A haiku

[episodic]

Rush Hour traffic
the slow grind
of clenched fists

 

[elektrolokomotive]

That's not a haiku.

 

[naruto1988]

hour is 1 syllable...i think?

edit: a haiku is 5-7-5 IIRC

 

[episodic]

Darn it I tried. . .

 

[elektrolokomotive]

Originally posted by: naruto1988
hour is 1 syllable...i think?

edit: a haiku is 5-7-5 IIRC

You are correct.

 

[isasir]

Haiku this is not
episodic cannot count
I like Jackie Chan

 

[Atomicus]

Originally posted by: episodic
Rush Hour traffic --
the slow grind
of clenched fists

poor syllabic structure for a haiku. Here is a better example:

Traffic is a stall
I unholster my AK
people flee their cars

 

[squirrel dog]

and then
Johnny farted .

 

[Babbles]

A haiku should also suggest a seasonal element.

 

[aplefka]

We were told to bring in our favorite poem or song's lyrics when we came back to class in January. I asked if I could bring a haiku and she said no. Maybe I could borrow Atomicus'