Resume Review! Please any feedback

[toekramp]

There is a position possibly opening up within my company that I highly desire. Basically I'd be responsible for installing a certain piece of software (developed within my team) to all the US Embassy's in the world... If you wouldn't mind giving this a quick once over I'd appreciate it .

Resume (.doc)

 

[Turkish]

fvckin sucks

 

[toekramp]

Originally posted by: Turkish
fvckin sucks

go back to turkey you dirty....oh wait you already did. GOOD!

 

[SuperFreaky]

trim it down to 1 page 1st

 

[HN]

you're gonna have contact info at the top right?

 

[toekramp]

Originally posted by: HN
you're gonna have contact info at the top right?

correct, just didn't wanna share it with everyone on here

 

[toekramp]

Originally posted by: SuperFreaky
trim it down to 1 page 1st

hellz no, 1 page != good when it comes to these types of positions. mo' info, mo' betta.

 

[spidey07]

from glancing over that I have no idea what you want to do or what your experience is in.

I also cannot follow a time line in employment history/accomplishments.

 

[tami]

looks good justin

 

[toekramp]

Originally posted by: spidey07
from glancing over that I have no idea what you want to do or what your experience is in.

I also cannot follow a time line in employment history.

alright, i understand your first statement, however i'm not sure why you have an issue with the timeline. are you commenting about the details of my positions, or the listing of employment at the bottom?

 

[toekramp]

Originally posted by: tami
looks good justin

thanks tami

 

[HN]

I think you should replace "Prior consultants unsuccessfully fulfilled the requirements." with an accomplishment of your own when you assumed the position (or take it out entirely).

i'm not used to seeing job accomplishments first and then job history after (usually see [job w/ dates and accomplishments for that job], then [job w/ dates and accomplishments] etc.). but if it's worked for you in the past then :thumbsup:

also, have all the same font and not center justified (but that's just cosmetic and minor)

 

[spidey07]

Originally posted by: toekramp

Originally posted by: spidey07
from glancing over that I have no idea what you want to do or what your experience is in.

I also cannot follow a time line in employment history.

alright, i understand your first statement, however i'm not sure why you have an issue with the timeline. are you commenting about the details of my positions, or the listing of employment at the bottom?

I'm used to seeing a progression of responsibilities and accomplishments - a timeline...a historical resume. Even technical resumes follow this style.

It helps to see how somebody has moved their career forward or have some direction like "hey, I'm really good a <this> and here's how I've become good at it"

just constructive criticism

 

[Strk]

You may want to correct the sentence fragments and the extra spacing between some periods and the beginning of the next sentence.

 

[HN]

Originally posted by: Strk
You may want to correct the sentence fragments and the extra spacing between some periods and the beginning of the next sentence.

that's due to the center justification

 

[jtusa]

Too wordy.

 

[akubi]

Turkish and SuperFreaky are right.

stick to the traditional format.
no one's gonna read that BS.

1 page for resume. anymore than that is a CV and that's only good for academic positions.

 

[Strk]

Originally posted by: HN

Originally posted by: Strk
You may want to correct the sentence fragments and the extra spacing between some periods and the beginning of the next sentence.

that's due to the center justification

No it isn't. In the paragraphs at the beginning, he does it several times.

 

[Bulldog13]

No offense or anything but that thing is horrendous. Not your accomplishments, those look outstanding, but the fact it took me 15 minutes to decode them.

 

[DaShen]

Originally posted by: SuperFreaky
trim it down to 1 page 1st

Unless you have 2-3 years of experience in the IT world, no need for more than a page. If you have more than that, than add more to it.

 

[DaWhim]

fvckin suck seconded.