Help me improve my resume

[LostHiWay]

Link to Resume PDF

Take a look at my resume and let me know of any pointers you can give me.

Thanks!!

 

[yruffostsif]

Too much blah blah in qualifications, put your Keywords all on the same row. SQL, Coldfusion, Visual Basic, etc.

 

[jimmyhaha]

what's up with the sentence starting with spearhead with bah bah bah?

looks like a cliche...

 

[theNEOone]

well it seems that you're lacking a solid format. i'm not familiar with the IT industry, though, so i can't talk about their standards. here's what i would change, but i'm no expert so just consider my suggestions lightly

1) the qualifications section seems superfluous and self-serving. it's easy to say you're dynamic and have leadership skills - prove it by showing examples from previous experience (which you've done to some extent, so it's useless to write it twice.)

2) whoops, did you forget to proofread? "preformed?" (last bullet of MSC experience.)

3) you seem to like using "increased productivity/efficiency." it gets old after a while, and to a reader who takes 30 seconds to scan your resume, it sounds like you're listing the same thing 10 different times, regardless of whether or not it's the same project/accomplishment.

4) try to include an "activities/skills" section to include languages or misc. activites that show exhibit transferable skills.

5) your position as an assistant office manager lacks impact. although it may not have been the most glamoros position, you need to show everything in a positive light. "helped to work on getting the first internet connection to the company" sounds awkward. try, "provided expertise to upper management in preparation for internet connectivity" or something along those lines. your next two bullets could also use some work.

6) you graduated in 2003 - so are you an older individual that went back to school, or are you 22-23? if the former, i'd list some previous experience, even if it doesn't exactly relate to the job you're applying to. employers are always looking for transferbale skills. if you're a recent grad, i'd list some relevant coursework and any activities you had time for, in addition to working full time.

that's all doc. good luck in your job search.



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[whaleskinrug]

"e-projects" -- just say projects or technical projects
--when you claim an accomplishment try to be more specific -- like cut $350,000 from budget while improving x by 35%
--when you talk about these IT plans and architectures it is extrmely vague. also, what is that company, what do they do, how large are they? It could be that you were a web designer for a one person company or something far more impressive. let the reader know.

"Helped to work on" sounds very awkward

good luck

 

[munruss]

Do yourself a favor, get out of IT. It's deadend and boring.

 

[Ness]

That's a resume? It looked like a shory novel to me.

I don't want to see a single full sentence in there, else I'm not reading it, and I'm sure employers think the same thing.

 

[flexy]

i think that resume is not that good either.

Many sentences are too general instead of being more specific and detailed. Employees want to see specific skills listed, Operating systems, programming languages. Projects listed etc...

Get shorter and clearer and more specific instead of keeping the employer guessing. IMHO.

greets

Edit: too many 'IT blah' statements. It's clear that it has to do with "IT blah blah" since thats what you apply for and your skills are in. Otherwise "IT architecture" and "IT standard", "IT department" are totally worthless...it doesn't say anything what you actually DID.