YAResumeT: Critique my resume/cover letter, please?

[Ns1]

13500 posts, I get one of these too right?



It's time to move on from my current employer, so as protocol states, I must give ATOT my resume/cover letter for consideration

Let me know what you guys think. No objective. Resume/CL are slightly tailored depending on what position I'm going for. Instead of a relevant skills/qualifications section, I try to put it into my experience


will bump in the morning.

Cover Letter
Resume


*update*
Resume Rev2

 

[Mo0o]

For your valet job, seems like bullet #2 is the most impressive bit, might wanna put that on top

 

[JJChicken]

I'll flick through them in detail once I finish studying, but got one point that may be useful:

Instead of "I would like the opportunity to discuss my qualifications for this position in person. I can easily be
reached by phone or email."

How about "I will be able to provide further details and examples of
meeting the selection criteria at an interview."

That's what I have. Hopefully it helps, ill check out the rest of ur stuff when i get a chance.

 

[Ns1]

morning bump

 

[Capt Caveman]

I would use an objective, not everyone will read or see your cover letter.

 

[E equals MC2]

CL
It's formal, proper and generic. I would spice it up a little bit, showing enthuasiasm.

My personal CL template closing paragraph:

I am very excited to know more about this position. So far it seems my hands-on work experience will make me a perfect fit for this opportunity, and I will bring my fully devoted effort and great work ethic to your company. Please look over the attached resume which provides full detail. I can be contacted at xxx-xxx-xxxx if you have further questions.

Feel free to take what you will.

Resume
Love the layout. It's visually organized and bullets are nice. I would personally come up with a better title than 'Additional Information'. Something fancier that would sell....

 

[Ns1]

thx for the feedback. It was really late last night when I worked on the cover letter, and I never was one for cover letters....

 

[Heller]

Get back on the corner bitch, its not break time yet.


*Saves Resume for future personal use.

 

[invidia]

Avoid using "I" too many times in the CL.

From experience, Ive known a good number of companies and employers that won't accept PDF format for some stupid reason. You probably have to make a second version of your CL and resume in .doc or text format with minimal margins/styles as you can. Style and layout is great from your point of view (because it's in PDF and modified accordingly to your Word processor), but it can vary from the employer's point of view. I know from experience that my resume shows up all mess up in other word processors besides MS Word.

 

[Ns1]

Originally posted by: invidia
Avoid using "I" too many times in the CL.

From experience, Ive known a good number of companies and employers that won't accept PDF format for some stupid reason. You probably have to make a second version of your CL and resume in .doc or text format with minimal margins/styles as you can. Style and layout is great from your point of view (because it's in PDF and modified accordingly to your Word processor), but it can vary from the employer's point of view. I know from experience that my resume shows up all mess up in other word processors besides MS Word.

I got it in word format, and upload/send it in whatever format the prospective employer wants

*Noted for the CL

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

 

[Ns1]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

 

[E equals MC2]

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

Who the HELL doesn't hop jobs these days? This is 2008. There are plenty of opportunities outside where you can grow. This isn't 1970s where people blindly worked for employers for decades.

It's not even frowned upon any more by employers. It is now the industry norm (provided that when you hop jobs, you moved UP the career ladder, not lateral)

 

[Ns1]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college, with terms of 2.5 years, 2 years, and 1.25 years. I think it's pretty fair.

 

[tfinch2]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

Are you joking? The majority of jobs was from when the guy was in school. His current job is probably his first out of school, he's been there for more than a year, and is looking to move on.

I don't see what the big deal is.

 

[Gibson486]

Originally posted by: E equals MC2

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

Who the HELL doesn't hop jobs these days? This is 2008. There are plenty of opportunities outside where you can grow. This isn't 1970s where people blindly worked for employers for decades.

It's not even frowned upon any more by employers. It is now the industry norm (provided that when you hop jobs, you moved UP the career ladder, not lateral)

Hahaha...the only reason not to job hop is if you have a really high position in a company. Even then, people still job hop. Company loyalty is dead.

 

[Gibson486]

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college, with terms of 2.5 years, 2 years, and 1.25 years. I think it's pretty fair.

don't worry, some are not detailed oriented.

 

[E equals MC2]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

Re-read the resume. He's had 3 jobs in 8 years. That's fine.

My resume had 4 jobs in 8 yrs (comcast csr in college, managing a restaurant in college and project coordinator after college + got promoted!)

I am now applying for a full blown project manager position. I just passed the phone interview and did the in-house interview last Thursday...

