Please critique this resume

[bolido2000]

Doing this for a friend. It seems that the descriptions are a bit long. Maybe someone familiar with web design resumes can chime in. Name and company names changed
Thanks!

Resume

 

[NuroMancer]

Security Violation
You lose

 

[leftyman]

you are fired.

 

[sao123]

Originally posted by: bolido2000
Doing this for a friend. It seems that the descriptions are a bit long. Maybe someone familiar with web design resumes can chime in. Name and company names changed
Thanks!

Resume

I refuse to help anyone on the internet who hands out resumees with fake names and company names on it.

 

[dainthomas]

Originally posted by: leftyman
you are fired.

Wait for the thread critiquing his resume tomorrow.

 

[HN]

-move the work experience to the top

-you don't need both "Computer Technician" listings as they both pretty much say the same thing (especially the second bullet point)

-the second bullet point under "Web Design and Development" i see as a description of the website instead of an actual accomplishment of the person.

-come up with another term (or rewrite) for "Design and programmed"; i count 3 times and "Designed and created" is teetering on 4.

 

[Golgatha]

Your objective should be more "them" centric, as in what are you bringing to the table instead of what type of position you're looking for. Overall it's a bit wordy and you focus on what you accomplished instead of what impact your accomplishments had on the bottom line. Give an example of something you accomplished and follow up with the positive impact it had on the business.

e.g. Provided preventative maintenance for and ran analyses on three separate HPLC systems for our synthesis group. Minimized downtime of systems and provided CoA data in a timely manner to ensure client satisfaction, resulting in repeat work for our group.

 

[bolido2000]

Some good suggestions. Keep them coming.