Is this an ok thesis statement?

[Nocturnal]

You win some, you lose some, but you might not always live to race another day.

My essay is going to be on illegal street racing.

I'm trying to do my outline right now.

Any and all help is appreciated.

 

[pyonir]

are you writing it in favor of street racing? if so you are wrong. you DON'T live to race another day some of the time.

 

[Nocturnal]

I corrected my thesis.

 

[Nocturnal]

This is for a cause and effect essay, forgot to mention that, sorry!

 

[pyonir]

hahah....ok...that looks a lot better. sounds good for a start.

 

[b0mbrman]

Sounds more like the start of an introductory anecdote than a thesis...

 

[kt]

His statement gives me the impression he's against street racing.. or am I wrong?

 

[Nocturnal]

yeah i figured that you wont always live to see another day when street racing lol. thanks man!

 

[b0mbrman]

The actual thesis (thing you're trying to prove) would be "Street racing is wicked bad"

 

[Nocturnal]

could i say, street racing is a fun thing to do, until you crash and die?

 

[MisterNi]

All your thesis' sound like hooks.

A good thesis would be a statement you plan on proving on proving like:
"Street racers are often drunk idiots with penis envy." And go on to show why they're drunk idiots and why they have penis envy.