Please critique my rough draft

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Originally posted by: trOver
anandtech does not count as "peer editing"...

meh, my essay is pretty shitty. it'll require a lot of revising. i just changed my intro a little bit if anyone cares.

The American Dream for many is to run their own business. There is no better feeling than the freedom of being your own boss, having total control of your business, and ultimately, watching your company prosper. Unfortunately, the odds are stacked against most entrepreneurs, and the success rate for starting companies is very low. For many people, starting your own business can be overwhelming. It is easy to become discouraged with larger businesses competing in the same market. For that reason, it is important to understand the kind of market your business will be targeting; one must consider the age of his or her clients as well as their location. The people you meet are also equated into how successful your business will become. Despite these barriers, the experiences I have gained from starting a small web hosting business were invaluable.