What do you think about this

MisfitsFiend

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Jun 19, 2001
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What do you think?? Feel free to tear it apart...

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I would like to take this opportunity to thank my research advisor, NN, whose inexhaustible guidance, encouragement, and most importantly, kindness, serves as an inspiration to all. Also, to the member of my thesis committee ? NN, NN, and NN ? for their invaluable assistance and direction throughout this entire process. Through this experience, I have gained a great deal of knowledge that I can take with me wherever I go.

I would like to express my gratitude to everyone in DD who I have come to know over the past few years. Your friendships and daily encounters have made this journey most enjoyable.

Most importantly, I need to express my heartfelt gratitude to my friends and family, especially my parents NNNN, for a lifetime of immeasurable love and support. Lastly, to my husband NN, whose patient love and encouragement guided me throughout this chapter of my life.
 

blackdogdeek

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Mar 14, 2003
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the only part i didn't like was ending one sentence with "throughout this entire process" and starting the next with "through this experience".

also, there is no verb in that preceding sentence :) (or for this matter 'phrase')

otherwise, it sounds fine to me.