I hope I can make it!

Ns1, you're fine.

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college?

Alright, I'll spell it out for you in plainer english.

You had a job from 2005-2007. That's one job, and two years.
You had a different job from 2007-2008. That's one job, and one year.
It's still 2008 and you are looking for a different job. That's one job, same year.

Add all that up. Three jobs, three years. Job hopping. Bad. No long term commitment. Contract work. Look into.

(I don't count your first job because it seems to be a different field of work. Also, think of some damn good reasons to tell people why you left your previous jobs)

 

[E equals MC2]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college?

Alright, I'll spell it out for you in plainer english.

You had a job from 2005-2007. That's one job, and two years.
You had a different job from 2007-2008. That's one job, and one year.
It's still 2008 and you are looking for a different job. That's one job, same year.

Add all that up. Three jobs, three years. Job hopping. Bad. No long term commitment. Contract work. Look into.

(I don't count your first job because it seems to be a different field of work. Also, think of some damn good reasons to tell people why you left your previous jobs)

Read my above post. Employers don't care as nearly much as you think. I just finished my second round interview at a leading healthcare firm as a project manager.

 

[Ns1]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college?

Alright, I'll spell it out for you in plainer english.

You had a job from 2005-2007. That's one job, and two years.
You had a different job from 2007-2008. That's one job, and one year.
It's still 2008 and you are looking for a different job. That's one job, same year.

Add all that up. Three jobs, three years. Job hopping. Bad. No long term commitment. Contract work. Look into.

(I don't count your first job because it seems to be a different field of work. Also, think of some damn good reasons to tell people why you left your previous jobs)

Well at least that's a pretty good explanation. That said, I don't see how any reasonable person can expect me to stick around with the second job forever, seeing as how it was just a job for me to get by during college.

My current job I have a killer reason for leaving, so I'm not that concerned.

Anyway, it is what it is.

 

[E equals MC2]

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college?

Alright, I'll spell it out for you in plainer english.

You had a job from 2005-2007. That's one job, and two years.
You had a different job from 2007-2008. That's one job, and one year.
It's still 2008 and you are looking for a different job. That's one job, same year.

Add all that up. Three jobs, three years. Job hopping. Bad. No long term commitment. Contract work. Look into.

(I don't count your first job because it seems to be a different field of work. Also, think of some damn good reasons to tell people why you left your previous jobs)

Well at least that's a pretty good explanation. That said, I don't see how any reasonable person can expect me to stick around with the second job forever, seeing as how it was just a job for me to get by during college.

My current job I have a killer reason for leaving, so I'm not that concerned.

Anyway, it is what it is.

yea. you're good to go lifer.

 

[Gibson486]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college?

Alright, I'll spell it out for you in plainer english.

You had a job from 2005-2007. That's one job, and two years.
You had a different job from 2007-2008. That's one job, and one year.
It's still 2008 and you are looking for a different job. That's one job, same year.

Add all that up. Three jobs, three years. Job hopping. Bad. No long term commitment. Contract work. Look into.

(I don't count your first job because it seems to be a different field of work. Also, think of some damn good reasons to tell people why you left your previous jobs)

right over head, man, right over your head.

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Ns1

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
Ouch, a job hopper. Can't help you with that.

?

You're looking for your third job in three years. That doesn't look good to a prospective employer. Why would I want to hire you, give you benefits, and train you if you are going to leave in a year or two? If you don't want to stay with a company, look into contract work.

uh.

I list 3 jobs.

Pre college, during college, and post college?

Alright, I'll spell it out for you in plainer english.

You had a job from 2005-2007. That's one job, and two years.
You had a different job from 2007-2008. That's one job, and one year.
It's still 2008 and you are looking for a different job. That's one job, same year.

Add all that up. Three jobs, three years. Job hopping. Bad. No long term commitment. Contract work. Look into.

(I don't count your first job because it seems to be a different field of work. Also, think of some damn good reasons to tell people why you left your previous jobs)

Well at least that's a pretty good explanation. That said, I don't see how any reasonable person can expect me to stick around with the second job forever, seeing as how it was just a job for me to get by during college.

My current job I have a killer reason for leaving, so I'm not that concerned.

Anyway, it is what it is.

If you have a good reason, and you make it to the interview, you shouldn't have too much of a problem. Then again, there are companies out there that want employees to stick it out through thick and thin. As you said, it is what it is, but you shouldn't make it a habit.