- Mar 15, 2003
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Hey,
A bud of mine worked on a writing a short film.. Something that we don't hope to win any award with but just to have on our portfolios.. Anyway, so we wrote a barebones story and then I edited it.. He prefers the barebone one to the draft that I wrote- what do you guys think? Each will take only a minute or so to read please help out if you can .. Thanks!
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p.s. of course they're filled with typos.. They're very rough drafts so keep snotty anal comments about grammar to yourself.. or be judged as both snotty and anal - the choice is yours
A bud of mine worked on a writing a short film.. Something that we don't hope to win any award with but just to have on our portfolios.. Anyway, so we wrote a barebones story and then I edited it.. He prefers the barebone one to the draft that I wrote- what do you guys think? Each will take only a minute or so to read please help out if you can .. Thanks!
Version 1
Version 2
p.s. of course they're filled with typos.. They're very rough drafts so keep snotty anal comments about grammar to yourself.. or be judged as both snotty and anal - the choice is yours