Please rate my resume

MetalMat

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This is my first real resume that I am trying. Any help would be greatly apprectiated. I would like to keep it to one page. This is not exactly how it looks since it is a .doc file, but you can get the drift. I took out all my contact info in this for obvious reasons ;) I am thinking one thing I can do is take out the hobbies section, since I doubt employers are interested in that.

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Summary

I am finishing my studies in Electrical Engineering, with emphasis in computer engineering and mathematics. Pursuit of a career position as an engineer with emphasis in both engineering and communications. I am a self-starter and have totally financed my education.

Objective:
To secure a position as an entry-level electrical engineer. Specialization in computer interfacing as well as communications. Am willing to relocateand pursue further education as required by employer.

Education:
High school - Comeaux High School, Lafayette, Louisiana, 1999

College - BS, Degree in Electrical Engineering / minor in Mathematics. Cum GPA 3.1
University of Louisiana at Lafayette (UL), Lafayette, Louisiana, 2005

Work Experience:
December 2003 ? Present: Video technician & IT
HUB ENTERPRISES, Lafayette, Louisiana
Phone: 337.837.2608

I was instrumental in researching / designing, setting up, documenting and training of a new video processing laboratory. This laboratory is required to process ?8mm? tape via video-implemented computers. The videotapes are edited, re-rendered, and scanned. Various ?still? extractions are taken and all is saved to a ?video vault?. Once the video is processed it is then integrated into reports that are distributed nation-wide. I was required to research different programs, hardware and techniques to acquire an efficient method for producing the best quality streaming video and, at the same time, bulk process hundreds of videos per week. I was also held responsible for procuring, testing and setting up the computers and the respective video equipment. My immediate supervisor, a computer engineer and director of the IT department, taught me basic networking skills. I have also had various programming tasks and have experience in C++ and Automenu.

August 1998? August 2003
Various jobs: waiter, cook, etc. to support myself while in college. (Particulars available)

Personal:
Current address:

Phone: , Cell: , E-mail:


 

WingZero94

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Never put references available. Just have a sheet ready if they ask for it. Also, Navy ROTC.... did you quit? If so, probably not a good thing to put on there.
 

MetalMat

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Originally posted by: WingZero94
Never put references available. Just have a sheet ready if they ask for it. Also, Navy ROTC.... did you quit? If so, probably not a good thing to put on there.


Whoops, it was the JROTC. I did not quit, I just took 3 years (started my sophmore year).
 

Drakkon

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how were you in ROTC for 3 years and also never had a break in jobs?
 

MetalMat

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Originally posted by: Drakkon
how were you in ROTC for 3 years and also never had a break in jobs?

JROTC. Not sure if I should keep that in though.
 

tfinch2

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Where do you list your skills?

Take off hobbies, personal info. Why would they care about your height/weight?
 

WingZero94

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also - various jobs:..... put the stuff related to what you are going to be doing. Don't make them guess

Personal... put address information at top with phone number and email

Hobbies... nobody really cares... instead put SKILLS what you can do for them!

DOB - don't put this on there.... HR legals bs

High school education doesn't really matter

 

WingZero94

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Take out ROTC.... change synopsis to objective or summary.... and then tell them what you are looking for
 

MetalMat

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Originally posted by: WingZero94
also - various jobs:..... put the stuff related to what you are going to be doing. Don't make them guess

Personal... put address information at top with phone number and email

Hobbies... nobody really cares... instead put SKILLS what you can do for them!

DOB - don't put this on there.... HR legals bs

High school education doesn't really matter

Thanks for the help, I figured Hobbies needed to go. As far as other jobs, besides working here on and off all my other jobs were not really technical (lube tech, waiter, paper shredder, cook, drive-thru etc.)
 

chrisms

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Am I the only one who thinks it looks tacky to have "I want" and "my" in there? Aren't you supposed to keep "I" out of a resume? Maybe on the cover letter but the resume should be more professional
 

MetalMat

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Originally posted by: chrisms
Am I the only one who thinks it looks tacky to have "I want" and "my" in there? Aren't you supposed to keep "I" out of a resume? Maybe on the cover letter but the resume should be more professional


I dont have a cover letter, I figured the summary (or synopsis) would be good enough.
 

Legend

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Put your contact info at the top with some sort of border to seperate it. Why do you have your date of birth, weight and height? Especially for this sort of job.

High school information is irrelevant.

Your work experience section is too cluttered. I didn't even read it.

Only put in relevant technical hobbies, like "I like to build and mod computer hardware" for some sort of computer job would be good.

Never abbreviate, it gives the impression that you're lazy.

Don't do the objective stuff, be open to any job. Never limit yourself.

It needs a lot more work.
 

WingZero94

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You will still need a cover letter...

As for your other jobs, you can relate your customer service experience or show how good of employee you were at any task. It shows motivation and experience in a work environment.
 

monk3y

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You might want to add a skills section and mention what skills you have picked up along the way or have always had.
 

RaynorWolfcastle

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most recent education goes on top. Mentioning high school is really not necessary unless you did something fantastic, nobody gives a crap about your high school ed once you're in college. Put your work experience in point form, no one is going to read the novel you wrote there.

Put in any particular skills you have relating to a possible job, since you're an EE I'd assume you know some simulation software (PSPice, Cadence, ADS), some math packages (Matlab, Mathematica, Maple), some programming (C/C++/Java). Put whatever skills are relevant to what you're applying for. You should also include any projects you've done that you think are relevant to the job.

 

OulOat

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Take out that paragraph in your work experience. Replace with bullets and action verbs. IE.

*Research different programs, hardware and techniques to acquire an efficient method for producing the best quality streaming video and bulk processing for hundreds of videos per week
*Designed and developed a new video processing laboratory to process ?8mm? tape via video-implemented computers based on previous research

HR people don't have time to read your life story, so keep it short and to the point.

Good read, especially #8
 

WingZero94

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Originally posted by: Legend
Put your contact info at the top with some sort of border to seperate it. Why do you have your date of birth, weight and height? Especially for this sort of job.

High school information is irrelevant.

Your work experience section is too cluttered. I didn't even read it.

Only put in relevant technical hobbies, like "I like to build and mod computer hardware" for some sort of computer job would be good.

Never abbreviate, it gives the impression that you're lazy.

Don't do the objective stuff, be open to any job. Never limit yourself.

It needs a lot more work.


I disagree with the objective...... I think you should focus on one specific type of job and tailor your resume and cover letter to it. I believe people think we should broaden ourselves, but I believe that to be wrong. Focus on what you are good at and like and your job satisfaction will go up.
 

OulOat

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Originally posted by: MetalMat
Originally posted by: chrisms
Am I the only one who thinks it looks tacky to have "I want" and "my" in there? Aren't you supposed to keep "I" out of a resume? Maybe on the cover letter but the resume should be more professional


I dont have a cover letter, I figured the summary (or synopsis) would be good enough.

Cover letters are always necessary. No exceptions. They are to highlight and expand your abilities for the employer. I know they are a pain to write, but, like any good resumes, with a few modifications you can reuse it for different applications.