I wrote my second story, someone please critique this...

[Braznor]

I could not help it, my creative juices are overflowing 🙂

Here is the second story I have finished, a much shorter one than the first I posted here earlier. Someone tell me how good is this??

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[nycxandy]

Cliffs?!

 

[Braznor]

Originally posted by: nycxandy
Cliffs?!

🙁

 

[yankeesfan]

Ahem. You "wrote" your second story.

Anyway, it's pretty good. You really need to proofread, though.

 

[Sinsear]

I reads like one of those SAT reading comprehension passages.

 

[Braznor]

Shameless bump!