Need someone to help me reviewing the following paragraphs..

[Pongpan]

This project aims to monitor the level of the network traffic flowing through network switches or DSLAM in order to investigate the time periods when the network activity is highest or lowest. In addition, this project is capable of monitoring the status of networking devices in the system and alerts the administrator in case a network switch or DSLAM stops operating.

The status of the network can be viewed from anywhere using a web-based interface. The system also keeps the network usage statistics. The benefits of this are managing the network easier, improving efficiency, optimizing the load balance, and preventing the congestion of the network. This system can also facilitate the troubleshooting and diagnostic process of the network problems. By monitoring and analyzing the data of the network traffic circulated in a system, it helps to prevent and solve various potential problems quickly and correctly.


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[ggnl]

Originally posted by: Pongpan

This project aims to monitor the level of network traffic flowing through network switches or DSLAM in order to investigate time periods of lowest or highest network activity. In addition, this project will enable monitoring of the status of networking devices in the system, and will alert the administrator in case a network switch or DSLAM stops operating.

Network status can be viewed from anywhere via a web-based interface. The system also keeps network usage statistics. The benefits of this include easier network management, improved efficiency, optimization of load balance, and prevention of network congestion.

This system can also facilitate the troubleshooting and diagnostic process of network problems. By monitoring and analyzing the data of network traffic circulated in a system, it helps to prevent and solve various potential problems quickly and correctly.


Thank you.

Edited to be slightly more concise.

 

[GasX]

the project doesn't aim

 

[Red Irish]

Originally posted by: GasX
the project doesn't aim

sets out to?

 

[Newbian]

Needs more hookers and blow if you want people to even try.

 

[Pongpan]

Very good. Thank you!

 

[nerp]

Originally posted by: Pongpan

The goal of this project is to monitor network traffic flowing through switches or DSLAM with the purpose of identifying peak and lowest traffic levels. The project includes status monitoring and can send administrator alerts in the event a switch or DSLAM fails.

Network status is avaible through a web-based interface, providing access wherever internet is available. The system also keeps network usage statistics. This makes managing the network easier and improves efficiency, optimizes the load balance and avoids network congestion. Additionally, troubleshooting and diagnostic operations are facilitied.

The key to solving problems quickly is an active system with complete realtime monitoring and data collection capabilities.

My rewite, focusing on brevity and clarity. You can eliminate a lot of extra words by rephrasing many sentences.

 

[Pongpan]

I like that first sentense of the second paragraph. Thank you.