help me make my resume not suck

[Fayd]

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yeah... it pretty much sucks. I'm having trouble thinking of better sentences for the experience section, and i cant write a skills section worth shit.

it looks better than it did before, but now it still looks pretty bad.

i wish i had written down what i did when i did it when i was working, so that i'd have a wealth to work with for putting together a resume. currently, i'm working on just memory and it's not going so well.

 

[gorcorps]

way too many capitals... things like 'vault records', 'performed investigative auditing', etc don't need capitalization on every word. It makes you look like an amateur who doesn't know basic english. Also, those black bars are ugly as hell. I'd get rid of those if I were you.

 

[Farang]

your layout is horrible fix that first

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

So I see a degree in Econ, then an Intern position after a "consultant" position and a lack of hard skills. You need to go see a professional, because the amount of help you need costs money.

 

[Capt Caveman]

It does suck, indeed.

 

[OUCaptain]

Bachelor of Arts in Economics
California State University

There's not much that can be done with that

Unless High Times is hiring

 

[Farang]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
So I see a degree in Econ, then an Intern position after a "consultant" position and a lack of hard skills. You need to go see a professional, because the amount of help you need costs money.

also ignore assholes like this, they get cocky because unlike the rest of us they popped out of their mother with a J.D. from Harvard and twenty years experience

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

Originally posted by: Farang

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
So I see a degree in Econ, then an Intern position after a "consultant" position and a lack of hard skills. You need to go see a professional, because the amount of help you need costs money.

also ignore assholes like this, they get cocky because unlike the rest of us they popped out of their mother with a J.D. from Harvard and twenty years experience

Hardly. I hire people...I see "consultant" before "intern" in the timeline, I see "bullshit" on titles. Thrown. In. Trash.

 

[Fayd]

Originally posted by: gorcorps
way too many capitals... things like 'vault records', 'performed investigative auditing', etc don't need capitalization on every word. It makes you look like an amateur who doesn't know basic english. Also, those black bars are ugly as hell. I'd get rid of those if I were you.

seeing as both companies are less than 20 people, putting the actual company name would make it traceable to me easily.

thus, ugly black bars for posting it on atot >.>

 

[Fayd]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Farang

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
So I see a degree in Econ, then an Intern position after a "consultant" position and a lack of hard skills. You need to go see a professional, because the amount of help you need costs money.

also ignore assholes like this, they get cocky because unlike the rest of us they popped out of their mother with a J.D. from Harvard and twenty years experience

Hardly. I hire people...I see "consultant" before "intern" in the timeline, I see "bullshit" on titles. Thrown. In. Trash.

that's what the job title i was hired for was called, as told to me by, well, the person who employed me. it's a small time LLC that was doing contract work for another larger company, which was still smaller than 20 people. you wanna suggest a better title?

 

[JS80]

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
So I see a degree in Econ, then an Intern position after a "consultant" position and a lack of hard skills. You need to go see a professional, because the amount of help you need costs money.

lol wtf? he has good experience for someone that just graduated.

 

[gorcorps]

Originally posted by: Fayd

Originally posted by: gorcorps
way too many capitals... things like 'vault records', 'performed investigative auditing', etc don't need capitalization on every word. It makes you look like an amateur who doesn't know basic english. Also, those black bars are ugly as hell. I'd get rid of those if I were you.

seeing as both companies are less than 20 people, putting the actual company name would make it traceable to me easily.

thus, ugly black bars for posting it on atot >.>

whooosh

it was a joke

 

[skim milk]

it sucks pretty bad

and I hate when people overuse the title "consultant". Your position was more like a "contractor", not a true consultant

 

[Fayd]

Originally posted by: gorcorps

Originally posted by: Fayd

Originally posted by: gorcorps
way too many capitals... things like 'vault records', 'performed investigative auditing', etc don't need capitalization on every word. It makes you look like an amateur who doesn't know basic english. Also, those black bars are ugly as hell. I'd get rid of those if I were you.

seeing as both companies are less than 20 people, putting the actual company name would make it traceable to me easily.

thus, ugly black bars for posting it on atot >.>

whooosh

it was a joke

🙁

seriously tho, does anybody have any suggestions with regard to specific content?

can you get a general idea of what i was doing for them from that content?

 

[RaistlinZ]

The bullets in your resume should always try to show how you added value to the company, either by increasing profits/productivity/customer service, saving the company money/time/resources, or fixing a unique problem. And you can re-word it to be more streamlined and in the active voice.

