Is this sentence punctuated correctly?

[SithSolo1]

To my knowledge the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office, so I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.

 

[conjur]

Originally posted by: SithSolo1
To my knowledge, the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office. Therefore, I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.

 

[edro]

To my knowledge, the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office, therefore, I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.

Yeah, or you could break it up into 2 sentences.

 

[Eli]

Originally posted by: conjur

Originally posted by: SithSolo1
To my knowledge, the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office. Therefore, I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.

 

[simms]

To my knowledge the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office; I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.

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[Eli]

Originally posted by: simms
To my knowledge the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office; I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.

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That would technically be correct too.

 

[merlocka]

The drive has not been tampered with. I am returning the hard drive for inspection.

You have too many extra words

 

[Spooner]

Originally posted by: merlocka
The drive has not been tampered with. I am returning the hard drive for inspection.
You have too many extra words

You can't end your sentence with "with"

 

[agnitrate]

Originally posted by: Spooner

Originally posted by: merlocka
The drive has not been tampered with. I am returning the hard drive for inspection.
You have too many extra words

You can't end your sentence with "with"

Why the hell not, with?

-silver

 

[Indolent]

AHH D.O.L!!! (daily oral language)

 

[Jzero]

Originally posted by: Spooner

Originally posted by: merlocka
The drive has not been tampered with, you jerks. I am returning the hard drive for inspection.
You have too many extra words

You can't end your sentence with "with"

How's that, then?

 

[ragazzo]

Actually, it is now acceptable to end a sentence with a preposition. However, I do not like how there are two prepositions next to each other. Better way, in my opinion, is to state it like this:

To the best of my knowledge, no one in my office has tampered with the hard drive and thus, I am returning it to you for inspection. Thank you.

Feel free to rate me ;-)

 

[merlocka]

Originally posted by: ragazzo
Actually, it is now acceptable to end a sentence with a preposition. However, I do not like how there are two prepositions next to each other. Better way, in my opinion, is to state it like this:

To the best of my knowledge, no one in my office has tampered with the hard drive and thus, I am returning it to you for inspection. Thank you.

Feel free to rate me ;-)

I've always hated the condition "to the best of my knowledge". If you need to tell someone that this is the best of your knowledge, what is the rest of the stuff you send out

 

[tkdkid]

Originally posted by: edro13
To my knowledge, the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office, therefore, I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.

Yeah, or you could break it up into 2 sentences.

Wouldn't you write that like this?
To my knowledge, the drive has not been tampered with by anyone in my office; therefore, I am returning the hard drive to you for inspection.