Kroze
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My teacher said that i have tense problems and she gave me a break down of how many mistakes there are in each paragraph. English is not my primary language so it's freaking hard to figured it out. Can anyone help me?
Here's the breakdown of how many errors there are in each paragraph.
First Paragraph: 2
Second Paragraph: 1
Third Paragraph: 4
Fourth Paragraph: 2
Fifth Paragraph: 0
She said that it's tense that i have problem with.
Jobs We Love to Hate
In the essay ?Brett Hauser: Supermarket Box Boy,? by Studs Terkel, Brett portrays a typical job that most of us had held and hated through the eyes and experiences of a teenager. It is very interesting because I am assured that most of us can relate to a job that we all once had in our life time. Whether the job was to pick up trash after people or to sit in an office cubicle all day, we all hated it. I cannot stand working another day at TJ Max even if my life were to depend on it. The outrageous duties I had to do, the lousy managements, and the horrible conditions I had to put up with are the reasons why I left and never looked back.
Some of the duties I did while working there were degrading for a teenager like me. The day started with me cleaning the bathrooms. It makes you wonder how nasty and dirty the general public is from the nauseating smell and sickening stains on the floor. After spending a good hour or two cleaning the bathroom, my next job was to pick up all the trash. The bags they used for these trash cans must have been the cheapest they can get it for because all they did was rip. One time the trash bag ripped as I was making my way to the dumpster and trash was everywhere in the middle of the store. Of course I was the one responsible for cleaning the mess up while taking all the bickering from managements of my carelessness.
Not only did I have some of the most glorious duties in the world, I also had to deal with the lousy management that the company hires. They do not care what I have to say and treated me poorly. My wages were at a level comparable to some of the children working in a third world countries. While being underpaid, I am expected to be a model employee who has to show up fifteen minutes early everyday to work. If I was one minute late to work, it would then be used as an excuse to give me the lowest raise humanly possible when the time comes.
Since I was degraded and underpaid, they decided to put more responsibilities on my shoulder by making me a cashier. The conditions that I have to deal with as a cashier were preposterous. The customers would yell on the top of their lungs like someone had killed their cat because the price showed up different than what they saw in last month?s advertisement. The manager would show up and embarrass me by agreeing with the customer and think that they have saved the day from my blunder. The worst part was the end of the day where if the cash register was short or over a few pennies, they make me sign a piece of paper similar to a death sentence saying that the register is short or over. It is sadistic because there would be three different people using the same register but one who uses it last would get the blame. Up until this day, I still do not know what the purpose of signing the death sentence is for other than to make the employees feel like a bunch of dishonest criminals.
After spending six months there, I had finally seen clearly that there are better places to work for than TJ Max. Let?s just say I quit and no one could pay me enough to come back to work for TJ Max ever again. The degrading duties, lousy management, and the horrible conditions I had to put up with are not worth any amount of money for me to come back. I am sure by now they have found themselves a new teenage victim that is willing to do the work that I did. Soon enough though, he or she will see the facts that since there are millions of other fish in the sea, why do I have to put up with this one? As for me, no one can put a price on it because I will never do anything that will degrade me like working at TJ Max ever again.
Here's the breakdown of how many errors there are in each paragraph.
First Paragraph: 2
Second Paragraph: 1
Third Paragraph: 4
Fourth Paragraph: 2
Fifth Paragraph: 0
She said that it's tense that i have problem with.
Jobs We Love to Hate
In the essay ?Brett Hauser: Supermarket Box Boy,? by Studs Terkel, Brett portrays a typical job that most of us had held and hated through the eyes and experiences of a teenager. It is very interesting because I am assured that most of us can relate to a job that we all once had in our life time. Whether the job was to pick up trash after people or to sit in an office cubicle all day, we all hated it. I cannot stand working another day at TJ Max even if my life were to depend on it. The outrageous duties I had to do, the lousy managements, and the horrible conditions I had to put up with are the reasons why I left and never looked back.
Some of the duties I did while working there were degrading for a teenager like me. The day started with me cleaning the bathrooms. It makes you wonder how nasty and dirty the general public is from the nauseating smell and sickening stains on the floor. After spending a good hour or two cleaning the bathroom, my next job was to pick up all the trash. The bags they used for these trash cans must have been the cheapest they can get it for because all they did was rip. One time the trash bag ripped as I was making my way to the dumpster and trash was everywhere in the middle of the store. Of course I was the one responsible for cleaning the mess up while taking all the bickering from managements of my carelessness.
Not only did I have some of the most glorious duties in the world, I also had to deal with the lousy management that the company hires. They do not care what I have to say and treated me poorly. My wages were at a level comparable to some of the children working in a third world countries. While being underpaid, I am expected to be a model employee who has to show up fifteen minutes early everyday to work. If I was one minute late to work, it would then be used as an excuse to give me the lowest raise humanly possible when the time comes.
Since I was degraded and underpaid, they decided to put more responsibilities on my shoulder by making me a cashier. The conditions that I have to deal with as a cashier were preposterous. The customers would yell on the top of their lungs like someone had killed their cat because the price showed up different than what they saw in last month?s advertisement. The manager would show up and embarrass me by agreeing with the customer and think that they have saved the day from my blunder. The worst part was the end of the day where if the cash register was short or over a few pennies, they make me sign a piece of paper similar to a death sentence saying that the register is short or over. It is sadistic because there would be three different people using the same register but one who uses it last would get the blame. Up until this day, I still do not know what the purpose of signing the death sentence is for other than to make the employees feel like a bunch of dishonest criminals.
After spending six months there, I had finally seen clearly that there are better places to work for than TJ Max. Let?s just say I quit and no one could pay me enough to come back to work for TJ Max ever again. The degrading duties, lousy management, and the horrible conditions I had to put up with are not worth any amount of money for me to come back. I am sure by now they have found themselves a new teenage victim that is willing to do the work that I did. Soon enough though, he or she will see the facts that since there are millions of other fish in the sea, why do I have to put up with this one? As for me, no one can put a price on it because I will never do anything that will degrade me like working at TJ Max ever again.