For instance, instead of the wordy "Analyzed the situation and presented recommendations for computer upgrades that resulted in increased reliability and productivity" you can say, Increased reliability and productivity through hardware upgrade recommendations. Just be sure that during your interview you have at least one solid example of how you solely accomplished this from your recommendations.

Your layout is also rather bland and boring. It looks like any one of a million templates out there.

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

Originally posted by: Fayd

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend

Originally posted by: Farang

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
So I see a degree in Econ, then an Intern position after a "consultant" position and a lack of hard skills. You need to go see a professional, because the amount of help you need costs money.

also ignore assholes like this, they get cocky because unlike the rest of us they popped out of their mother with a J.D. from Harvard and twenty years experience

Hardly. I hire people...I see "consultant" before "intern" in the timeline, I see "bullshit" on titles. Thrown. In. Trash.

that's what the job title i was hired for was called, as told to me by, well, the person who employed me. it's a small time LLC that was doing contract work for another larger company, which was still smaller than 20 people. you wanna suggest a better title?

I'll go ahead and tell you that anybody who will call you a "consultant" before you have any legit experience is giving you a fluff title that means nothing.

From your resume...either clerk or auditor.

 

[SacrosanctFiend]

Originally posted by: JS80

Originally posted by: SacrosanctFiend
So I see a degree in Econ, then an Intern position after a "consultant" position and a lack of hard skills. You need to go see a professional, because the amount of help you need costs money.

lol wtf? he has good experience for someone that just graduated.

He has decent experience. However, it's not presented well.

 

[skim milk]

so what have you been doing since May 08?

 

[JS80]

What type of job are you trying to get?

 

[Fayd]

Originally posted by: skim milk
so what have you been doing since May 08?

umm.. exercise, sports, video games.

yeah, i know, that's gonna look terrible for me.

 

[Fayd]

Originally posted by: JS80
What type of job are you trying to get?

ideally: contracts, auditor, something indirectly related to my degree in some fashion (yeah, right..)

realistically: anything that pays enough to live on... i live in SoCal, but i'm willing to move anywhere where it's warm. so i hopefully can find something.

 

[Fayd]

Originally posted by: RaistlinZ
The bullets in your resume should always try to show how you added value to the company, either by increasing profits/productivity/customer service, saving the company money/time/resources, or fixing a unique problem. And you can re-word it to be more streamlined and in the active voice.

For instance, instead of the wordy "Analyzed the situation and presented recommendations for computer upgrades that resulted in increased reliability and productivity" you can say, Increased reliability and productivity through hardware upgrade recommendations. Just be sure that during your interview you have at least one solid example of how you solely accomplished this from your recommendations.

Your layout is also rather bland and boring. It looks like any one of a million templates out there.

so push the added value to the company to the front of the sentence? and should i be ending the sentences with periods?


tomorrow i'll reupdate it with added changes.

i dont know how to make it look non bland and boring. i'm an econ major, not an art major 🙁 i was thinking a bit of color in non-content parts, but i was under the impression that businesses frowned on that.

 

[Fayd]

edit... uh...

 

[Fayd]

the second work where i was doing "auditing of vault records", was literally auditing vault records. for a company like iron mountain, i was contracted to go into the vault and search for something that they were under the impression had either been misplaced or otherwise gone missing. but i cant think of a better way to phrase it.

with the first company, where i was doing the conversion of records retention, they had a records retention scheme that was in-house. really, it was huge stacks of cardboard boxes in the office and at an offsite storage locker. what i did was convert the entire system over to corovan. is there any way i can rephrase that to make it sound...better?

i dont want to get too much into the financial report compilations, cause tbh, all the work probably could have been done with a batch script. and i did manage to script a vast majority of it, so the actual work i was doing was significantly less than the person who gave me the job told me to do.(append this report to this report to this report to this report...no, fuck that, write a batch script with ghostscript.) could have done it all with a batch script if i knew how to use batch script for accessing access databases.

 

[MrChad]

Originally posted by: Fayd

Originally posted by: JS80
What type of job are you trying to get?

ideally: contracts, auditor, something indirectly related to my degree in some fashion (yeah, right..)

realistically: anything that pays enough to live on... i live in SoCal, but i'm willing to move anywhere where it's warm. so i hopefully can find something.

Try tailoring your bullet points so that they highlight why you would be valuable to your prospective employer. For instance, all of your skills section highlights your computer skills, but for a non-technical job I don't imagine that an employer cares if you are an "Intermediate User in GNU/Linux". You might want to play up soft skills, such as "great team player", "detail oriented", "strong written and oral communication skills".