readers can agree or disagree with it). A good thesis statement can be rephrased as a question. In this case, the question is ?Were the children of ex-slaves much better off than their parents?? Or ?How much difference did the Thirteenth Amendment make in the lives of most African Americans???
Recommend anything. My worst subject has always been history, and unfortunately, I don't think I know enough about the details of American History to find a thesis to "prove."
TIA!