Help with Sentence

[Mayfriday0529]

"The mission, to break into the energy plant at Oil City. "

Word keeps complaining about.

I re-wrote it to "To break into Oil City was our mission"

what do you think?

 

[Zim Hosein]

"The mission was to break into the energy plant at Oil City."

 

[RandomFool]

you're allowed to ignore word if you'd like. But either way sounds fine to me.

 

[bradruth]

"Our mission was to break in to the Oil City energy plant."

 

[Mayfriday0529]

Thanks guys.

 

[akubi]

Originally posted by: RandomFool
you're allowed to ignore word if you'd like. But either way sounds fine to me.

first two sentences are not even complete sentences.

 

[Lynx516]

Either "The mission : to break into the ...." or "The mission was/is ...." there is something called a verb.

Same with your title Help with a sentence would make more sense. Especially as capatalising sentence makes it sound like a propper noun. In other words there are more than one sentences in existance so use a.

 

[BrokenVisage]

"All of your bases are now under our control!"

 

[HN]

i bet it won't complain if you use a colon instead of a comma.

 

[Mayfriday0529]

how about this

"Our mission was to break in to the Oil City energy plant, and reach the top of one of two towers."

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: Jnetty99
"The mission, to break into the energy plant at Oil City. "

There is no verb in that sentence. What you wrote was a headline or a title. You did not write a sentence.

I re-wrote it to "To break into Oil City was our mission"

That is a very clumsy sentence. The subject and the verb should come as close to the beginning of the sentence as possible in English.

 

[Otaking]

The first way of writing the sentence had no verb! :Q And the rewrite is in passive voice...

 

[RandomFool]

Originally posted by: akubi

Originally posted by: RandomFool
you're allowed to ignore word if you'd like. But either way sounds fine to me.

first two sentences are not even complete sentences.

I figured that he was planning on using it in a longer sentence like:

The mission, to break into the energy plant at Oil City, was really quite stupid.
OR
To break into Oil City was our mission which as it turns out was really quite stupid.

 

[BlueWeasel]

Change "in to" to one word, and no comma is necessary to split the sentence.

 

[tami]

why are you breaking into the energy plant?

 

[Sex Smurf]

It sounds fine if you use a Captain Kirk accent.

 

[Mayfriday0529]

Originally posted by: tami
why are you breaking into the energy plant?

I'm writing a fictional narrative story for a school assigment.

 

[yellowg555]

The mission called for a break-in into Oil City.

Not in the passive voice anymore, although following break-in with the word into seems kind of awkward.

 

[HN]

Originally posted by: yellowg555
The mission called for a break-in into Oil City.

Not in the passive voice anymore, although following break-in with the word into seems kind of awkward.

it really is.

change the comma to colon, 'was', or 'is' in the original sentence (like Zim's suggestion above). more obtuse or jumbling words around doesn't make it better.

 

[akubi]

Originally posted by: Jnetty99

Originally posted by: tami
why are you breaking into the energy plant?

I'm writing a fictional narrative story for a school assigment.

infiltrate has a better ring than break in