thesis statement

[sonoma1993]

how does this look for a thesis statement?

Our country should be looking into building more nuclear fission power plants for an alternative energy source.

Should I reword the last part "for an alternative energy soure"

 

[SVT Cobra]

Originally posted by: sonoma1993
how does this look for a thesis statement?

Our country should be looking into building more nuclear fission power plants for an alternative energy source.

Should I reword the last part "for an alternative energy soure"

How about:

Recent trends show there is an overwhelming need for more research and information for an alternative energy source in the United States.


Never use "our", and your original sounds like an opinion.

 

[bobdelt]

why dont you just say, The us should build nuclear power plants yadda yadda yadda.

Should be looking into building..... Is a really weak statement.

 

[Baked]

Ask yourself why.

 

[DainBramaged]

Originally posted by: sonoma1993
how does this look for a thesis statement?

Our country should be looking into building more nuclear fission power plants for an alternative energy source.

Should I reword the last part "for an alternative energy soure"

"The United States needs to continue research and development into alternative energy sources, focusing primarily on nuclear fission power plants."

Better?

 

[maziwanka]

Originally posted by: Baked
Ask yourself why.

hahahahaha

to the OP, that thesis looks like its going to be monstrous

 

[ThaGrandCow]

Nuclear plants are gud. We need more.

 

[sonoma1993]

Originally posted by: DainBramaged

Originally posted by: sonoma1993
how does this look for a thesis statement?

Our country should be looking into building more nuclear fission power plants for an alternative energy source.

Should I reword the last part "for an alternative energy soure"

"The United States needs to continue research and development into alternative energy sources, focusing primarily on nuclear fission power plants."

Better?

thanks that looks alot better.

 

[SociallyChallenged]

Originally posted by: DainBramaged

Originally posted by: sonoma1993
how does this look for a thesis statement?

Our country should be looking into building more nuclear fission power plants for an alternative energy source.

Should I reword the last part "for an alternative energy soure"

"The United States needs to continue research and development into alternative energy sources, focusing primarily on nuclear fission power plants."

Better?

Yes, it sounds more specific and clarified. I like it.

 

[everman]

It should say what, because, and why. You only have what, and a weak why.

something like:
"The United States must construct more clean and safe nuclear power plants in order to reduce dependence on the dwindling supply of fossil fuels."

 

[Suspicious-Teach8788]

Umm you make 0 assertions in that thesis and you have no scope at all.

The thesis is the focus of your paper

 

[Suspicious-Teach8788]

Originally posted by: everman
It should say what, because, and why. You only have what, and a weak why.

There is no why. It says as an alternative energy source, but that 's not even a why. You basically have to interpret a why because your mind goes "Oh so you mean we should build nuclear power plants because they are one way of dealing with the scarcity of fossil fuels and pollution, blah blah"

 

[hjo3]

"Should be looking into" sounds vague and kind of weak. I might reword it thusly: "The U.S. should give greater attention to nuclear power as an energy source." or "Because of the benefits (and relatively few disadvantages) of nuclear energy, the U.S. should build more of these power plants."

 

[Goosemaster]

Originally posted by: Baked
Ask yourself why.

:thumbsup:

 

[DainBramaged]

Originally posted by: hjo3
"Should be looking into" sounds vague and kind of weak. I might reword it thusly: "The U.S. should give greater attention to nuclear power as an energy source." or "Because of the benefits (and relatively few disadvantages) of nuclear energy, the U.S. should build more of these power plants."

Don't listen to Henry. 😛:evil:

 

[MrChad]

Originally posted by: DLeRium
Umm you make 0 assertions in that thesis and you have no scope at all.

The thesis is the focus of your paper

Agreed. You should be able to read your thesis statement by itself and understand both your assertion and the main arguments you will make in your paper to prove that assertion.

 

[Scarpozzi]

How about, "Nuclear Power Yes Please!"

 

[sonoma1993]

thanks for the help everyone.