A crisis of meaning

[JacobJ]

Damn...it sucks to feel this disconnected from the world. Anyways, heres some writing I did. Thought I would share it with you. Maybe it'll be good for everyone to get depressed about something other than the hurricane. Bah.


<a target=_blank class=ftalternatingbarlinklarge href="http://A Crisis of Meaning

I sit in a coffee shop
fill my drink with cream
stare blankly at the street
cars rushing everyone down dirty clouds
cellphones dangled from ears
lips squirming
teeth glinting straight
at me and I don?t see
the swath of hands pass my small table

I feel everything before it arrives
inhale smoldered coffee
taste regret like it?s a broken lung
fill my cup and empty it
scald my tongue until it?s loose
stack sugar packets
around the empty creamer">Text</a>

 

[JacobJ]

fsckfsckfsckfsck

 

[meltdown75]

i read your poem earlier. i just didn't know what to say.

this is rare, trust me

 

[PingSpike]

Originally posted by: JacobJ
fsckfsckfsckfsck

It needs to be fleshed out a bit more, but I think I can see the concept you're trying to convey. It does make a strong statement about our culture and the powerlessness of the individual. I give it a B-.

 

[HonkeyDonk]

how come i can't click on the link? It's a hypertext link but it does nothing when i click on it.