What do you think?

toph99

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this was written by my friend Anthony today. I'm just curious to see what everyone thinks. Personally i quite like it, even though i don't agree with some of it. and he is 14 years old, i can't wait to read what he writes when he gets older...


the death of romance, the unforgivable love and the seel of lust...


"i'll love you forever"... these words... so delicate.. so sweet... so... fake. humanity's bond to itself has always been based upon a similar understanding of another being. yet in this day and age can we really understand each other? or has the static on the television blurred us all into oblivion? can you really totally understand anyone? in these days that i live i've noticed how complicated it really is. how your mind flows, what you feelings are, and just you. in the old days there was just three things to understand: that bad things make bad feelings, that good things make good feelings, and that everything would work out. but today are any of those true? if someone forces himself upon your significant other, and you assault him. does this create good feelings, in whole? a feeling of retribution may be gratified upon your significant other. but what of all others in the universe? by hurting that one person, you could be hurting a million other people, and in turn from those million people, be hurting your significant other.
"i kiss you now, and it means an eternity"... so sweet with words were people. and how small were ears of the ones the words were going to. romance was based upon a blind sport. a few words to someone who knows not, and romance was born. but more and more the light is being shown, and romance is dying. the very essense of romance was based upon the feeling of right, the feeling of security and the feeling of of knowing that someone felt something for you. but now we've realized.. a few words mean nothing! i could say to whoever you are reading this: "you are my everything" and how could it be true? is my life suddently devoted to worshipping your every movement? worshipping the dirt you walk on? hardly...
"blame infatuation. blame imagination"... lust created love and romance and every essense of caring in a sexual or high emotional way. without lust the ideal of "love" or "romance" would have never existed. lust gave us something to wish for, and something to feel. even if it was "casual" there was always some bond gained in those acts. from there came the birth of love, tragedy and romance. i'm so sick of seeing people think lust is a bad thing. when actually it is just a prestep of love, that most people take into the wrong proportions. never blame the lust, just blame yourself.
 

Killbat

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Sounds good, but unfortunately I have to put it in the box labeled "Assorted, Generic, Depressing, Woe-Is-Me Teenager Writings."
 

toph99

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here's my friend's reply ;)

ack! killbat did not recognize that it was not meant as a depressing thing! i wrote that while being happy! while being just...open

that is also one of the things i rather dislike about my age... people dont' take me seriously.... yet if i were 30+ they woudl read it and view it as actual...writing

how's the centrifuge doin killbat? lol. find anything else to spin down?
 

Soybomb

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It really does scream teen I think! (which to mean is someone trying to write something "deep" but not having enough experience in the matter to write anywhere close to it) No offence meant to him though!